Genius in Love
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Comment from Ulla
Hi jay, I'm listening while I'm writing this. Yes, it would be Cornelius playing. I can just imagine it.
Howard is worse than a philistine. He doesn't have a clue does he? All he sees are dollar signs and reputation. I could think of a few words to describe him, but I will refrain.
What a great dialogue, which explains it all. A joy to read. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Hi jay, I'm listening while I'm writing this. Yes, it would be Cornelius playing. I can just imagine it.
Howard is worse than a philistine. He doesn't have a clue does he? All he sees are dollar signs and reputation. I could think of a few words to describe him, but I will refrain.
What a great dialogue, which explains it all. A joy to read. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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I'm so pleased you enjoyed this scene. I hope the next one will have elements of drama and perhaps pathos.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jay,
A nice touch, having Cornelius playing the piano in the background. A beautiful piece, and quite soothing... not only for the parents, but for Cornelius as well. I wonder if Cililla is in there, soaking up the melodic notes. I picture her, lightly dancing ballerina steps around the Steinway.
I enjoyed the chapter. You have shown us just how good Cornelius really is. But the only ones who know it are his parents and Mr. Hallows. Or am I wrong? Help me out with this, Jay. Has Jennie heard Cornelius play the piano? or anyone else at school?
I'm really looking forward to the next chapter... Jennie and her parents coming for a visit. Howard is your typical rich, high-society snob, who'll be looking down his nose at Mr. & Mrs. Jax. It should be quite interesting.
I'm convinced that there is hope for Cornie. He teeters between autism and genius. I think acceptance is going to be the key... acceptance from the school body, including classmates, (even the bullies), Jennie and her parents, other teachers, and maybe most of all... his Dad. Howard is very proud of his son, but also embarrassed by him. And I think he takes it out on his wife, Toley. He's more interested in his social standing than what's really important, Cornelius.
"You damn right I'm proud!" ... (did you mean to write,
You're damn right I'm proud!)
Excellent writing, Jay! You're fitting this story together like a puzzle. The last piece is always the best.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Hi Jay,
A nice touch, having Cornelius playing the piano in the background. A beautiful piece, and quite soothing... not only for the parents, but for Cornelius as well. I wonder if Cililla is in there, soaking up the melodic notes. I picture her, lightly dancing ballerina steps around the Steinway.
I enjoyed the chapter. You have shown us just how good Cornelius really is. But the only ones who know it are his parents and Mr. Hallows. Or am I wrong? Help me out with this, Jay. Has Jennie heard Cornelius play the piano? or anyone else at school?
I'm really looking forward to the next chapter... Jennie and her parents coming for a visit. Howard is your typical rich, high-society snob, who'll be looking down his nose at Mr. & Mrs. Jax. It should be quite interesting.
I'm convinced that there is hope for Cornie. He teeters between autism and genius. I think acceptance is going to be the key... acceptance from the school body, including classmates, (even the bullies), Jennie and her parents, other teachers, and maybe most of all... his Dad. Howard is very proud of his son, but also embarrassed by him. And I think he takes it out on his wife, Toley. He's more interested in his social standing than what's really important, Cornelius.
"You damn right I'm proud!" ... (did you mean to write,
You're damn right I'm proud!)
Excellent writing, Jay! You're fitting this story together like a puzzle. The last piece is always the best.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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I did intend "You damn right." However, you are the fourth person to mention it, so I'm changing it to "Your ..." It's pulling the reader out of the play. Thanks for being the one to tilt the ... whatever it is. I so do appreciate you, Kimbob.
Comment from royowen
I don't think there would be anything more discouraging or disgusting for a loving mother than an indifferent and unloving husband and father to Cornelius. You've woven a good plot, and I can understand the difficult task you've set yourself. But so far so good. Well done, Jay, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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I don't think there would be anything more discouraging or disgusting for a loving mother than an indifferent and unloving husband and father to Cornelius. You've woven a good plot, and I can understand the difficult task you've set yourself. But so far so good. Well done, Jay, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Roy, for your close reading and pertinent comments. I hope the next scene is moving to you.
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Well done
Comment from tfawcus
Having failed to find a pun in Toloache, I looked it up on Google. A most interesting plant! The kiss of death? She certainly seems to be suffering the consequences of marrying for money.
This scene provides a change of pace and gives us a ringside seat watching an abusive relationship made manifest. You show us two distinctly different reactions to bringing up a disabled child. There is no surprise that Cornelius has been reduced to an almost catatonic state.
Very nicely done. Now for the meeting with Mr and Mrs Jax!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Having failed to find a pun in Toloache, I looked it up on Google. A most interesting plant! The kiss of death? She certainly seems to be suffering the consequences of marrying for money.
This scene provides a change of pace and gives us a ringside seat watching an abusive relationship made manifest. You show us two distinctly different reactions to bringing up a disabled child. There is no surprise that Cornelius has been reduced to an almost catatonic state.
Very nicely done. Now for the meeting with Mr and Mrs Jax!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Tony for following this play and for your keen observations. They truly do give me direction.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent scene. It situates a lot of the current situation in place, notably the interaction between Cornelius and Jennie. More interestingly, it seems to me that Howard may be slowly changing his attiude towards his son - for the better.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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This is an excellent scene. It situates a lot of the current situation in place, notably the interaction between Cornelius and Jennie. More interestingly, it seems to me that Howard may be slowly changing his attiude towards his son - for the better.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Katherine. I don't think you should expect too much stripe-changing in the near future. I certainly do appreciate you following this play.
Comment from Master Matilda
This was so cool. My first time ever reading a "scene." I wondered if you were a musician as well? I loved hearing the soothing music in the background as I launched YouTube as you suggested. Your descriptions of each character painted such a perfect picture in my mind I felt like I was watching a movie. Now, I need to read the other scenes!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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This was so cool. My first time ever reading a "scene." I wondered if you were a musician as well? I loved hearing the soothing music in the background as I launched YouTube as you suggested. Your descriptions of each character painted such a perfect picture in my mind I felt like I was watching a movie. Now, I need to read the other scenes!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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I love it! I welcome you aboard with open arms. Thank you so much for your kind words and glittery stars.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Jay:
Thanks so much for suggesting we listen to this beautiful music as we read this scene. It adds so much to the ambiance of the whole scene. How could a father listen to his son play so wonderfully and not appreciate his gift? It is so sad when people consider material things more important than people. Looking forward to the next scene.
Jan
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Jay:
Thanks so much for suggesting we listen to this beautiful music as we read this scene. It adds so much to the ambiance of the whole scene. How could a father listen to his son play so wonderfully and not appreciate his gift? It is so sad when people consider material things more important than people. Looking forward to the next scene.
Jan
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Bless you, Jan. Thanks for your kind words and all the lovely stars. I'm glad the music worked well for you. Only a few found umbrage to it.
Comment from lyenochka
Unfortunately, I could not enjoy the nice piano music as my husband is napping in the same room.
I think you did a great job with the dialogue. As superficial and annoying Howard seems to be, he does seem to care about his wife. Tolie also is both thrilled and nervous about Cornie's first friend. I think things will go very well. After all, the Jaxes have been through a loss of a child and have their own hard life experiences. Perhaps the parents will become friends, too.
Comments:
You damn right I'm proud! (You're)
I still have time to meet with Jeffry (Jeffrey?) unless it's another unusual spelling of the name.
between the Jax's and us. (Jaxes) Plurals for names don't involve an apostrophe. Here's one person's take on it: https://writejudi.wordpress.com/2012/12/23/making-names-plural/
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Unfortunately, I could not enjoy the nice piano music as my husband is napping in the same room.
I think you did a great job with the dialogue. As superficial and annoying Howard seems to be, he does seem to care about his wife. Tolie also is both thrilled and nervous about Cornie's first friend. I think things will go very well. After all, the Jaxes have been through a loss of a child and have their own hard life experiences. Perhaps the parents will become friends, too.
Comments:
You damn right I'm proud! (You're)
I still have time to meet with Jeffry (Jeffrey?) unless it's another unusual spelling of the name.
between the Jax's and us. (Jaxes) Plurals for names don't involve an apostrophe. Here's one person's take on it: https://writejudi.wordpress.com/2012/12/23/making-names-plural/
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Helen. The jury's still out about the background music. About your comments: Apt as usual. I changed Jeffry to Jeffrey, Jax's to Jaxes, but I left You damn right since it was with forethought. I've heard so many people, myself included, use "you" in this case. Many times its "You damn rights!". Being technical, I think the correct wording would be You're damned right! Thank you for the link on pluralizing names. I pasted it to my chart of most used links I offer other struggling writers. You are so doggone appreciated, Helen!
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Thank you for the colloquial use of "You" instead of "You're." Your dialogue is very natural so I appreciate you pointing out that it was intentional.
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But you are the third person to mention it. It may warrant reconsideration.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Did Howard accidentally turn into somewhat of a nice guy before our very eyes? Say it isn't so. LOL I can't wait to read how this visit turns out. I am worried about Cornelius. Jenny's parents could put an end to it all. Good writing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Did Howard accidentally turn into somewhat of a nice guy before our very eyes? Say it isn't so. LOL I can't wait to read how this visit turns out. I am worried about Cornelius. Jenny's parents could put an end to it all. Good writing.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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No, Howard didn't flip his character. I don't know yet how the next scene will turn out, but Howard will be in character. Thank you so much for the six stars, Barbara.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I am slowly catching up with the style. This is an emotional piece. The story of an autistic child is always painful. There is the family and an animated conversation results. I don't think the father loves his talented son at all. Sad. Anyway, it is all part of the saga. Thanks for sharing!
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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I am slowly catching up with the style. This is an emotional piece. The story of an autistic child is always painful. There is the family and an animated conversation results. I don't think the father loves his talented son at all. Sad. Anyway, it is all part of the saga. Thanks for sharing!
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Well, you've certainly been loyal, Seshadri. I appreciate it. Howard is definitely egocentric, which renders him hard to love anyone.