Comment from Supe

Excellent

On a Sunday afternoon, while my in-laws were visiting.
Smiling proudly with his chest puffed out.
I think these sentences need commas instead of periods to make them flow
What a story! Out of the mouths of babes. Good luck with your contest. I enjoyed your sons escapades. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I will make those corrections shortly.

Comment from Susan Newell

Excellent

This is a potential winner. The ending is priceless. I can hear the little voice saying, "It means . . . " I knew a toddler who had problems with the word truck. It delighted us young teens to ask him what he had brought us from across the room.

A couple tiny things. After mother-in-law, I believe you should say who, not which, unless you really want to dehumanize her. Also, I think "three years older" should be hyphenated.

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 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021

Thank you so much Susan for reading and reviewing and your great comments. I will make those corrections shortly.

reply by Susan Newell on 19-Feb-2021

You are very welcome.

Comment from Jimmy Hogg

Good

I don't think this story needs the caveat at the beginning, just get into the story. Maybe your authorial voice want to apologies for the language that's about to be used, but there's no need in my opinion.

Thanks for sharing, good luck.

JH

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 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021

Thank you so much Jimmy for reading, reviewing and your great comments. I will heed your suggestion.