Heard It Through The Grapevine
When a gossip tells a gossip, who's telling the truth?20 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping--brilliant narration through dialog--this could work as a short script--stunning twist turns the tables!
typo: Pricilla=>PRISCILLA interrupted, "I'm confused.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Gripping--brilliant narration through dialog--this could work as a short script--stunning twist turns the tables!
typo: Pricilla=>PRISCILLA interrupted, "I'm confused.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you Liz! I am pleased that you enjoyed my contest entry. Thanks for catching the missing S as well. Have a great day!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your surprise ending, Mystery Author. Your contest entry reads well. The storyline flows smoothly with great details. The dialogue sound natural, too. Your topic is well=expressed and well-thought out. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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You did a great job with your surprise ending, Mystery Author. Your contest entry reads well. The storyline flows smoothly with great details. The dialogue sound natural, too. Your topic is well=expressed and well-thought out. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Jan. I truly appreciate that you have taken the time to read and review my contest entry. Your comments are very encouraging and thoughtful.
Comment from lyenochka
Super job with this one! We just dread those gossips and this one didn't know the goings on in her own household while she spread rumors about others. Hope you do well in the contest!
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"Haven't seen your boy around lately? (seems more like a statement than a question, unless the question mark was to show an upspeak intonation.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Super job with this one! We just dread those gossips and this one didn't know the goings on in her own household while she spread rumors about others. Hope you do well in the contest!
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"Haven't seen your boy around lately? (seems more like a statement than a question, unless the question mark was to show an upspeak intonation.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thanks, Helen! I appreciate you catching my question mark...a rogue for sure! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
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You're so welcome! You had my vote!
Comment from Rikki66
Proverbs 16:28 Romans 1:29. In this case, the sower reaped what she hand sown. It was a shame that she lost her child in the process. Excellent tell.
RikkiLXVI
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Proverbs 16:28 Romans 1:29. In this case, the sower reaped what she hand sown. It was a shame that she lost her child in the process. Excellent tell.
RikkiLXVI
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Wow - Thank you for those kind words and for the shiny stars. Yes, that's exactly where my mind was this morning - people reap what they sow. Tragic but true! So kind of you to read and comment on my contest entry. Smiles and blessings to you!
Comment from royowen
Talk about the irony of gossip it was Priscilla's own son who came to a sticky end, not the one she was gossiping about, which I suppose is "poetic justice" before one judges another's household, one's own should be in order. Well done, blessings, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : In a card game in (a) hooligan's back room,
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Talk about the irony of gossip it was Priscilla's own son who came to a sticky end, not the one she was gossiping about, which I suppose is "poetic justice" before one judges another's household, one's own should be in order. Well done, blessings, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : In a card game in (a) hooligan's back room,
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Roy, thanks for reading and commenting on my flash fiction entry. Unfortunately, we often find ourselves facing the same situation - like the pot calling the kettle black. Hooligan's back room is the name of the place where the card game was taking place. Have a great day!
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Well done
Comment from Ben Colder
Why is it that parents are the ones who always hears it last. Blinded to the truth sometimes or reather turn their heads to reality.
This write tells it like it is.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Why is it that parents are the ones who always hears it last. Blinded to the truth sometimes or reather turn their heads to reality.
This write tells it like it is.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. Yes, many parents tend to believe "not my kid" and miss the signs of what's really happening. Appreciate your kindness.
Comment from RetroStarfish
Great story. Love the dialogue between the two women, the wording and cadence is just right.
And, the ending is a surprise - and a pleasant one!
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Great story. Love the dialogue between the two women, the wording and cadence is just right.
And, the ending is a surprise - and a pleasant one!
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my contest entry. I appreciate your kind words and thoughts on the entry. Have a blessed day!
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this is quite a surprise! Your story really surprised the reader.
The roles were reversed. The gossiper's son was actually the gang leader (the bad guy, so to speak), and Trevor is the good guy. I didn't see this coming. Great job!
You inadvertently left out the "s" in Priscilla in the below sentence.
" A young boy raced down the street toward Pricilla and Tricia, screaming and waving his arms. "
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Wow, this is quite a surprise! Your story really surprised the reader.
The roles were reversed. The gossiper's son was actually the gang leader (the bad guy, so to speak), and Trevor is the good guy. I didn't see this coming. Great job!
You inadvertently left out the "s" in Priscilla in the below sentence.
" A young boy raced down the street toward Pricilla and Tricia, screaming and waving his arms. "
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thanks for reading and the kind review. I fixed the typo immediately - thanks! Glad you were surprised by the story twist. My favorite kind of writing - unexpected.
Comment from equestrik
What a sad, sad write this is. i think it is more os a comentary on some of the real life issues that many families deal with as well as the fact that gossip often ends up in the life of the gossiper eventually.
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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What a sad, sad write this is. i think it is more os a comentary on some of the real life issues that many families deal with as well as the fact that gossip often ends up in the life of the gossiper eventually.
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Unfortunately, you are right. Too many families live with this hanging over their heads every day. Wondering what their children are involved in and what might happen to them. It is a sad situation. Thanks for reading and the review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The theme, the plot development of this fiction is so innovative and expressive; dialogues are realistic, catchy is the beginning and ending is resolved; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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The theme, the plot development of this fiction is so innovative and expressive; dialogues are realistic, catchy is the beginning and ending is resolved; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Wow - thanks for the kind review of my flash fiction contest entry. i love to add twists and turns to my stories - makes the reader stay on their toes. Thank you for taking the time to read and thank you for enjoying it.
