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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "The Mill not the Baby - 1901"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
34 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Doing a post mortem on the best analysis between these folk, is turning into and veritable inquest on its own, with even Tommy Bache coming under suspicion, and even his assertion that he loved Hettie isn't a guarantee of anything. But suicide does seem the most likely. Beautifully written my friend. Well done, blessings Roy ,
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Doing a post mortem on the best analysis between these folk, is turning into and veritable inquest on its own, with even Tommy Bache coming under suspicion, and even his assertion that he loved Hettie isn't a guarantee of anything. But suicide does seem the most likely. Beautifully written my friend. Well done, blessings Roy ,
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this complimentary review.
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Welcome
Comment from robyn corum
Jim,
Another lovely post adding to the drama. I know very well that our Heather couldn't have done this nasty deed - but for some reason, she just made herself look suspicious. Weird. WEIRD.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Jim,
Another lovely post adding to the drama. I know very well that our Heather couldn't have done this nasty deed - but for some reason, she just made herself look suspicious. Weird. WEIRD.
Thanks!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Did she. I think you must have a naturally suspicious mind. Thank you for bringing it to bear on this review.
Comment from MissMerri
I can never seem to find any reason to give less than six stars, Jim. If the writing is perfect, the story captivating, the characters so vivid I feel like I know them, and there are no typos or errors of any kind, how can this be less than a six? I do enjoy your writing. This is definitely intriguing. MM
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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I can never seem to find any reason to give less than six stars, Jim. If the writing is perfect, the story captivating, the characters so vivid I feel like I know them, and there are no typos or errors of any kind, how can this be less than a six? I do enjoy your writing. This is definitely intriguing. MM
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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you are too kind. Very many thanks for this great, six-star review. It is is so much appreciated.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping--thankfully, you don't make errors, so I can become enthralled in the story without guilt for slacking off as a proof-reader. The mystery deepens. I'll be back!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Gripping--thankfully, you don't make errors, so I can become enthralled in the story without guilt for slacking off as a proof-reader. The mystery deepens. I'll be back!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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I am so pleased you are enthralled. Thank you you so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from roof35
Well, this certainly is a bend in the road. However, I don't think it is Tommy. All along, you have made him seem like a good guy. This is well written with no errors. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Well, this certainly is a bend in the road. However, I don't think it is Tommy. All along, you have made him seem like a good guy. This is well written with no errors. Nicely done.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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I would agree but Allen feels he must leave no stone unturned. Many thanks for this six star review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from estory
Little by little the evidence seems to point to Tommy here, you is still denying he pushed Hettie into the river. But there certainly seems to be the hint of a motive, especially if it turns out he was the father of the illegitamate child. One thing that strikes me is that Tommy doesn't seem to get tense or even violent here, as Allen accuses him. Coming that close to pointing the finger would in my mind get him anxious and confrontational. estory
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Little by little the evidence seems to point to Tommy here, you is still denying he pushed Hettie into the river. But there certainly seems to be the hint of a motive, especially if it turns out he was the father of the illegitamate child. One thing that strikes me is that Tommy doesn't seem to get tense or even violent here, as Allen accuses him. Coming that close to pointing the finger would in my mind get him anxious and confrontational. estory
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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I don't think he treats the accusation seriously. Either that or he is Mr Supercool, and I don't think he is. Thanks for the review.
Comment from RShipp
I very, non-threatening until the end, Perry Mason investigation.
I enjoyed how Allen allowed Heather to go on and on about all the minute details he had no way of knowing.
She might 'kill the goose'... even if the 'goose' is innocent, if she keeps talking?
Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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I very, non-threatening until the end, Perry Mason investigation.
I enjoyed how Allen allowed Heather to go on and on about all the minute details he had no way of knowing.
She might 'kill the goose'... even if the 'goose' is innocent, if she keeps talking?
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is an exciting chapter. I found I raced through it, I was enjoying it so much and then went back to savour it. It's great that Tommy and Heather are as interested in getting to the truth as Allen. And, even though they are sitting in a farm kitchen, the mill is still the central character of the story.
One very small suggestion, if I may. I would end the second last sentence at "...Heather's temporary absence," leaving out "putting the twins to bed." Just slightly repetitive to my read.
Again wonderful chapter and you've skillfully put us back at the mill on that stormy night.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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This is an exciting chapter. I found I raced through it, I was enjoying it so much and then went back to savour it. It's great that Tommy and Heather are as interested in getting to the truth as Allen. And, even though they are sitting in a farm kitchen, the mill is still the central character of the story.
One very small suggestion, if I may. I would end the second last sentence at "...Heather's temporary absence," leaving out "putting the twins to bed." Just slightly repetitive to my read.
Again wonderful chapter and you've skillfully put us back at the mill on that stormy night.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this enthusiastic review, and for your suggestion. Reading it again, I think you you are absolutely right and i have cut that repetition.
Comment from lyenochka
I really liked that you brought back Hettie's note to re-examine under a new light. That shows me that you worded that writing with just enough ambiguity to be read differently in the first appearance.
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Heather had a question. (Is this really a necessary sentence? Maybe show us her curiosity?)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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I really liked that you brought back Hettie's note to re-examine under a new light. That shows me that you worded that writing with just enough ambiguity to be read differently in the first appearance.
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Heather had a question. (Is this really a necessary sentence? Maybe show us her curiosity?)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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That was one of the fun things about writing this. That letter had to be written to be read twice and to be capable of different interpretation the second time. Thank you so much for noticing that and commenting on it.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup, everything looks more clear with the exposure of the facts:"tting proof-positive that the cause of Hettie's misery was, in reality, the loss of the Jericho business, and that such loss was the consequence of her own actions. The baby was, to her he believed, a mere bagatelle by comparison.", so it was the mill, not the baby. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Yup, everything looks more clear with the exposure of the facts:"tting proof-positive that the cause of Hettie's misery was, in reality, the loss of the Jericho business, and that such loss was the consequence of her own actions. The baby was, to her he believed, a mere bagatelle by comparison.", so it was the mill, not the baby. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.