NaPoWriMo 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "21. Earth"NaPoWriMo 2021 Poetry Challenge
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Comment from dragonpoet
Debra,
You followed the form, except I don't the suffering and we rhyme. Or is it supposed to be a slant rhyme.
Otherwise, the message is important. We need to change our ways or the world will be ruined.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Debra,
You followed the form, except I don't the suffering and we rhyme. Or is it supposed to be a slant rhyme.
Otherwise, the message is important. We need to change our ways or the world will be ruined.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Hello Joan :)
Thank you so much for your feedback. You are right.... I missed the rhyme on that line - a complete oversight... I will address it in my notes as I don?t wish to change the wording to make it fit!
Thanks again, I appreciate your comments :)
Best wishes, Debra
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You're very welcome, Debra. That is a good way to deal with it.
Joan
Comment from Lane Jennings
Nicely done. A tough truth made palatable by its form, and beautifully presented in visual terms. This would make a fine poster for public display in libraries, schools, or even on billboards. This is a poem where even the color of the print, which matches the background of Judy Banfield's delightful image, contributes importantly to the overall effect.
Congratulations, Debra!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Nicely done. A tough truth made palatable by its form, and beautifully presented in visual terms. This would make a fine poster for public display in libraries, schools, or even on billboards. This is a poem where even the color of the print, which matches the background of Judy Banfield's delightful image, contributes importantly to the overall effect.
Congratulations, Debra!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Hello, Lane :)
Thank you so much for your warm and generous feedback. I truly appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
Wow!! You nailed the form beautifully and you gave us the perfect Earth Day message, and yes, we are "unworthy and unentitled" and need to remember that. I was also impressed with your selection of Earth-worth rhyme as well. Wonderful!!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Wow!! You nailed the form beautifully and you gave us the perfect Earth Day message, and yes, we are "unworthy and unentitled" and need to remember that. I was also impressed with your selection of Earth-worth rhyme as well. Wonderful!!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Helen :)
Your generous feedback is very much appreciated.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
NaPoWriMo 2021
Earth
by Debra White
Excellent. Peppered Pickle. Good structure form and nice flow. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Today, Biden organized a leader summit on climate change with 40 world leaders. It's a step in the right direction.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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NaPoWriMo 2021
Earth
by Debra White
Excellent. Peppered Pickle. Good structure form and nice flow. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Today, Biden organized a leader summit on climate change with 40 world leaders. It's a step in the right direction.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Excellent news, and not before time!
Thank you, Gypsy, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from equestrik
This is a lovely and happy feeling poem. The picture is really sweet but also goes well with your writing. The rhythm is sing-songy and very pleasant even though the message is serious.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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This is a lovely and happy feeling poem. The picture is really sweet but also goes well with your writing. The rhythm is sing-songy and very pleasant even though the message is serious.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate both and am happy that you enjoyed my poem :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Sherry Asbury
How I wish I had had you in my marching and gentle protest days. This poem is just lovely - the artwork is so dear. We must reach out in any way we can to keep things going - and as my Grammy always said...."You get more flies with honey than with vinegar!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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How I wish I had had you in my marching and gentle protest days. This poem is just lovely - the artwork is so dear. We must reach out in any way we can to keep things going - and as my Grammy always said...."You get more flies with honey than with vinegar!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Hey Sherry :)
Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback and generous star rating! I'm so happy that you like my poem...
I love your Grammy's saying - A wise woman!
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This peppered pickle, Earth, has the proper formatting and reminds us that we have this decade to counter climate change or accept the continued and unstoppable trend.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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This peppered pickle, Earth, has the proper formatting and reminds us that we have this decade to counter climate change or accept the continued and unstoppable trend.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Bill, for your feedback.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from roof35
I loved this and I would give it a six rating but, alas, I don't have one left this week. You said exactly what we all need to hear and your illustration pairs well. Nicely done.
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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I loved this and I would give it a six rating but, alas, I don't have one left this week. You said exactly what we all need to hear and your illustration pairs well. Nicely done.
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Hello :)
Thank you so much for your generous feedback. I'm happy you enjoyed my poem! Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Heartfelt plea. Our poor planet is indeed in a pickle of our collective making. Spot-on word choice--UNentitled--we seem to dismiss the prefix as it applies to our thoughtlessness. Nice work.
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Heartfelt plea. Our poor planet is indeed in a pickle of our collective making. Spot-on word choice--UNentitled--we seem to dismiss the prefix as it applies to our thoughtlessness. Nice work.
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Hi Liz :)
Thank you for your thoughtful feedback. I appreciate it as always :)
Best wishes, Debra
