Ooey-Gooey
A sticky situation18 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
You' made the most of this one. Most entertaining! It's wonderful where a rhyme scheme can take you. I enjoyed this contest entry and wish you the best of luck with it.
Reminds me of the oldYorkshire saying, 'Ee by gum, my bum's numb'.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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You' made the most of this one. Most entertaining! It's wonderful where a rhyme scheme can take you. I enjoyed this contest entry and wish you the best of luck with it.
Reminds me of the oldYorkshire saying, 'Ee by gum, my bum's numb'.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading
I could not resist giving it a try to combine these words into a little rhyming story.
And yes I had a good laugh by the time I finished it.
Comment from royowen
What a wonderfully quirky story that captures the imagination and sets the mind fluctuating in thought and memory, I can remember thinking exactly the self same thing, my mum will smack my bum. How do I explain this gunk on my shoes. Well done, great post. Good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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What a wonderfully quirky story that captures the imagination and sets the mind fluctuating in thought and memory, I can remember thinking exactly the self same thing, my mum will smack my bum. How do I explain this gunk on my shoes. Well done, great post. Good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading
I think I started with the idea of how as a child I loved to dream.
As I wrote the poem, I found underneath it all I had something I needed to say that was very genuine.
Sometimes, this happens when I write. I find it surprising that my brain wants to pay attention to a deeper meaning.
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Good job
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Cute presentation--kind of prose/poem hybrid--clever ending! Kudos for taking on the challenge--very hard to incorporate requisite words into such a short piece.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Cute presentation--kind of prose/poem hybrid--clever ending! Kudos for taking on the challenge--very hard to incorporate requisite words into such a short piece.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading
I could not resist giving it a try to combine these words into a little rhyming story.
And yes I had a good laugh by the time I finished it.
Comment from Daniel Massey
That was cool! Gave me a chuckle, I think there could be a short story in-there somewhere. And the idea came to me when I read; the devil's spawn or mom would smack my bum. Hee!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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That was cool! Gave me a chuckle, I think there could be a short story in-there somewhere. And the idea came to me when I read; the devil's spawn or mom would smack my bum. Hee!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading
I could not resist giving it a try to combine these words into a little rhyming story.
And yes I had a good laugh by the time I finished it.
Comment from muffinmama
What with the sticky green goo
Attached to your shoe
This poem most definitely
Stretched and stretched you.
Very cute! Better the whack on the bum than green goo that might be the devil's spawn - LOL
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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What with the sticky green goo
Attached to your shoe
This poem most definitely
Stretched and stretched you.
Very cute! Better the whack on the bum than green goo that might be the devil's spawn - LOL
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading
I could not resist giving it a try to combine these words into a little rhyming story.
And yes I had a good laugh by the time I finished it.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Quite a sticky situations for the gooey section, and the solution was quite simple stick to the mud or free yourself and face the music. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Quite a sticky situations for the gooey section, and the solution was quite simple stick to the mud or free yourself and face the music. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading
I could not resist giving it a try to combine these words into a little rhyming story with a decision to make.
And yes I had a good laugh by the time I finished it.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
You did a good job with this challenge. Some of the words aren't exact rhymes, but the story is interesting and funny, and seems more important.
Here's a tiny spag you can fix:
My body was shivering, the smell was that strong .
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My body was shivering, the smell was that strong.
The picture is funny, it's just a bunch of green gummy bears ;-)
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You did a good job with this challenge. Some of the words aren't exact rhymes, but the story is interesting and funny, and seems more important.
Here's a tiny spag you can fix:
My body was shivering, the smell was that strong .
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My body was shivering, the smell was that strong.
The picture is funny, it's just a bunch of green gummy bears ;-)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
Comment from michele will
Was shivering reads better. I liked your ditty. It was a lot of fun and made me smile.
Liked the rhyming too. That's all I have to say. The review may end up longer than your work.ð???
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Was shivering reads better. I liked your ditty. It was a lot of fun and made me smile.
Liked the rhyming too. That's all I have to say. The review may end up longer than your work.ð???
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you,
A bit challenging to use those words in the same poem. But made me laugh too.
Oh and thanks for the suggestion.