A Sonnet For Anthony
My first Shakespearian Sonnet.56 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very well done sonnet. You nailed the traditional form which is supposed to be about love and the love for your grandson shines through I like this stanza the best
But still today, years gone, your song I hear;
the rumble of your boots lives on my stairway.
When I extend my arms, I see you clear
and in my dreams, I'll see your smile I dare say
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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very well done sonnet. You nailed the traditional form which is supposed to be about love and the love for your grandson shines through I like this stanza the best
But still today, years gone, your song I hear;
the rumble of your boots lives on my stairway.
When I extend my arms, I see you clear
and in my dreams, I'll see your smile I dare say
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, Jake.
Comment from Mary Furlong
I love it. For a very first sonnet, it's amazing. You may not think you have the rhyming gift, but you certainly do. I'm sure Anthony is sharing it with the rest of the angels, pointing to the couplet at the end with pride. I, too, love sonnets and have written many. You'll find that the meter and rhyme become perfectly natural after a few attempts at the form.
P.S. My nephew is another Anthony. I wonder how he'd feel if I wrote a poem for him.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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I love it. For a very first sonnet, it's amazing. You may not think you have the rhyming gift, but you certainly do. I'm sure Anthony is sharing it with the rest of the angels, pointing to the couplet at the end with pride. I, too, love sonnets and have written many. You'll find that the meter and rhyme become perfectly natural after a few attempts at the form.
P.S. My nephew is another Anthony. I wonder how he'd feel if I wrote a poem for him.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Oh, how nice of you, dear Mary.
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Hi, Amada,
So nice to hear from you. I am doing a program on poetry for my club. Do you mind if I use Anthony's poem as part of it?
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Of course, Mary. You can use Anthony's Sonnet.
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
May his beautiful soul continue to rest in the Lord's bosom. This poem got me so emotional. Many memories re-enkindled. Many thanks for sharing.
Blessings and good health!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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May his beautiful soul continue to rest in the Lord's bosom. This poem got me so emotional. Many memories re-enkindled. Many thanks for sharing.
Blessings and good health!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your blessings, your words are so special to me.
Comment from MissMerri
This is so touchingly beautiful Amada. I am so glad you made the effort to write a Shakespearean sonnet for your grandson. You honor him with this lovely poem and have blessed all of us by sharing it. Thank you. MM
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This is so touchingly beautiful Amada. I am so glad you made the effort to write a Shakespearean sonnet for your grandson. You honor him with this lovely poem and have blessed all of us by sharing it. Thank you. MM
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, MissMerry.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your sonnet is very well done, good rhyming and rhythm. I like the lines: "But still today, years gone, your song I hear;
the rumble of your boots lives on my stairway."
The memory of our loved ones linger on
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Your sonnet is very well done, good rhyming and rhythm. I like the lines: "But still today, years gone, your song I hear;
the rumble of your boots lives on my stairway."
The memory of our loved ones linger on
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Andre.
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You are welcome
Comment from estory
You got the rhyme scheme down, the meter was pretty close; there were a couple of awkward breaks like this face to face break in stanza two, but what really came through were these poignant images, the image of the young man walking up the stairs of your house, the robin flying like the upraised arms of the little boy, the image of the car wreck. It really brings the memories to life, and we feel your pain as you look to heaven for the hope of seeing him again. I thought the robin image was a real powerful opening that drew us into the poem and then you had a strong ending too. estory
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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You got the rhyme scheme down, the meter was pretty close; there were a couple of awkward breaks like this face to face break in stanza two, but what really came through were these poignant images, the image of the young man walking up the stairs of your house, the robin flying like the upraised arms of the little boy, the image of the car wreck. It really brings the memories to life, and we feel your pain as you look to heaven for the hope of seeing him again. I thought the robin image was a real powerful opening that drew us into the poem and then you had a strong ending too. estory
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, estory.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is so very beautiful and while I have read it before during class, it seem more heart moving now. So well done and presented with dignity and grace. A wonderful Shakespearean sonnet, my dear!
Melissa
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This is so very beautiful and while I have read it before during class, it seem more heart moving now. So well done and presented with dignity and grace. A wonderful Shakespearean sonnet, my dear!
Melissa
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Melissa.
Comment from Allieas
What a beautiful, timeless tribute to your beloved grandson. Thank you for sharing this piece of your soul with us. It was vivid and touched my heart as I read it. I couldn't even choose a part that I loved the most, because it was all wonderful and straight from the heart. When we lose a loved one, words can feel so insufficient, but your poetry transformed words into a powerful, forever tribute.
Best,
Alexandra
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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What a beautiful, timeless tribute to your beloved grandson. Thank you for sharing this piece of your soul with us. It was vivid and touched my heart as I read it. I couldn't even choose a part that I loved the most, because it was all wonderful and straight from the heart. When we lose a loved one, words can feel so insufficient, but your poetry transformed words into a powerful, forever tribute.
Best,
Alexandra
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your comments, Alexandra.
Comment from Irish Rain
God bless your grandson.
I am SO sorry for your loss.
This is not only a beautiful sonnet,
but a loving tribute. The picture is
so sweet too.
Blessings...
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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God bless your grandson.
I am SO sorry for your loss.
This is not only a beautiful sonnet,
but a loving tribute. The picture is
so sweet too.
Blessings...
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so muich, Irish Rain.
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Have a nice week!!
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
A lovely sonnet which must have been so hard to write given the subject. The emotion was apparent and the rhymes flowed in a natural fashion without seeming to be forced. Very touching.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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A lovely sonnet which must have been so hard to write given the subject. The emotion was apparent and the rhymes flowed in a natural fashion without seeming to be forced. Very touching.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you for understanding...Blessing to you.
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Thank you.