The Scarf
Tanka 5/7/5/7/728 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a bittersweet tanka. The emotion is felt by a lot of people who mourn the loss of loved ones gone for a long time. The scent can possibly bring back a memory that may bring back the face.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This is a bittersweet tanka. The emotion is felt by a lot of people who mourn the loss of loved ones gone for a long time. The scent can possibly bring back a memory that may bring back the face.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
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My pleasure, Gypsy.
Joan
Comment from Dilettante junior
This is a heartfelt poem. Very nice. The photo complements the writing. You must miss your mother a lot. I am sure she must be very proud of you today. Bravo!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This is a heartfelt poem. Very nice. The photo complements the writing. You must miss your mother a lot. I am sure she must be very proud of you today. Bravo!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is such a beautiful, touching SUPERB tanka! It resonates with me because I too have a "box of precious things." If you'd used big, fancy words that sent me to the thesaurus, I would NOT be so moved!!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This is such a beautiful, touching SUPERB tanka! It resonates with me because I too have a "box of precious things." If you'd used big, fancy words that sent me to the thesaurus, I would NOT be so moved!!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Sherry Asbury
This just made my heart pitter-pat!! I had an evil mother and nothing like your scarf to hold when times are hard. My Grammy was really more of a mother and I close my eyes whenever I hear bird song...for she raised finches and parakeets - and a parrot. I am so glad you are here - mayhaps I can learn from you!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This just made my heart pitter-pat!! I had an evil mother and nothing like your scarf to hold when times are hard. My Grammy was really more of a mother and I close my eyes whenever I hear bird song...for she raised finches and parakeets - and a parrot. I am so glad you are here - mayhaps I can learn from you!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You are welcome dear...
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
How wonderful to still have the smell of someone after they've gone. I had a hair brush belonging to my husband and it was a great comfort after he died, it eventually I had to throw it away, I could identify with your words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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How wonderful to still have the smell of someone after they've gone. I had a hair brush belonging to my husband and it was a great comfort after he died, it eventually I had to throw it away, I could identify with your words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a fine tanka, and true to the form in the imperial sense. A memory of a loved one, your mother, now passed but still lingers in the silk scarf that holds so much meaning for you.
Very, well done here. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This is a fine tanka, and true to the form in the imperial sense. A memory of a loved one, your mother, now passed but still lingers in the silk scarf that holds so much meaning for you.
Very, well done here. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars, Gloria. I really appreciate it. Have a wonderful weekend, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your poignant tanka, Gypsy. I like its presentation--the color scheme works well, the image is beautiful, and your words are filled with imagery. Your notes add more info. I quit entering tanka contests on FS because the judges don't know what a tanka is and how it should be written right.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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You did a great job with your poignant tanka, Gypsy. I like its presentation--the color scheme works well, the image is beautiful, and your words are filled with imagery. Your notes add more info. I quit entering tanka contests on FS because the judges don't know what a tanka is and how it should be written right.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Yes, I know what you mean. I'm thinking about starting a japanese poetry club to cover all the other forms than just haiku. Most Fanstory writers have narrow minds about that kind of poetry. Thank you very much, Jan. I always appreciate your reviews. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This is so elegant, heartfelt in its simplicity. I am sorry you lost your mom at such a young age. This brought back memories for me. My mom died two weeks before my eighth birthday, and I remember holding on to the baby clothes and her sweater for days, smelling her essence. I too try to remember what she was like.
Thank you for the read.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This is so elegant, heartfelt in its simplicity. I am sorry you lost your mom at such a young age. This brought back memories for me. My mom died two weeks before my eighth birthday, and I remember holding on to the baby clothes and her sweater for days, smelling her essence. I too try to remember what she was like.
Thank you for the read.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Mary. I really appreciate your exceptional review and six stars. It means a lot coming from you....you know what's like. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy
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Your welcome. It was well deserved for a talented writer.
Mary
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is so lovingly written that it brought tears to my eyes. I miss my mother who died when she was 93. It's been several years since she passed but, I long for a scarf with her scent to smell, when I feel all alone in the world and need my mom. I am touched by this piece and can palpably feel the grief you must've felt when you were but ten years old. How sad to lose a mother when so young...it is very special to have that box of precious things to peruse and remember the loving scent of your mother. The tanka is well done and fits the mold it is meant to fit inside. Thank you for sharing this beautiful and poignant poem with us.
Take care,
Jesse
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This is so lovingly written that it brought tears to my eyes. I miss my mother who died when she was 93. It's been several years since she passed but, I long for a scarf with her scent to smell, when I feel all alone in the world and need my mom. I am touched by this piece and can palpably feel the grief you must've felt when you were but ten years old. How sad to lose a mother when so young...it is very special to have that box of precious things to peruse and remember the loving scent of your mother. The tanka is well done and fits the mold it is meant to fit inside. Thank you for sharing this beautiful and poignant poem with us.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Jesse. I always appreciate your reviews. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy
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You are very welcome, Gypsy, and have a nice weekend as well!
Jesse
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Lovely image and
nice presentation, Gypsy.
-I'm sorry your lost your
mother at such a young age.
-It is nice to be inspired by
another FS member.
-You wrote a lovely tribute
to your mother and the
memories you have.
-I'm sure your mother
would be very pleased; it
is a beautiful and
heartfelt poem.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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-Lovely image and
nice presentation, Gypsy.
-I'm sorry your lost your
mother at such a young age.
-It is nice to be inspired by
another FS member.
-You wrote a lovely tribute
to your mother and the
memories you have.
-I'm sure your mother
would be very pleased; it
is a beautiful and
heartfelt poem.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Pam. I always appreciate your reviews. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy
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You are very welcome, Gypsy, I appreciate your reply. You have a good weekend, too.