Together
A love quip.16 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
While I like the thought expressed in your short poem, should it not be six lines long, rather than six syllables. Could you expand it to meet the requirements of the contest? Beautiful photo. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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While I like the thought expressed in your short poem, should it not be six lines long, rather than six syllables. Could you expand it to meet the requirements of the contest? Beautiful photo. Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much!
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting choice of words! Most people who are overwhelmed in a relationship misses the "Me" in Us. But yours says that the other's uniqueness was lost in the "Us." I guess it means that the poet doesn't want the beloved to sacrifice uniqueness in becoming Us.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Interesting choice of words! Most people who are overwhelmed in a relationship misses the "Me" in Us. But yours says that the other's uniqueness was lost in the "Us." I guess it means that the poet doesn't want the beloved to sacrifice uniqueness in becoming Us.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much!
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Wow. This hit me in the gut...and then you add the song? I really hope you win this contest because the message is so powerful and relatable to all of us who have loved and lost.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Wow. This hit me in the gut...and then you add the song? I really hope you win this contest because the message is so powerful and relatable to all of us who have loved and lost.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and generous stars!!
Comment from donette1914
very true together we do miss the you in a relationship
simply outstanding in just a few words
very interesting piece with a wonderful photo to go with your work
your words are so smooth and very well chosen words to make this come to life
your an amazing writer and you really make ones think and believable poem
I hope for the best in the contest
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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very true together we do miss the you in a relationship
simply outstanding in just a few words
very interesting piece with a wonderful photo to go with your work
your words are so smooth and very well chosen words to make this come to life
your an amazing writer and you really make ones think and believable poem
I hope for the best in the contest
Comment Written 07-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Thank you ever so much!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great contest entry, Mystery Author. Your few words, as required, speak volumes of how the virus has affected, and continues to affect, couples. Your image is perfect and the video adds more 'umph' to you words. I love the way you used the word 'you' to create your message. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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This is a great contest entry, Mystery Author. Your few words, as required, speak volumes of how the virus has affected, and continues to affect, couples. Your image is perfect and the video adds more 'umph' to you words. I love the way you used the word 'you' to create your message. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 07-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Spot-on in six words! Sugg: rather than repeat what's already in the poem, make max use of title lines to flesh out the theme and imagery of such a short poem!
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Spot-on in six words! Sugg: rather than repeat what's already in the poem, make max use of title lines to flesh out the theme and imagery of such a short poem!
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Comment Written 07-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and helpful improvement.
