Comment from Talia Shilling Rabin

Excellent

Wonderfully written! I can practically see and smell the cherry blossoms. If you wanted to make it a 5-7-5 (which I believe is the traditional syllable count - although I'm not sure) you could add the word "the" at the beginning of your last verse. Other than that, I love it!

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021

Hello Talia :)

Thank you for lovely feedback and for your concern over the syllable count.

I checked the rules for the contest and this is what they say:

For this contest you are challenged to write a Haiku poem. Haiku is a form of poetry that only uses three lines. A popular format is to have the first line contains five (5) syllables, the second line seven (7) syllables, and the third line contains five (5) syllables but a strict syllable count is not required.

I think my entry should meet the criteria as is, but again, thank you for alerting me!

Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Precious Owuamalam

Excellent

Brilliant poem, nice imagery, and a wonderful entry for the contest. In this regard, I wish you the very best.

Blessings and good health, Cheers and kudos!

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021

Thank you, Precious, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from HarryT

Excellent

Welcoming the aromas or spring is always a great pleasure after the passing of the frigid winter months. Enjoyed your little poem. Love the picture and the border you applied.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Harry, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel

Excellent

Beautiful photo - I can almost smell peach blossoms! Your poem makes me want peach tea - with honey and almond flavoring. lol
Thank you for sharing!
Susan

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Susan, for your lovely feedback. The tea sounds delicious!
Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

First Peach Blossoms
by Debra White

I'm happy to see you used the Japanese almanac for this contest. It's very helpful. It works very well with your haiku. Great entry for the Haiku contest. Wonderful imagery. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good luck!

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021

Hello Gypsy :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes.
The almanac provided in the last haiku club event is proving to be a useful tool! Thank you!
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your well thought out haiku, Debra. Your lines read well with good connection in lines 1 & 2 and a good satori in line 3. The image is beautiful. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021

Thank you, Jan, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it :) Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

"spring's sweet aroma
permeates Delaware State --
first peach blossoms"
I am sure that those lovely peach blossoms bring a sweet aroma in the spring. My son and his family live in Delaware, but I have never visited there in the spring.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021

Thank you for your feedback, Anne :)
Best wishes, Debra

reply by Anne Johnston on 24-Mar-2021

You are welcome, Debra

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

I like the picture and the flowers... The pinkish background signifies spring is coming. We need it, this winter is too long.

What the poem says: "spring's sweet aroma permeates Delaware State -- first peach blossoms." tells spring times arrived... Isn't it wonderful?

Thanks for sharing.

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 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021

Thank you for your feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra