Heart Crafted Poems -2021
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Comment from dragonpoet
This free verse poem gives a clear hope mate of the church at her funeral. It showed everyone knew what made her happy. She must have had Avery good sense of smell and knowledge of flowers. You seem to infer she might of had Altzheomer's. Good entry for the club
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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This free verse poem gives a clear hope mate of the church at her funeral. It showed everyone knew what made her happy. She must have had Avery good sense of smell and knowledge of flowers. You seem to infer she might of had Altzheomer's. Good entry for the club
Joan
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Joan, she fort lost he sight, then her hearing then dementia, my sister-in-law was abundantly joyful to the very end🙏
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JLR, It shows her strength and faith to be happy through all that loss.
Joan
Comment from Sugarray77
Jim, you have melted my heart with this write. Your talent in the free verse arena shines brightly and carries the reader with you through your sentimental reminiscent memories of Billie and her flowers. Wonderful!
Melissa
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Jim, you have melted my heart with this write. Your talent in the free verse arena shines brightly and carries the reader with you through your sentimental reminiscent memories of Billie and her flowers. Wonderful!
Melissa
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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HI friend, Billie was my sister-in-law and was loved by everyone
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
Great poem about the person you love and cherished. Even when that person had left but their works of love will forever remains with us. Thanks for sharing.
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Great poem about the person you love and cherished. Even when that person had left but their works of love will forever remains with us. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
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YEs, Kitbok, my sister-in-law was a cherished soul.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Oh my, this is just lovely - brought me to tears. I am aging and dreading losing my "senses" - so far so good, but your poem reminded me of what could happen. I love flowers and so enjoyed this poem's reverence for them. When the Master takes me home I shall find Billie in her garden and ask if I can join her. Exceptionally good poetry...
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Oh my, this is just lovely - brought me to tears. I am aging and dreading losing my "senses" - so far so good, but your poem reminded me of what could happen. I love flowers and so enjoyed this poem's reverence for them. When the Master takes me home I shall find Billie in her garden and ask if I can join her. Exceptionally good poetry...
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Sherry, I too, loom forward to long stroll in the heavenly garden. Thank you for your generous six stars!
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You are most welcome and will be in prayers...
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was so lovely to read. I could see all the beautiful flowers, smell the different scents as you described them all so vividly. I do believe they smile down on us, and see what's happening. Well done, you met the challenge of the Fabulous Free Versers Club with this delightful poem. :)) Sandra xx
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That was so lovely to read. I could see all the beautiful flowers, smell the different scents as you described them all so vividly. I do believe they smile down on us, and see what's happening. Well done, you met the challenge of the Fabulous Free Versers Club with this delightful poem. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
When my sister-in-law's mother (who LOVED her flower) was dying, she would gaze up at the ceiling, smile, ans see "Oh, look at the pretty flowers." Your poem is a beautiful, moving, vivid blend of literal and figurative language.
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When my sister-in-law's mother (who LOVED her flower) was dying, she would gaze up at the ceiling, smile, ans see "Oh, look at the pretty flowers." Your poem is a beautiful, moving, vivid blend of literal and figurative language.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Janice, yes this tribute was also to my beloved sister in law.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Sorry, we miss Billie. What she has left behind flowers that blossom year after year like the poem says: "...such an awesome sight ... to see a sea of flowers that... became so alive with vibrant colors... mixing and twisting each floral fragrance..."
This sight is so beautiful like the picture. A bright spring time.
Thanks for sharing.
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Sorry, we miss Billie. What she has left behind flowers that blossom year after year like the poem says: "...such an awesome sight ... to see a sea of flowers that... became so alive with vibrant colors... mixing and twisting each floral fragrance..."
This sight is so beautiful like the picture. A bright spring time.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much Chan, Billie, my sister-in-law was much loved.
Comment from Wendy G
I really enjoyed this excellent poem, which was both creative and moving. The free verse style suited it - I could imagine it being read aloud. You wrote it very well, with thoughtfulness and love.
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I really enjoyed this excellent poem, which was both creative and moving. The free verse style suited it - I could imagine it being read aloud. You wrote it very well, with thoughtfulness and love.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
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Thank you Wendy. Billie was my sister-in-law and was quite special.
Comment from DonandVicki
Your well written first stanza was the one that pulled me into your very touching poem:
"Billie would have been eighty-eight in June ...
However, she was called by her Master before
all her spring flowers were in bloom."
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Your well written first stanza was the one that pulled me into your very touching poem:
"Billie would have been eighty-eight in June ...
However, she was called by her Master before
all her spring flowers were in bloom."
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Billie, my sister-in-law was a special person, who,lost her 91 old husband on January 1, this year, now they are reunited.
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Now it's been a day of reading tributes. Reading all this brings smiles, tears, emotions, and all you can think of. Many thanks to writers and poets like yourself who possess such great talents in storytelling ad embellishing memories. I read and enjoyed this poem.
Many thanks for sahring. Blessings!
PS: You may want to read these lines carefully again, and where possible make it much clearer to the reader:
scent of a rose and closer to her nose a wafting
smell of lemon grass became honeysuckle,
to her most certain claim of fragrance.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Now it's been a day of reading tributes. Reading all this brings smiles, tears, emotions, and all you can think of. Many thanks to writers and poets like yourself who possess such great talents in storytelling ad embellishing memories. I read and enjoyed this poem.
Many thanks for sahring. Blessings!
PS: You may want to read these lines carefully again, and where possible make it much clearer to the reader:
scent of a rose and closer to her nose a wafting
smell of lemon grass became honeysuckle,
to her most certain claim of fragrance.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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I tidied it a bit, thanks 🙏