Heart Crafted Poems -2021
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Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Aww! This so moving. A very wonderful piece you've got here. Many thanks for sharing this very beautiful story in a poem. I enjoyed reading all the way through. Blessings and good health!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Aww! This so moving. A very wonderful piece you've got here. Many thanks for sharing this very beautiful story in a poem. I enjoyed reading all the way through. Blessings and good health!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your review and comments on my free verse poem on the homestead.
Comment from Gloria ....
I very much enjoy your return back to the beginnings in the final stanza. You've managed to bring a dreamy melancholy to the work, as centred around the motif of light.
Excellent contribution to the free verse club J, and your free verse poems are always stellar.
Gloria
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I very much enjoy your return back to the beginnings in the final stanza. You've managed to bring a dreamy melancholy to the work, as centred around the motif of light.
Excellent contribution to the free verse club J, and your free verse poems are always stellar.
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much Gloria, I do love to write in the Free Verse style above all other formats. I hope you have a delightful Easter.
Comment from LKG Alexander
You've painted a lovely picture of your birth home and your fond memories. Funny how food is so important to our roots stories. I too have a memory as sweet as this. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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You've painted a lovely picture of your birth home and your fond memories. Funny how food is so important to our roots stories. I too have a memory as sweet as this. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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LKG Alexander, it is not a wonderful thing that we possess memories that keep us humble.
Comment from DonandVicki
I enjoyed this free verse poem because I could relate to a lot of the visuals that you created with your words. This stanza made me reflect on my childhood:
"Alas, my reverie comes full circle as the moon's full face
comes into view and lights the evening with longer shadows.
And I know that the old house across the hollow is,
but a relic, that fuels distant memories."
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I enjoyed this free verse poem because I could relate to a lot of the visuals that you created with your words. This stanza made me reflect on my childhood:
"Alas, my reverie comes full circle as the moon's full face
comes into view and lights the evening with longer shadows.
And I know that the old house across the hollow is,
but a relic, that fuels distant memories."
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much🙏🙏
Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is so lovely. The imagery is just fantastic. I followed it in my head like a story.
"That lone light was all that remained intact,
in my birth home with those old rotted floors,
sideways leaning walls and broken windowpanes,
adorned with tattered and musty, dusty curtains
flapping even in the stillest of breezes."
Good stuff!!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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This is so lovely. The imagery is just fantastic. I followed it in my head like a story.
"That lone light was all that remained intact,
in my birth home with those old rotted floors,
sideways leaning walls and broken windowpanes,
adorned with tattered and musty, dusty curtains
flapping even in the stillest of breezes."
Good stuff!!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Erika, I do thank you for the time you have taken to read and comment on my free verse poem, we well!🙏🎶
Comment from Roxanne56
Oh the memories of childhood. Brings a smile to my face, such a beautiful poem. I really enjoyed going down memory lane with you and by all means "keep the light on." God Bless :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Oh the memories of childhood. Brings a smile to my face, such a beautiful poem. I really enjoyed going down memory lane with you and by all means "keep the light on." God Bless :)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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What a kind gesture of validation for this Free Verse, a biographical dance with a fond memory.
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Well deserved. Keep writing :)
Comment from estory
The adjectives were great here in this narrative, and we could really almost taste the cornbread and the beans here as you make this old cottage come to life out of the old warping wood. We see that old lamp light still lighting up the windows, the faces around the kitchen, and the scene comes to life and brings back those warm family feelings from childhood. estory
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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The adjectives were great here in this narrative, and we could really almost taste the cornbread and the beans here as you make this old cottage come to life out of the old warping wood. We see that old lamp light still lighting up the windows, the faces around the kitchen, and the scene comes to life and brings back those warm family feelings from childhood. estory
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Estrogen, thanks a bunch for the fine comments.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
excellent poem to go with it, Jim.
-Effective imagery paints a
vivid word picture of this homestead
when you describe the birth home.
-Very good comparison between the
flickering light and the old movie reel.
-An excellent conclusion that shows
the nostalgia for the place in the
last two lines.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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-Very nice image and
excellent poem to go with it, Jim.
-Effective imagery paints a
vivid word picture of this homestead
when you describe the birth home.
-Very good comparison between the
flickering light and the old movie reel.
-An excellent conclusion that shows
the nostalgia for the place in the
last two lines.
-Well done!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Pam, I can not say thank you with enough emotions to carry these words to you. So I will send a smile :)
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A smile is good and is appreciated. You are welcome and deserved the rating and the review.
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
I enjoyed very much this nostalgic look at your childhood and the home you lived in. Clearly these memories were fond ones, and your mother must have been a wonderful parent, thank you.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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I enjoyed very much this nostalgic look at your childhood and the home you lived in. Clearly these memories were fond ones, and your mother must have been a wonderful parent, thank you.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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She played her role very well, hers was not an easy life.
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I am sure it was not.
Comment from June Sargent
This is a lovely free verse that is touching and poignant. It is very important for us never to forget our roots, as they form the foundation of who we are. Yours is obviously a very strong one - one filled with love and fond memories. (not sure if this is biographical) Keep that light on and visit often...
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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This is a lovely free verse that is touching and poignant. It is very important for us never to forget our roots, as they form the foundation of who we are. Yours is obviously a very strong one - one filled with love and fond memories. (not sure if this is biographical) Keep that light on and visit often...
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Yes very much biographical, we never realize the value in simple thongs until the simple things are no longer.