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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Thinking back over what I have read so far of this book (book 2 of the trilogy) we have come a long way. More and more, personal quests have fallen by the wayside, giving way to social/political considerations of life at the time. This provides interest and a varied piece of work. It is most enjoyable.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thinking back over what I have read so far of this book (book 2 of the trilogy) we have come a long way. More and more, personal quests have fallen by the wayside, giving way to social/political considerations of life at the time. This provides interest and a varied piece of work. It is most enjoyable.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Well spotted. I definitely wanted this story to fit into its historical setting both in war and peace. That seems to have paid off where you are concerned. Thank you for this review.
Comment from lyenochka
Super job with this dramatic post. (I wonder if other readers would prefer you give a translation? The German definitely brings us into the scene much more.) I really liked the poetic ending paragraph.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Super job with this dramatic post. (I wonder if other readers would prefer you give a translation? The German definitely brings us into the scene much more.) I really liked the poetic ending paragraph.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this review. The German exerpts are not really there to move the story on but to lend authenticity to the passage. Nothing is lost if the reader cannot translate and these days it is the work of a moment to slip the phrase into Google Translate or similar if they really must know what it says. It has to be done properly though and I owe that to you and your husband - little details that you don't get from the translation sites like that contraction.
I have had several reviewers complimenting me on my German. Lol. I put them right when I reply.
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But it was you who went the extra mile to create the authenticity!
Comment from Jay Squires
An interesting chapter, taken from the point of view of the enemy and the reader gets to see the all-too-human side of the frightened and injured Nazi. The clues are given that the plane landed in the vicinity of the Bache farm, near the mill. If so, what an interesting turn of plot that will make.
Could only find one glitch ... a finger tangle.
Without a compass, thge pilot had not known [I'm sure you corrected the garble by now.]
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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An interesting chapter, taken from the point of view of the enemy and the reader gets to see the all-too-human side of the frightened and injured Nazi. The clues are given that the plane landed in the vicinity of the Bache farm, near the mill. If so, what an interesting turn of plot that will make.
Could only find one glitch ... a finger tangle.
Without a compass, thge pilot had not known [I'm sure you corrected the garble by now.]
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Oh yes. Their arrival from the sky will put the cat amongst the pigeons in more ways than one. Many thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Cass Carlton
Suspected Spag. Conscious of the silence that now wrapped its "threat" around him. would "thread" be a better choice of words here? Just a thought. So Oberleutnant von Kuhlenberg and Feldwebel Gerhard Brucker
have pranged their Dornier on Jericho Farm, have they? If they light a fire to destroy the secret papers the pilot rescued from his plane they'll be
discovered. This chapter, with its dialogue in German and showing so well
the feelings of the two last surviving aircrew is a different facet in this story.The meeting and confrontation between these two and Tommy Bache will be memorable. Bring it on Jim, I'm all atwitter with anticipation.
cheers Cass
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Suspected Spag. Conscious of the silence that now wrapped its "threat" around him. would "thread" be a better choice of words here? Just a thought. So Oberleutnant von Kuhlenberg and Feldwebel Gerhard Brucker
have pranged their Dornier on Jericho Farm, have they? If they light a fire to destroy the secret papers the pilot rescued from his plane they'll be
discovered. This chapter, with its dialogue in German and showing so well
the feelings of the two last surviving aircrew is a different facet in this story.The meeting and confrontation between these two and Tommy Bache will be memorable. Bring it on Jim, I'm all atwitter with anticipation.
cheers Cass
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Many thanks for this six star review. No SPAG with threat. Silence can be like that I think. The lull before the storm etc.
Twitter with anticipation! Fame at last - you'll put me on Twitter! Lol.
Joking apart your review is much appreciated.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
War brought many casualties and I have a feeling that the two Nazis have fallen upon the broken mill.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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War brought many casualties and I have a feeling that the two Nazis have fallen upon the broken mill.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Many thanks for reviewing this. You are right. The threads come together here.
Comment from JudyE
This is an interesting development, well handled as always. I look forward to reading more as I'm guessing the airmen will end up by being found by Tommy and Heather.
A few comments:
The river broadened, and the surface had a more ruffled appearance than the narrower almost still, dark water upstream of the weir. - comma needed after 'narrower'
He made his way silently, back to the injured officer, and whispered into his ear, what he had seen. - maybe 'and whispered what he had seen into his ear'. But it's a toss-up really.
Von Kühlenberg fought back the panic, and banked the'plane to the right, - delete apostrophe
I need to keep Polaris fine on our right hand quarter, over that tail-fin. That way we might manage to make France.' - maybe hyphenate 'right hand'
'Jawohl Herr Oberleutnant. - comma after 'Jawohl'
The stars of the Plough - der gro�e Wagen, swam across his vision, and Brücker used the end two stars, Merak and Dubhe to locate Polaris. 'Ja das ist gut,' he called as the star appeared to move exactly over the right hand tail fin of the Dornier. - not sure why the ellepsis/hyphen/dash/whatever is there. Should it be a comma or maybe another is needed after 'der gro�e Wagen'. There is an extra space after 'Dubhe'. Commas needed after 'Dubhe' and 'Ja'
He lay shivering in the mast that lay below the trees - I don't understand the use of 'mast' here but perhaps it has a meaning I'm not aware of.
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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This is an interesting development, well handled as always. I look forward to reading more as I'm guessing the airmen will end up by being found by Tommy and Heather.
A few comments:
The river broadened, and the surface had a more ruffled appearance than the narrower almost still, dark water upstream of the weir. - comma needed after 'narrower'
He made his way silently, back to the injured officer, and whispered into his ear, what he had seen. - maybe 'and whispered what he had seen into his ear'. But it's a toss-up really.
Von Kühlenberg fought back the panic, and banked the'plane to the right, - delete apostrophe
I need to keep Polaris fine on our right hand quarter, over that tail-fin. That way we might manage to make France.' - maybe hyphenate 'right hand'
'Jawohl Herr Oberleutnant. - comma after 'Jawohl'
The stars of the Plough - der gro�e Wagen, swam across his vision, and Brücker used the end two stars, Merak and Dubhe to locate Polaris. 'Ja das ist gut,' he called as the star appeared to move exactly over the right hand tail fin of the Dornier. - not sure why the ellepsis/hyphen/dash/whatever is there. Should it be a comma or maybe another is needed after 'der gro�e Wagen'. There is an extra space after 'Dubhe'. Commas needed after 'Dubhe' and 'Ja'
He lay shivering in the mast that lay below the trees - I don't understand the use of 'mast' here but perhaps it has a meaning I'm not aware of.
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
Thank you once again for a very thorough review. The only suggestion not taken up was the one re. hyphenating 'right hand'. I don't think we would do that though Americans probably would. I have seen right-handed though. It is a crazy old world.
FYI: Mast is the fruit of forest trees and shrubs, such as acorns and other nuts. The term derives from the Old English mæst, meaning the nuts of forest trees that have accumulated on the ground.
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Thanks for the explanation of mast. I thought perhaps it had a meaning that was foreign to me. Google wasn't any help on this occasion either.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent episode, all written as seen through the eyes of two occupants of a downed German plane, which seems to have come across the old mill, crash landing near it, the Lieutenant is wounded and the only other survivor is the gunner, with some secret papers. How exciting, wonderfully done, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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This is an excellent episode, all written as seen through the eyes of two occupants of a downed German plane, which seems to have come across the old mill, crash landing near it, the Lieutenant is wounded and the only other survivor is the gunner, with some secret papers. How exciting, wonderfully done, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Yes. The war has well and truly come to Cleeborough mill. We will see over the next couple of weeks how this weaves its way into the story. Thank you for this supportive review.
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Good plot move
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Thankyou.
Comment from Ginnygray
What an informative writing! As a history buff and a baby boomer of that era, I thoroughly enjoyed the read! Most interesting too we're the different names of the aircraft! German was my language that I chose in college though I have lost a lot vocabulary but remember kaput as broken and sentence structure somewhat! Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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What an informative writing! As a history buff and a baby boomer of that era, I thoroughly enjoyed the read! Most interesting too we're the different names of the aircraft! German was my language that I chose in college though I have lost a lot vocabulary but remember kaput as broken and sentence structure somewhat! Enjoyed!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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The Dornier 17 or flying pencil as it was known was one of the main bombers used in the blitz on London. Crewed by four or five it was a common sight in the night sky over Britain. Many thanks for this review.
Comment from nomi338
What will the future bring to this pair of wounded warriors? It did not take me long to figure out that they had landed near the Bache property. I do hope and pray that the Bache's do not meet with any harm from these two. While I do not hold out any ill feelings toward them, war being what it is. But if they harm the Bache family in any way, I will banish them to the lowest levels of destruction.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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What will the future bring to this pair of wounded warriors? It did not take me long to figure out that they had landed near the Bache property. I do hope and pray that the Bache's do not meet with any harm from these two. While I do not hold out any ill feelings toward them, war being what it is. But if they harm the Bache family in any way, I will banish them to the lowest levels of destruction.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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I think you will be surprised at the ultimate outcome of this incident. I hope it will be a pleasant surprise. Thank you for your sympathetic review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I thought at first that plane crashed and then I thought they were still in the air, so I was confused about that, have they crashed in England? I wasn't quite sure what was happening here. Being injured threatens survival in these circumstances, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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I thought at first that plane crashed and then I thought they were still in the air, so I was confused about that, have they crashed in England? I wasn't quite sure what was happening here. Being injured threatens survival in these circumstances, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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I am sorry if my flashback technique confused you. All will become clear soon. Many thanks for your response.
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I expect it is me, I think in straight lines! Those films on TV that shoot back and forwards in time always confuse me! Ha ha ha x x x