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Comment from JudyE
This is progressing very well and keeps the reader's interest. I wonder if Allen is going to reveal the German prisoner's links with Jericho farm.
'As I were saying, before I were so rudely interrupted by my husband and daughter,' continued Heather. 'This girl, this woman, whose name were indeed Anneliese, arrived with the Indian prince's friend, and a load of other people of both sexes on Christmas Eve 1912. It were their second visit, 'cause they'd come for a weekend back in the autumn as I recall. - speech marks needed at the end of this paragraph.
'I often wondered whether they might have got married if Tom had lived. That were what she were after, no doubt about that. She thought she had him in the bag too, I reckon. She were that confident that she sent a telegram to London, resigning or whatever, from this German dance troupe as she'd worked with. Apparently that was where she had met the chap who brought her up here. He were a bit of a stage-door Johnny, that one. - speech marks needed at end
'That were a local meet, at the Talbot in the town, and they all clattered off in high spirits, and high on spirits most of them as well, I'd say. They often hunted our land, and that day they drew our coverts down by the Rea. I could hear the hounds and the horn all morning. Later on they moved away towards Catherton I believe. Anyroad, I cunna hear the hunt no more, not that I were interested, what with a big dinner party to prepare for later. - speech marks needed at end
Heather looked at her daughter with a smile. 'She certainly said she loved him, I grant you that, Julia. - speech marks needed at end
'You nearly had a whole plane load the other night!' joked Allen. - should 'plane load' be one word maybe?
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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This is progressing very well and keeps the reader's interest. I wonder if Allen is going to reveal the German prisoner's links with Jericho farm.
'As I were saying, before I were so rudely interrupted by my husband and daughter,' continued Heather. 'This girl, this woman, whose name were indeed Anneliese, arrived with the Indian prince's friend, and a load of other people of both sexes on Christmas Eve 1912. It were their second visit, 'cause they'd come for a weekend back in the autumn as I recall. - speech marks needed at the end of this paragraph.
'I often wondered whether they might have got married if Tom had lived. That were what she were after, no doubt about that. She thought she had him in the bag too, I reckon. She were that confident that she sent a telegram to London, resigning or whatever, from this German dance troupe as she'd worked with. Apparently that was where she had met the chap who brought her up here. He were a bit of a stage-door Johnny, that one. - speech marks needed at end
'That were a local meet, at the Talbot in the town, and they all clattered off in high spirits, and high on spirits most of them as well, I'd say. They often hunted our land, and that day they drew our coverts down by the Rea. I could hear the hounds and the horn all morning. Later on they moved away towards Catherton I believe. Anyroad, I cunna hear the hunt no more, not that I were interested, what with a big dinner party to prepare for later. - speech marks needed at end
Heather looked at her daughter with a smile. 'She certainly said she loved him, I grant you that, Julia. - speech marks needed at end
'You nearly had a whole plane load the other night!' joked Allen. - should 'plane load' be one word maybe?
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much nfor this detailed review. The tadpoles have all been netted and put in their jar. Lol.
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At least tadpoles make a change from commas! lol
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Inversion is a whole new ball game!
Comment from Jay Squires
Ah, so, at last we get the story of Anneliese and the part she played in Tom's life. You've chosen a fine way, through Heather's mouth, to give backstory to how Anneliese met and romanced Tom and (though Heather didn't know it) birthed Tom's child who later would visit Heather's own backyard as part of the crew of the Dornier 17.
I enjoyed the development of your novel, Jim, with this chapter. (I just found out, looking at your chronology, that Jack Bach was shot down in enemy territory and was hospitalized as a POW. Some good development there, I'm sure.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Ah, so, at last we get the story of Anneliese and the part she played in Tom's life. You've chosen a fine way, through Heather's mouth, to give backstory to how Anneliese met and romanced Tom and (though Heather didn't know it) birthed Tom's child who later would visit Heather's own backyard as part of the crew of the Dornier 17.
I enjoyed the development of your novel, Jim, with this chapter. (I just found out, looking at your chronology, that Jack Bach was shot down in enemy territory and was hospitalized as a POW. Some good development there, I'm sure.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for this fine review. Should you feel inclined to stop wth this into Book 3, which follows on chapter 48 of this book, you will be treated to to the story of Jack Bache's war and its aftermath as well as to the adventures of the German rear gunner.
I hope you do come on that ride as i value your comments.
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Just try to get rid of me, Pal!
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Comment from lyenochka
Oh, did the Baches know about the plane and the two occupants? ("a whole plane load" is a bit of an exaggeration!)
I liked how Heather recounted the details of Tom's death and how Julia's interruptions added some levity.
Comments:
"hook, line, and sinker" (I was surprised to read Heather using such an American idiom)
I grant you that, Julia. (end quote missing)
Allen asking "'Did Anneliese ride to hounds?' right before the story of Tom's death confused me. I guess it's natural conversation to bounce around in the timeline. But it made me wonder if Anneliese were there during that day. But obviously, she wasn't. I wonder if this question is merely to give more of a picture of the woman to Allen and the reader, if it couldn't be introduced earlier?
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Oh, did the Baches know about the plane and the two occupants? ("a whole plane load" is a bit of an exaggeration!)
I liked how Heather recounted the details of Tom's death and how Julia's interruptions added some levity.
Comments:
"hook, line, and sinker" (I was surprised to read Heather using such an American idiom)
I grant you that, Julia. (end quote missing)
Allen asking "'Did Anneliese ride to hounds?' right before the story of Tom's death confused me. I guess it's natural conversation to bounce around in the timeline. But it made me wonder if Anneliese were there during that day. But obviously, she wasn't. I wonder if this question is merely to give more of a picture of the woman to Allen and the reader, if it couldn't be introduced earlier?
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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You make some really interesting points in this review particularly concerning the fishing expression which i did not realise came from America. I have been aware of it all my life but it may have come across with the US forces. Interestingly some of these are billeted on Jericho Farm in book three but i cant wriggle out of this the Dornier came down in 1943 before the American soldiers were billeted on Jericho. It will have to be changed. Thank you so much for that.
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You're so careful with the rural dialect, I thought I might mention it as it seemed a bit out of place. Glad it was useful.
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I checked with Google and found that it was indeed an American expression and on Heather would probably not be familiar with at this stage. Americans play a major role in book 3 but that hasnt happenef yet.
I wondered if my familiarity with the expression has anything to do with my father acting as a liason officer with the US aiborne during the latter stages of the war.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The story is slowly unfolding and you are joining all the dots here. I love Heather's accent as she sounds so sweet and reminds me of the black country twang. They may be having a German guest very soon, ha ha ha, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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The story is slowly unfolding and you are joining all the dots here. I love Heather's accent as she sounds so sweet and reminds me of the black country twang. They may be having a German guest very soon, ha ha ha, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Many thanks for this six star review and uts supportive comments. The dialecthas been difficult as Shropshire is such a big county and there is a considerable difference berween soth and north.
Comment from damommy
It seems they dodged the bullet with Annaliese. I think she was simply a gold-digger. Why did she never tell the family about the child that was Tom's? She probably didn't think of it or she would have milked it for all it was worth. I agree with Tom Bache about the fact he and Heather would never have met and married. I'm loving the dialect through all this. I can hear them as the speak, or at least how I imagine their voices sound.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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It seems they dodged the bullet with Annaliese. I think she was simply a gold-digger. Why did she never tell the family about the child that was Tom's? She probably didn't think of it or she would have milked it for all it was worth. I agree with Tom Bache about the fact he and Heather would never have met and married. I'm loving the dialect through all this. I can hear them as the speak, or at least how I imagine their voices sound.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for this supportive, six star review. I am particularly pleased that you found the dialect so pleasing.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I love the dialect you use in your story, Jim. Peter Allen is certainly good at coaxing the information from Heather, Tom and Julie. Was there a child or not? That is the question. Is the prisoner Tom's son? Nancy:)
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I love the dialect you use in your story, Jim. Peter Allen is certainly good at coaxing the information from Heather, Tom and Julie. Was there a child or not? That is the question. Is the prisoner Tom's son? Nancy:)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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That is something you will have to work out for yourself and the uncertainty will be carried over into book 3 as there are only three chapters left of this one.
Many thanks for this enthusiastic review.
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I hope I will still be around. LOL Nancy:)
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So do I.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I love the way you have of pulling all the pieces together, keeping the conversation going after it seems doomed to end. I can see that we'll soon have all our questions answered. Another excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I love the way you have of pulling all the pieces together, keeping the conversation going after it seems doomed to end. I can see that we'll soon have all our questions answered. Another excellent chapter.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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We are getting near the end of this book, Chapter 48 is the last but then we proceed straight away to Book 3. I hope you will enjoy that too. Many thanks for this six-star review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Well, we have not learned exactly how Tom Jolliffe died. I am wanting more information on this Anneliese. I am wondering how important she is to the story. I am guessing very important because we've a while learning more about her.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Well, we have not learned exactly how Tom Jolliffe died. I am wanting more information on this Anneliese. I am wondering how important she is to the story. I am guessing very important because we've a while learning more about her.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Anneliese is only of interest to Allen as the mother of the man he is really interested in, Brücker. Remember by this time in the war she is dead, killed in an air raid.
Many thanks for your continued interest and reviews.
Comment from nomi338
So at this point we still do not know if Julia has a German cousin, from her German auntie Anneliese. I am anxiously curious to find out how the Bache family will deal with the announcement that Tom Joliffe may have fathered a son who is a German soldier and who may have very well tried to or intended to bomb the family farm, and its environs.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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So at this point we still do not know if Julia has a German cousin, from her German auntie Anneliese. I am anxiously curious to find out how the Bache family will deal with the announcement that Tom Joliffe may have fathered a son who is a German soldier and who may have very well tried to or intended to bomb the family farm, and its environs.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I wear you will have to wait for the next book to learn that and you may be astounded. Meanwhile the story will continue. Many thanks for your continued interest.
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It has so far been a delightful pleasure. It has proven to be a wonderful way to pass some time.
Comment from roof35
Like Grouch Marx used to say, "Close but no cigar." Allen still does not quite have the answer he is looking for, but maybe he can surmise from here. Excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Like Grouch Marx used to say, "Close but no cigar." Allen still does not quite have the answer he is looking for, but maybe he can surmise from here. Excellent chapter.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Many thanks for this six-star review.
In his line of work certainty is a rare bird indeed. The proof of this particular pudding will be when he comes to analyse the intelligence the young man can gather from those senior POW.