Football - A Novel
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Comment from Ric Myworld
No matter how hard they try to deny a relationship, the attractions ramp up with every chapter and get harder to hide or avoid. I love football, but what would football be without a little special company. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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No matter how hard they try to deny a relationship, the attractions ramp up with every chapter and get harder to hide or avoid. I love football, but what would football be without a little special company. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
I enjoyed reading. Sound typical to me. No doubt love is brewing, and yes, I was wondering about Frost. I am not sure, but people like him never seem to stop meddling in people's affairs. Good one, Barb. I hope you get your book published.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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I enjoyed reading. Sound typical to me. No doubt love is brewing, and yes, I was wondering about Frost. I am not sure, but people like him never seem to stop meddling in people's affairs. Good one, Barb. I hope you get your book published.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
I wonder why two consenting adults who are free to date can't do that just because of Frost. Or may be the school board is strict.
As usual the writing is fluid and I am waiting to see what mr Frost will do next?
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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I wonder why two consenting adults who are free to date can't do that just because of Frost. Or may be the school board is strict.
As usual the writing is fluid and I am waiting to see what mr Frost will do next?
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Both work together, Frost and morality clause in contact.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I guess is very hard to work close to a person you like and not hide that from the bystanders. We will see how this romance will evolve. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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I guess is very hard to work close to a person you like and not hide that from the bystanders. We will see how this romance will evolve. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
Hi, Barbara. I'm wondering (I know we've gone over this, but) has anyone else mentioned how Gabriel and Katherine are really going overboard on letting Rodney Frost, whom the school has released and the local police has a restraining order against (I believe that's the case) ... letting Rodney Frost rule their lives? I know you told me the school board can make or break a person's career, but the cards are so heavily stacked against Frost that Katherine and Gabriel should feel secure in having their own life. Now she's letting her running team add fuel to the fire.
Please don't take my criticism personally, Barbara. I'm just afraid that your readers might think more highly of your characters if they stood up and fought on the side of right. You've invested a lot of time and effort in this novel, and your writing is superb, but if I were your editor and you were paying me to help you develop a powerful and successful novel, I wouldn't be able to take it further because of the reasons I've given you.
Say the word, though, and I won't mention it again. I will simply judge each chapter on its writing, which, as I said is top drawer.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Hi, Barbara. I'm wondering (I know we've gone over this, but) has anyone else mentioned how Gabriel and Katherine are really going overboard on letting Rodney Frost, whom the school has released and the local police has a restraining order against (I believe that's the case) ... letting Rodney Frost rule their lives? I know you told me the school board can make or break a person's career, but the cards are so heavily stacked against Frost that Katherine and Gabriel should feel secure in having their own life. Now she's letting her running team add fuel to the fire.
Please don't take my criticism personally, Barbara. I'm just afraid that your readers might think more highly of your characters if they stood up and fought on the side of right. You've invested a lot of time and effort in this novel, and your writing is superb, but if I were your editor and you were paying me to help you develop a powerful and successful novel, I wouldn't be able to take it further because of the reasons I've given you.
Say the word, though, and I won't mention it again. I will simply judge each chapter on its writing, which, as I said is top drawer.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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I have one other reviewer, a male, who asks the same question. Yes, the school has a morality clause, and yes parents do complain. I've seen it happen in my district. To the point a teacher got fired because somebody else wrote on her FB page. It wasn't even her comment. Also in three maybe four posts things will start to make more sense. There's a lot more at stake, but Katherine doesn't know it. She also doesn't want to set a bad example for her children. They take priority. Also I think it's drawn out longer because I only post part of chapters once a week.
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Good, good, good, then it's an unnecessary obsession on my part. Just ignore it, and I won't mention it again. I only had one semester of high school teaching (and then as an apprentice-teacher role) so I didn't get into the administrative nitty-gritty.
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I always value your comments and spend time thinking about them. I never brush them off.
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Thank you. I knew you didn't.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
That's one of the fun things about teaching and coaching: kids notice everything. In my first year, I would have liked to have had the time to do some of the things they wondered if I was doing. One piece of spag for you below.
Katherine and Gabriel need to come to terms with their feelings and stop worrying about what others think.
Rhonda arm. "Is that Kenny?" >>> Rhonda's arm. "Is that Kenny?"
Jan
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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barbara:
That's one of the fun things about teaching and coaching: kids notice everything. In my first year, I would have liked to have had the time to do some of the things they wondered if I was doing. One piece of spag for you below.
Katherine and Gabriel need to come to terms with their feelings and stop worrying about what others think.
Rhonda arm. "Is that Kenny?" >>> Rhonda's arm. "Is that Kenny?"
Jan
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the catch.
Comment from judiverse
Funny that the girls are so interested in Katherine's love life. That sounds so typical of students. They love to know about their teachers' personal lives. I loved the comment about dating taking a lot of time. It was good that Katherine spotted Kenny and warned Rhonda not to be alone. She should have her parents pick her up after the game or Katherine would give her a ride. That boy should be reported to the guidance councilor and reported to the police. I doubt that football is going to be the answer for him. I've been reading about how Aaron Hernandez turned out. I feel exhausted just reading about Katherine's day, but she's still young. judi
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Funny that the girls are so interested in Katherine's love life. That sounds so typical of students. They love to know about their teachers' personal lives. I loved the comment about dating taking a lot of time. It was good that Katherine spotted Kenny and warned Rhonda not to be alone. She should have her parents pick her up after the game or Katherine would give her a ride. That boy should be reported to the guidance councilor and reported to the police. I doubt that football is going to be the answer for him. I've been reading about how Aaron Hernandez turned out. I feel exhausted just reading about Katherine's day, but she's still young. judi
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
No matter how much these two want and need to be together as a loving family, they are hampered by the opinion and meddling of outside forces. Katherine and her boys need Gabriel in their lives and I have every confidence that they will be together one of these days.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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No matter how much these two want and need to be together as a loving family, they are hampered by the opinion and meddling of outside forces. Katherine and her boys need Gabriel in their lives and I have every confidence that they will be together one of these days.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A great image for your story, Barbara.
-This was a good chapter that
combined the girls' cross country team,
Katherine, and the football game.
-You did a good job with their
questions about Gabe and Katherine,
as well as with the Rhonda/Kenny situation.
-You would think that one of her parents
would be where she is, but maybe that
is in a perfect world!
-I like the scene when Jeremy wants more to eat,
as well as the scene at home, when Jeremy wants
to make sure Gabe is still coming to his event.
-Gabe and Katherine have a good discussion.
-The ending is good, too.
*Was Sandy supposed to be speaking here:
[Rhonda smiled. "Because you're together...]
*Also, I am not sure if the Bears and Silver Cove
are the same team, and who won the game.
Maybe you could add in the author notes
the name of their school and what their
team is called. Just a thought.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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-A great image for your story, Barbara.
-This was a good chapter that
combined the girls' cross country team,
Katherine, and the football game.
-You did a good job with their
questions about Gabe and Katherine,
as well as with the Rhonda/Kenny situation.
-You would think that one of her parents
would be where she is, but maybe that
is in a perfect world!
-I like the scene when Jeremy wants more to eat,
as well as the scene at home, when Jeremy wants
to make sure Gabe is still coming to his event.
-Gabe and Katherine have a good discussion.
-The ending is good, too.
*Was Sandy supposed to be speaking here:
[Rhonda smiled. "Because you're together...]
*Also, I am not sure if the Bears and Silver Cove
are the same team, and who won the game.
Maybe you could add in the author notes
the name of their school and what their
team is called. Just a thought.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, the Bears and Silver Cove are the same and I did state that they just won their second game.
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You are welcome, Barbara, and thanks for verifying.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb as usual you made this chapter interesting.
I see that the relationship between Garbiel and Katerine seems to be ting get serious, but one of the two are taking their time .
I'm waiting to see which one takes the right move to become a couple who are falling in love with each other.
Gert
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Barb as usual you made this chapter interesting.
I see that the relationship between Garbiel and Katerine seems to be ting get serious, but one of the two are taking their time .
I'm waiting to see which one takes the right move to become a couple who are falling in love with each other.
Gert
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.