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Comment from Sanku
I enjoyed Tom's recounting the incident very well. I enjoy the littles asides that you insert ,like the Home Guard's vanity that he is a Colonel and Tom mentioning that point as he was narrating a thrilling incident.And the bitterness of the West kent that Home Guards caught the Germans.
"Andy ock andy ock "--German for hands Up? That was funny. Though I dont know German I am sure he made that up
Finally, our Anne is quite a smart girl.
And nothing is mentioned about the papers that the German shoved into the mill's cylinder?
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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I enjoyed Tom's recounting the incident very well. I enjoy the littles asides that you insert ,like the Home Guard's vanity that he is a Colonel and Tom mentioning that point as he was narrating a thrilling incident.And the bitterness of the West kent that Home Guards caught the Germans.
"Andy ock andy ock "--German for hands Up? That was funny. Though I dont know German I am sure he made that up
Finally, our Anne is quite a smart girl.
And nothing is mentioned about the papers that the German shoved into the mill's cylinder?
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for this six star review. in particular for the comment about the asides. I think they make the speaker come alive because it is the sort of thing we do. we all get sidetracked from time to time. 'Andy ock' is a typical English corruption of the German phrase for 'Hands up!' - 'Hände hoch' - literally 'Hands high' - properly pronounced 'haynder hoch'.
You will need to wait until Book 3 to learn of those papers hidden in the mill.
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Exactly what I was thinking.I have noticed that when we talk about an incident ,we tend to 'modify' the characters with minor details .these asides helps to increase the verisimilitude of the novel.
Thanks for explaining 'hands up'
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Julia is certainly switched on and didn't miss anything and the seed has been planted. I love the description of the bumbling home guard with good intentions, but wholly inadequate against the smart looking fit young Germans! If we had been invaded by the Germans, it would have been a push over to take charge of our country, and the tenacious nature of the English was our only weapon. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Julia is certainly switched on and didn't miss anything and the seed has been planted. I love the description of the bumbling home guard with good intentions, but wholly inadequate against the smart looking fit young Germans! If we had been invaded by the Germans, it would have been a push over to take charge of our country, and the tenacious nature of the English was our only weapon. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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I doubt if we could have resisted an invasion successfully had it come, despite Mr Churchill's fine words.
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So true x
Comment from tfawcus
It's interesting to see this event from another perspective. You give us a glimpse of what the Home Guard was like and what regular soldiers thought of them.
Although Peter Allen has had limited success in confirming that Feldwebel BrĂ¼cker is not a plant, it sounds as if Julia may have the missing piece of the jigsaw to set his suspicious mind at rest. If he'd stayed a little longer, he might also have been interested in Heather's recollection that the surname could have been something beginning with B.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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It's interesting to see this event from another perspective. You give us a glimpse of what the Home Guard was like and what regular soldiers thought of them.
Although Peter Allen has had limited success in confirming that Feldwebel BrĂ¼cker is not a plant, it sounds as if Julia may have the missing piece of the jigsaw to set his suspicious mind at rest. If he'd stayed a little longer, he might also have been interested in Heather's recollection that the surname could have been something beginning with B.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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'If' is a word with massive implications considering its abbreviated length. I am glad you found a second look at the event in the mill an acceptable device. I worried about that for some time, but no one has commented adversely on that aspect.
Many thanks for your comments.
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I think it works OK in the context of his conversation with the Bache family. Whether it makes the final cut will be a decision for later.
Comment from lancellot
Well, this was very entertaining, especially after I got accustomed to the period and region accurate dialect. I really enjoyed the story in story of the two captured Germans.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Well, this was very entertaining, especially after I got accustomed to the period and region accurate dialect. I really enjoyed the story in story of the two captured Germans.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for this kind review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh that Julia is so clever and practical! I hope you'll find her the best husband after the war. And how slick of Allen to just casually drop the last name to see if there might be any reaction.
I thoroughly enjoyed Tommy's ragtag group formed of local yokels to protect Cleeborough from the Germans! And your nod to the reader through Allen was a great writing technique.
Some minor comments:
Corporal Collett, You know, Mr. Allen, (you)
Not sure about the dialogue within the dialogue in British English, but I would think the verb speech tag verb would still be uncapitalized.
"Who fired that shot?" Calls out Sir Harry. (calls)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Oh that Julia is so clever and practical! I hope you'll find her the best husband after the war. And how slick of Allen to just casually drop the last name to see if there might be any reaction.
I thoroughly enjoyed Tommy's ragtag group formed of local yokels to protect Cleeborough from the Germans! And your nod to the reader through Allen was a great writing technique.
Some minor comments:
Corporal Collett, You know, Mr. Allen, (you)
Not sure about the dialogue within the dialogue in British English, but I would think the verb speech tag verb would still be uncapitalized.
"Who fired that shot?" Calls out Sir Harry. (calls)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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You were quite right about those two spaggy things. Thank you for spotting that, and indeed for the whole review. Julia is indeed a smart cookie but you wi8ll have to wait for book 3 to learn of any matrimonial plans.
Comment from Jay Squires
"Who fired that shot?" Calls out Sir Harry. [That reminds me of my Dad's favorite line, "Who far'd that shot?" and his answer, "I fardet" We didn't have too sophisticated a humor, we Squires's. Sorry for the interlude.]
Well, that Julia has a head on her shoulders, doesn't she? It makes me wonder, though, why would Allen drop in the last name? It would certainly have begged the question. And there was already enough circumstantial information to point the finger directly at Anneliese as the tailgunner's mother.
On the other hand, other than my denseness, I can't understand where the harm would come in laying it all out, neat as you please to the Bache's. He wouldn't have to give the trump card that they wanted to use the prisoner as a counter-spy.
I am, nonetheless, loving your novel, Jim.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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"Who fired that shot?" Calls out Sir Harry. [That reminds me of my Dad's favorite line, "Who far'd that shot?" and his answer, "I fardet" We didn't have too sophisticated a humor, we Squires's. Sorry for the interlude.]
Well, that Julia has a head on her shoulders, doesn't she? It makes me wonder, though, why would Allen drop in the last name? It would certainly have begged the question. And there was already enough circumstantial information to point the finger directly at Anneliese as the tailgunner's mother.
On the other hand, other than my denseness, I can't understand where the harm would come in laying it all out, neat as you please to the Bache's. He wouldn't have to give the trump card that they wanted to use the prisoner as a counter-spy.
I am, nonetheless, loving your novel, Jim.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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You are asking all the right questions. There is some deliberate obfuscation here but Allen lives in a constant espionage war so he is going to consider the possibility of nazis under the bed wherever he goes. He also has a longer term agenda.
Thank you for commenting an indeed for enjoying this.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
I see that Peter Allen is not about to tell Heather why the many questions.
But it seems that Julia is not just a pretty face, she has keen insight and doesn't miss a trick. So the mystery is not revealed here. There is much more to this story.
Ralf
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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I see that Peter Allen is not about to tell Heather why the many questions.
But it seems that Julia is not just a pretty face, she has keen insight and doesn't miss a trick. So the mystery is not revealed here. There is much more to this story.
Ralf
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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There are only two more chapters in this but there is book 3 still to come and book 4 is now taking shape. This book ends with the war's end but we have still much to learn about the next generation, Julia and Jack so there is still plenty to come. The young German has more than a walk-on part in Booke 3 as 'time like an ever rolling stream bears all its sons away.'
Thanks for this bach of excellent reviews.1
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Wow, this is epic! I had better read Book 1 to be up on everything. Good luck with your publication.
Ralf
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like this summary of the past events that have led Allen back to the Joliffe family. It seemed he got all that he needed, and unknowing left Julia with something to further research. Very well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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I like this summary of the past events that have led Allen back to the Joliffe family. It seemed he got all that he needed, and unknowing left Julia with something to further research. Very well done.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Many thanks for this review.
Comment from damommy
I loved Tom's telling of the capture. It had me laughing. Good for the Home Guard, always being looked down on. Is Julia going to stir up trouble for the family? I haven't figured her out yet. I see she doesn't speak with the dialect her parents do. Pity. 8-)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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I loved Tom's telling of the capture. It had me laughing. Good for the Home Guard, always being looked down on. Is Julia going to stir up trouble for the family? I haven't figured her out yet. I see she doesn't speak with the dialect her parents do. Pity. 8-)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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I made both twins dialect free. They would have had the benefit of more education tn the late 1920s and early 1930s. I was a device i used to show this. Also the period between the wars saw the arrival of radio and the universality of the 'cut glass accent' available to all on the airways. The move back towards encouraging local accents has only been around since the 1960s.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
What an interesting young person Julia is turning out to be. Very family orientated, regardless of origins of the members, or even legitimacy. Will she collect all waifs and strays?
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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What an interesting young person Julia is turning out to be. Very family orientated, regardless of origins of the members, or even legitimacy. Will she collect all waifs and strays?
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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You will have to see what she collects. But it won't be damaged or imperfect. You can bet your boots on that. Many thanks foer reviewing.
