As Day Dawns
Faith poetry Amphibrach meter31 total reviews
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, oh, wow! This is "Exceptional" - no other word fits - a beautiful and articulate write. Actually, I became emotional while reading this - it truly struck a nerve, as do so many of your writings.
Only one suggestion, to address the typo in line 2 of the 2nd stanza, by deleting the word "to," which follows the word, "should"...
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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In my opinion, oh, wow! This is "Exceptional" - no other word fits - a beautiful and articulate write. Actually, I became emotional while reading this - it truly struck a nerve, as do so many of your writings.
Only one suggestion, to address the typo in line 2 of the 2nd stanza, by deleting the word "to," which follows the word, "should"...
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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I am so humbled by your review, Eve. Your words melt my heart. Thank you for your lovely review and the heads up about the typo... I have edited it and its repaired. :). So appreciate you!!
Melissa
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You are so welcome, Melissa - your writing is amazing, just amazing...Eve
Comment from Mistydawn
What a beautifully written poem. One I'm sure we can all relate to at some point in our lives as we search for answers, trying to find our way in this world. I've had a similar experience lately a true test of faith. I kept thinking God can't give us more than we can handle, but things kept piling on. When I finally asked for help I felt this calmness come over me like all my worries were gone.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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What a beautifully written poem. One I'm sure we can all relate to at some point in our lives as we search for answers, trying to find our way in this world. I've had a similar experience lately a true test of faith. I kept thinking God can't give us more than we can handle, but things kept piling on. When I finally asked for help I felt this calmness come over me like all my worries were gone.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Hello Misty. You must know you are doing something right when the Lord leads you through a trial and a faith growing test... he thinks you are ready to grow and expand. Just trust Him. Thank you for your lovely review, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
In this excellent, moving, deeply spiritul poem, you have conveyed a powerful message about soul-searching in the night and feeling the Spirit comforting you, reminding you that it's okay not to have all the answers, because you aren't supposed to! This poem truly resonates with me.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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In this excellent, moving, deeply spiritul poem, you have conveyed a powerful message about soul-searching in the night and feeling the Spirit comforting you, reminding you that it's okay not to have all the answers, because you aren't supposed to! This poem truly resonates with me.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Hello Janice. Thank you for your lovely review and encouraging words to me. So glad it meant something to you... and me too :)
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
Your artwork and well chosen words capture that sense of oneness with nature at daybreak. It is a time of reflection and revelation - after a period of darkness. That is how we learn to walk by faith, and not by sight. God is invisible, but the glory of creation leads us straight to Him.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Your artwork and well chosen words capture that sense of oneness with nature at daybreak. It is a time of reflection and revelation - after a period of darkness. That is how we learn to walk by faith, and not by sight. God is invisible, but the glory of creation leads us straight to Him.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your understanding review, June. It is so important to trust Him in all things. :). This poem is a bit self revelatory.. :)
Melissa
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Thank you for your understanding review, June. It is so important to trust Him in all things. :). This poem is a bit self revelatory.. :)
Melissa
Comment from DonandVicki
It was the first stanza that pulled my inquiring mind into your lovely poem:
"While searching for answers, I walk through the darkness
and find myself peering at shadows for clues"
Until we find God we will always search for answers.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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It was the first stanza that pulled my inquiring mind into your lovely poem:
"While searching for answers, I walk through the darkness
and find myself peering at shadows for clues"
Until we find God we will always search for answers.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you Don. I loved your comments and find them so true. Much appreciated, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, you walked all night long through the shadows and did not fear for your safety, at all. I know why, you were encased by the strength of your faith as you pondered the many thoughts that lightened your soul's load. So, by the early break of day, you were convinced of your passion for the Lord, and this is as it should be. This is an excellent testament to your faith and a wonderful contribution to the Faith contest. Best wishes, and good luck with the contest!
Take care,
Jesse
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Wow, you walked all night long through the shadows and did not fear for your safety, at all. I know why, you were encased by the strength of your faith as you pondered the many thoughts that lightened your soul's load. So, by the early break of day, you were convinced of your passion for the Lord, and this is as it should be. This is an excellent testament to your faith and a wonderful contribution to the Faith contest. Best wishes, and good luck with the contest!
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hi Jesse, I loved your running commentary about my long, solitary walk in the darkness.. You nut, you know most of that is metaphor... LOL. I do believe that the Lord would have us trust Him more. :). Thanks so much.
Melissa
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Hi Melissa. I thought it might be, but I wasn't sure. I've taken some long walks through darkness until finally finding daylight. It was fun to read and even more fun to review, so sue me! (Haha) You're welcome, and I am glad you liked my review, anyway.
Have a wonderful Easter!
Jesse
Comment from Possummagic
This is a really beautiful poem and I felt every emotion and saw every description you used to paint this picture. It actually needed no illustration. Your words were enough. I usually feel awquard reviewing a highly ranked poet but you invited me in. Thank you. M x
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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This is a really beautiful poem and I felt every emotion and saw every description you used to paint this picture. It actually needed no illustration. Your words were enough. I usually feel awquard reviewing a highly ranked poet but you invited me in. Thank you. M x
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Oh, thank you so much, M... I really appreciate your lovely review. It is an encouragement to me. :)
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
The artwork is the perfect accompaniment for your poem, The solitude and quiet of the lake is the perfect place for reflection. It is such a contrast to what turmoil might be going on inside the individual who's ventured there. This sounds typical of human nature, thinking you know all the answers. Great work with the meter, and best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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The artwork is the perfect accompaniment for your poem, The solitude and quiet of the lake is the perfect place for reflection. It is such a contrast to what turmoil might be going on inside the individual who's ventured there. This sounds typical of human nature, thinking you know all the answers. Great work with the meter, and best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you Judi. I must admit that there is a lot of myself in this verse :). Thank you for your wonderful review and comments!!! Hugs.
Melissa
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You're welcome. This was lovely and inspirational. judi
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
As Day Dawns
by Sugarray77
Nice Faith poetry in Amphibrach meter. I am not familiar with that meter. You used it well. It's hard to let go and let god guide us. Your poem flows well. The structure makes sense. It draws on emotions. it presents strong images..
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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As Day Dawns
by Sugarray77
Nice Faith poetry in Amphibrach meter. I am not familiar with that meter. You used it well. It's hard to let go and let god guide us. Your poem flows well. The structure makes sense. It draws on emotions. it presents strong images..
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hello Gypsy. Thanks so much for your wonderful and insightful review!! I appreciate your comments so much.
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
What a great meditative poem of spiritual reflection! I really liked "A colorless cloak seems to dim my awareness" - it's really like that sometimes. And it makes us uneasy because we do insist that we must have all the answers and find it hard to accept, "Providence asks that I trust Him once more." I love that you end with a resolution of faith in "I'm one with the dawn as the daylight unfolds." Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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What a great meditative poem of spiritual reflection! I really liked "A colorless cloak seems to dim my awareness" - it's really like that sometimes. And it makes us uneasy because we do insist that we must have all the answers and find it hard to accept, "Providence asks that I trust Him once more." I love that you end with a resolution of faith in "I'm one with the dawn as the daylight unfolds." Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Hello there!! Good to see your icon come up, but I would love to see your face some time :). Thank you for your affirmation of this verse and the truth... we must trust the Lord when we do not understand... So appreciate you Helen!!
Melissa
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I emailed you a picture. 💖😊
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Thank you... you look awesome!
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You're so kind! You are lovely!
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Seeing your pretty face inspired me to update my bio and photo. :)
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Love your new picture, too! 💖💖