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Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "The Bache Family - 1913-1933"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
35 total reviews
Comment from F. William Lester
This is the first of your writings I've read and I'm impressed with the depth of your research. I didn't know the Germans had U-boats in WWI. I did look it up and learned something new. Very well written. Thanks for sharing it. Stay well.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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This is the first of your writings I've read and I'm impressed with the depth of your research. I didn't know the Germans had U-boats in WWI. I did look it up and learned something new. Very well written. Thanks for sharing it. Stay well.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Well, there you go. Just think of all the information one can glean on FanStory. Lol.
Many thanks for reading and reviewing. I actually enjoy researching. it is surprising where it leads.
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You're very welcome. I look forward to reading more.
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I post twice a week on Sundays and Wednesdays.
Comment from tfawcus
Interesting backstory and social commentary. I was surprised that you foreshadowed an accident happening to Jack preventing him from fulfilling his dreams. It's the sort of thing I'd have expected to occur in the narrative without prewarning after having established his character more fully in the minds of your readers.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Interesting backstory and social commentary. I was surprised that you foreshadowed an accident happening to Jack preventing him from fulfilling his dreams. It's the sort of thing I'd have expected to occur in the narrative without prewarning after having established his character more fully in the minds of your readers.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Many thanks for this six-star review. I anot sure whether or not I made an error in introducing the idea of the shattered dream as early as I did. It happens next time and will be together with that remark in the final published version. It may be that it should be delayed until after the Brooklands episode. It would be easy enough to shift. What do you think?
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I think it would be better to put it together with the event or close to it. However, if the accident occurs in the next episode and within the same book chapter, it might be OK where it is.
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Thanks. I may well bring them closer on revising it. I wanted to create a desire for people to take up this new aspect of the story, but I think you were probably right. Thanks anyway. I think a thumb is in order, not that it is much use.
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Oops! Forget the thumb I am fresh out of them. Lol.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PANTYGYNT:
And now we learn about the Bache children. Something tells me that Julia
might be a free spirit and Jack might be a bit of a scoundrel. I can't wait to see if I'm right. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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PANTYGYNT:
And now we learn about the Bache children. Something tells me that Julia
might be a free spirit and Jack might be a bit of a scoundrel. I can't wait to see if I'm right. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Now, that is an interesting thought. But what if it turned out to be the other way around? Many thanks for this review.
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That would be unexpected - which would make it a great writer's misdirection. Jan
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Love the marriage proposal, no fanfare like you get in today's world. lol
In the years between the two wars, things were starting to change, and you've made it an interesting read as we learn about the twins, their desires and hopes for their own futures. Loving these characters Jim,
cheers.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Love the marriage proposal, no fanfare like you get in today's world. lol
In the years between the two wars, things were starting to change, and you've made it an interesting read as we learn about the twins, their desires and hopes for their own futures. Loving these characters Jim,
cheers.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Thank you for that comment on the marriage proposal, more of a business arrangement really, and blessed with twins!
Comment from T.A. Walk
I know this is reserved for me to help you, but I'd like to ask a question. Do you proof and edit prior to posting here? I do, but it seems quite many do not. I'm asking because I like to try to constructively help, but your story was both entertaining and squared away. Great job!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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I know this is reserved for me to help you, but I'd like to ask a question. Do you proof and edit prior to posting here? I do, but it seems quite many do not. I'm asking because I like to try to constructively help, but your story was both entertaining and squared away. Great job!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your concern and for your question. I do re-read many times but I also rely on the helpful comments of others to correct and improve matters even more. This was posted at around 6.00pm UK time on Wednesday so had been got at b a number of reviewers and subsequently corrected by me before you looked at it so that's why you found it all 'squared away' (good nautical term that!)
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Thank you, I tend to do this myself!!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, yes, it is a well written summary of what has been and what will come. We're brought up to date with the story. 1933 is the year and still some way away from what the future will bring. As always, I love it. Now what? Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Hi Jim, yes, it is a well written summary of what has been and what will come. We're brought up to date with the story. 1933 is the year and still some way away from what the future will bring. As always, I love it. Now what? Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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You dont need a crystal ball just a knowledge odge of history to know what next - WW2. There! Now you know more than anyone else on the site, but there are ones or two hiccups before that. Lol.
Thanks for another complimentary review.
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I gathered as much, 1933 being a pivotal year for the Nazis to come the fore.
Comment from royowen
I like this journey back in time to witness the Union of of Tommy Bache and Heather Joliffe. Heather could have been bound to greater things had circumstance been different, as could Tom Warburton, the problem in Britain at that time, confined people to "class" by enlarge, as it did my talented parents. writing brings freedom to characters, not tpso the world. Well done Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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I like this journey back in time to witness the Union of of Tommy Bache and Heather Joliffe. Heather could have been bound to greater things had circumstance been different, as could Tom Warburton, the problem in Britain at that time, confined people to "class" by enlarge, as it did my talented parents. writing brings freedom to characters, not tpso the world. Well done Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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I am pleased you liked the way this chapter was formulated. thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
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Good job,
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A great post filling us in with what happened in those intervening years and how these two were married and eventually had the twins. Women were expected to be domesticated back then and the gender roles where clearly defined. Tommy Bache was lucky to have been rejected for service in the army, as his life was saved, few returned from this war and many had injuries that were life changing. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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A great post filling us in with what happened in those intervening years and how these two were married and eventually had the twins. Women were expected to be domesticated back then and the gender roles where clearly defined. Tommy Bache was lucky to have been rejected for service in the army, as his life was saved, few returned from this war and many had injuries that were life changing. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Thank you for this review that shows how you appreciated the historical nature of the chapter. History is not all battles and politics and I enjoy the social side. Good to see you do too.
Comment from Sanku
I like the placidly flowing nature of this introductory chapter with a direct hint of something bad to come. That it happens while he was sketching can give an alarm .But since he had two specific dreams-one of becoming a rich miller and the other of racing his car- I dont want to speculate and would rather wait to read... The narration plus dialogues makes it an enjoyable read..
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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I like the placidly flowing nature of this introductory chapter with a direct hint of something bad to come. That it happens while he was sketching can give an alarm .But since he had two specific dreams-one of becoming a rich miller and the other of racing his car- I dont want to speculate and would rather wait to read... The narration plus dialogues makes it an enjoyable read..
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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After the hectic tales from the Western Front it does my heart good to know you appreciated the quieter nature of this chapter. Many thanks for this review.
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hectic tales from the western front?
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My chapter 21 - the Last Nightmare
Comment from BethShelby
This was an interesting chapter. I'm glad you went back a few years and let us see how Heather and Tom came to be married. The children's leanings toward their future careers were interesting. I told you one that my grandfather had a small mill with he milled corn for bread and grain for the animals. At one time before I was born he had a water fed mill. When I was young he had small mill with some kind of engine that moved stones. Later it was tractor driven. I was surprised you mentioned that. I have tinnitus today from dealing with all the noise of that mill. Grandpa when practically deaf.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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This was an interesting chapter. I'm glad you went back a few years and let us see how Heather and Tom came to be married. The children's leanings toward their future careers were interesting. I told you one that my grandfather had a small mill with he milled corn for bread and grain for the animals. At one time before I was born he had a water fed mill. When I was young he had small mill with some kind of engine that moved stones. Later it was tractor driven. I was surprised you mentioned that. I have tinnitus today from dealing with all the noise of that mill. Grandpa when practically deaf.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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This is another of my overlapping flashback chapters. I am so pleased you found it interesting. Many thanks for reading and reviewing.
