One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--and one that matches the picture quite well, gloomy, depressing, and gray; somber picture to go with somber words, and a universal feeling
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--and one that matches the picture quite well, gloomy, depressing, and gray; somber picture to go with somber words, and a universal feeling
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback. I appreciate your time and effort.
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Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a great haiku poem. It has several possible meanings...especially in the last line.
The mother might have died recently or had moved out into a nursing home...any number of things could have happened to pack up Mom's belongings into boxes. The smell of winter's rain has multiple meanings as well.
Memories coming back into the foray of one's mind, for example. This is wide open to interpretation, and that makes it an excellent piece. Thank you for sharing this talented haiku with me.
Have a lovely afternoon,
Jesse
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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This is a great haiku poem. It has several possible meanings...especially in the last line.
The mother might have died recently or had moved out into a nursing home...any number of things could have happened to pack up Mom's belongings into boxes. The smell of winter's rain has multiple meanings as well.
Memories coming back into the foray of one's mind, for example. This is wide open to interpretation, and that makes it an excellent piece. Thank you for sharing this talented haiku with me.
Have a lovely afternoon,
Jesse
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Jesse, yes the magic of haiku is what it means to you...it made you think and find the connection between top lines to the last one. Well done.
Thank you very much for your review and feedback. I appreciate your time and effort.
Extra Gypsy hugs :)
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Hi Gypsy. I am glad you liked my interpretations of the haiku. I liked this one, especially for some reason.
Have a wonderful weekend,
Jesse
Comment from royowen
Isn't that interesting? You've said your mum did when you were ten, so it would be amazing if you remembered goodwill bags, we have the same organisation here. Beautifully written Haiku Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Isn't that interesting? You've said your mum did when you were ten, so it would be amazing if you remembered goodwill bags, we have the same organisation here. Beautifully written Haiku Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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It's not about my mom but it could be :) I worked for goodwill for two years as a teacher.
Thank you very much for your review and feedback. I appreciate your time and effort.
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Well done
Comment from harmony13
I found the author's words a great way to let go of the past. The poem
flows and connects well. The poem is informative, clear and creative.
The artwork is perfect and compliments both the theme and words of
this poem. Have a great weekend!....Maria
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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I found the author's words a great way to let go of the past. The poem
flows and connects well. The poem is informative, clear and creative.
The artwork is perfect and compliments both the theme and words of
this poem. Have a great weekend!....Maria
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
You did such a great job with the emotional content here with the skies crying (winter rain) and the donations of mom's things probably due to her passing.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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You did such a great job with the emotional content here with the skies crying (winter rain) and the donations of mom's things probably due to her passing.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Yes, you got it, Helen. :)
Thank you very much for your review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
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You, too, Gypsy!! 💖
Comment from RodG
You can easily visualize those boxes of dead Mother's things sitting on the sidewalk awaiting the Goodwill truck. I really like how you symbolize lasting grief with the "smell of winter rain."
Rod
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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You can easily visualize those boxes of dead Mother's things sitting on the sidewalk awaiting the Goodwill truck. I really like how you symbolize lasting grief with the "smell of winter rain."
Rod
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Yes, you got it :)
Thank you very much for your review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your haiku, Gypsy. The color scheme is perfect. I love the picture though when paired with your words, it creates a sad image. Your words are well thought out. The use of the word 'winter' makes me think of the time when one's life is over. May I ask what is the connection in lines 1 and 2?
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your haiku, Gypsy. The color scheme is perfect. I love the picture though when paired with your words, it creates a sad image. Your words are well thought out. The use of the word 'winter' makes me think of the time when one's life is over. May I ask what is the connection in lines 1 and 2?
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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The connection of line one and two: last goodwill boxes of mom?s things
Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Erika Seshadri
I can feel the cold and wet as I read this one. I'm standing right there with the boxes on the sidewalk, feeling low from the weather and the loss of a loved one.
Great imagery. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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I can feel the cold and wet as I read this one. I'm standing right there with the boxes on the sidewalk, feeling low from the weather and the loss of a loved one.
Great imagery. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Erica, thank you very much for the exceptional review and six stars. You completely understood the meaning of my haiku. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
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Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Last Goodwill Boxes, has the right set up and creates a scene where the end of things is quite clear: Unneeded clothes, dead of winter, stale odor of the past.
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This 5-7-5, Last Goodwill Boxes, has the right set up and creates a scene where the end of things is quite clear: Unneeded clothes, dead of winter, stale odor of the past.
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs