Window Watcher's Envy Misplaced
Thou shalt not covet thy neighbor's harem19 total reviews
Comment from Judy Lawless
Ok, so that was my morning chuckle today. Thanks, Liz. I hope it was only the adult male from across the street who was watching. I can just imagine a cluster of teenage boys lined up at the window! Well told.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Ok, so that was my morning chuckle today. Thanks, Liz. I hope it was only the adult male from across the street who was watching. I can just imagine a cluster of teenage boys lined up at the window! Well told.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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John was quite a character!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I managed to read this all the way through - twice - whilst still believing the prankster was Chuck. Where did my unbelievable lack of observation come from?
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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I managed to read this all the way through - twice - whilst still believing the prankster was Chuck. Where did my unbelievable lack of observation come from?
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Iza also thought I meant Chuck. John was quite a character!
Comment from royowen
How embarrassing for him. He must have never really worried about what people thought of him, although perhaps he didn't have success with the girls. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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How embarrassing for him. He must have never really worried about what people thought of him, although perhaps he didn't have success with the girls. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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John was quite a character!
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Sounds like it
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Ha! Haaa! What a story! All said and done, boys will always be boys. No exception. Including 'yours faithfully'!:) I am so happy to see the evergreen beauty of M.sq (I wanted to type M square, M2, but 2 must be smaller and placed higher). But didn't know how!). It was widely reported that her IQ was 163, much higher than that of Albert Einstein's.(158 I think). Beauty with brains. Cheers!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Ha! Haaa! What a story! All said and done, boys will always be boys. No exception. Including 'yours faithfully'!:) I am so happy to see the evergreen beauty of M.sq (I wanted to type M square, M2, but 2 must be smaller and placed higher). But didn't know how!). It was widely reported that her IQ was 163, much higher than that of Albert Einstein's.(158 I think). Beauty with brains. Cheers!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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John was quite a character!
Comment from karenina
Zing! Apparently I'm his heightened (ahem) state of anticipation he neglected to realize he was sharing the "Girlsss" with one EXTRA really lucky guy! No price for admission at his personal porn palace!
I've only ever watched that genre for the sophisticated dialogue and plot themes...
(not!)
Funny!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Zing! Apparently I'm his heightened (ahem) state of anticipation he neglected to realize he was sharing the "Girlsss" with one EXTRA really lucky guy! No price for admission at his personal porn palace!
I've only ever watched that genre for the sophisticated dialogue and plot themes...
(not!)
Funny!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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John was quite a character!
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Streaking was a whole "thing" for a minute back in the day! Ew!
Karenina
Comment from Jay Squires
I still have box after box of those VHS tapes--oh not the ones John was fond of. More like the Waltons Season two and three, and a dozen years of Christmas parades here in Bakersfield. That kind. Sounds like John had some needs unmet.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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I still have box after box of those VHS tapes--oh not the ones John was fond of. More like the Waltons Season two and three, and a dozen years of Christmas parades here in Bakersfield. That kind. Sounds like John had some needs unmet.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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John was quite a character!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I didn't know Marilyn Monroe was the star in Girlsss and a Lucky Guy, probably not but I like the choice of the photo. This is fun and I laughed in the end. Chuck is a funny guy.
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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I didn't know Marilyn Monroe was the star in Girlsss and a Lucky Guy, probably not but I like the choice of the photo. This is fun and I laughed in the end. Chuck is a funny guy.
Well done.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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John was quite a character!
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, I think you have a theme of a good story and it could have a humor and adult element mix.
It is well edited, but the main issue is that it is all telling.
The narrator tells the reader everything. It is a matter of telling not showing. By showing, the reader sees and experiences with your characters. We see John's excitement and enjoyment of what is shown on video. We see his neighbor enjoying or being shocked by it. And we see john's possible embarrassment in the end.
This makes for a fuller, complete story.
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Hmm, I think you have a theme of a good story and it could have a humor and adult element mix.
It is well edited, but the main issue is that it is all telling.
The narrator tells the reader everything. It is a matter of telling not showing. By showing, the reader sees and experiences with your characters. We see John's excitement and enjoyment of what is shown on video. We see his neighbor enjoying or being shocked by it. And we see john's possible embarrassment in the end.
This makes for a fuller, complete story.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Food for thought! Thanks!
Comment from Begin Again
And of course, Joe couldn't stop staring out his window into John's place either... Perverts one and all... thanks for sharing the story, I think! Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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And of course, Joe couldn't stop staring out his window into John's place either... Perverts one and all... thanks for sharing the story, I think! Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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John was quite a character!