Echoes of the Future
Can you hear them...?20 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hell anon, this is an excellent poem and a great read. I wish I had a 6 left. You have used the required words to perfection (good idea to highlight them) and they fit seamlessly into your poem, without sounding contrived. The poem itself is really good. I love the final stanza with its good use of metaphor -
Yet on the cusp of night's horizon,
distant stars refused to yield -
Each brazen light a distant titan
on the coming battlefield... Really good, especially line three.
Well done and warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Hell anon, this is an excellent poem and a great read. I wish I had a 6 left. You have used the required words to perfection (good idea to highlight them) and they fit seamlessly into your poem, without sounding contrived. The poem itself is really good. I love the final stanza with its good use of metaphor -
Yet on the cusp of night's horizon,
distant stars refused to yield -
Each brazen light a distant titan
on the coming battlefield... Really good, especially line three.
Well done and warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Oh, Dorothy, your review is really a good kick in the pants and a pump of sunshine for the day -- thank you!
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Very well written poem, excellent use of the word prompts provided to create a very poetic and foreboding collage of the multiple, present day crises our world is facing. You have taken a puzzle and created a masterpiece! I think this contest (if it is a contest?) was created for this poem! The art fits the poem perfectly. Exquisite!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Very well written poem, excellent use of the word prompts provided to create a very poetic and foreboding collage of the multiple, present day crises our world is facing. You have taken a puzzle and created a masterpiece! I think this contest (if it is a contest?) was created for this poem! The art fits the poem perfectly. Exquisite!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Oh, Mary Kay, your review is really a good kick in the pants and a pump of sunshine for the day -- thank you for both it and those wonderful stars!
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You're very welcome, my friend, whoever you may be! May God bless you. - Mary Kay
Comment from jenintorre
I enjoyed reading this very well written poem. You used the five words very well. Great artwork and presentation.I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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I enjoyed reading this very well written poem. You used the five words very well. Great artwork and presentation.I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Oh, Dorothy, your review is really a good kick in the pants and a pump of sunshine for the day -- thank you!
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a superb and possibly prophetic poem, author. It is true that lies are the beginning of darkness as you have so poetically stated in your opening stanza. They are soft at first, but then ...
Excellent response to this writing prompt. I wish you great luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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This is a superb and possibly prophetic poem, author. It is true that lies are the beginning of darkness as you have so poetically stated in your opening stanza. They are soft at first, but then ...
Excellent response to this writing prompt. I wish you great luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Oh, Gloria, your review is really a good kick in the pants and a pump of sunshine for the day -- thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. The presentation is great--I like the color scheme, the image, the good use of end rhyme, and your message that is clear. You give readers much to think about. Your use of two colors in the text works well, too. The required words, though they are a different color don't stand out unnecessarily.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. The presentation is great--I like the color scheme, the image, the good use of end rhyme, and your message that is clear. You give readers much to think about. Your use of two colors in the text works well, too. The required words, though they are a different color don't stand out unnecessarily.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thanx for such a lovely review here, Jan -- I enjoy these 'make the words fit' cuz it's 'open-season' on the imagination! ;) :) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Wendy G
This is a well written poem which has successfully included all the required words in a way which has not compromised on meaning and sense, nor rhythm and metre.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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This is a well written poem which has successfully included all the required words in a way which has not compromised on meaning and sense, nor rhythm and metre.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your review, Wendy - much appreciated!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like this expression - crazy words without foothold, represents chaos but in the same time harmony, that magical yin and yang concept. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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I like this expression - crazy words without foothold, represents chaos but in the same time harmony, that magical yin and yang concept. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Such a great review, Iza -- thank you!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
I absolutely love your poem; it is symbolic and straightforward, and what I got out of it is that this work takes place at the beginning of time.
It could be symbolic of Satan's war with God before Satan is cast into Hell;
It could also be the spiritual warfare we fight every day, won already if we are on God's side.
The coming battlefield could be when Earth is populated and man's ensuing struggle against evil.
Awesome work.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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I absolutely love your poem; it is symbolic and straightforward, and what I got out of it is that this work takes place at the beginning of time.
It could be symbolic of Satan's war with God before Satan is cast into Hell;
It could also be the spiritual warfare we fight every day, won already if we are on God's side.
The coming battlefield could be when Earth is populated and man's ensuing struggle against evil.
Awesome work.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Oh, Cindy, your review is really a good kick in the pants and a pump of sunshine for the day -- thank you for both it and those wonderful stars!
Comment from DonandVicki
A poem that ignites the readers imagination. You used the prompts words well and made coherent sense out of the whole poem. I enjoyed the read. Don.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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A poem that ignites the readers imagination. You used the prompts words well and made coherent sense out of the whole poem. I enjoyed the read. Don.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Oh, Don and Vicki, your review is really a good kick in the pants and a pump of sunshine for the day -- thank you!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Echoes of the Future', is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Penned with craft and skill. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest! My fingers are crossed for you.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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'Echoes of the Future', is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Penned with craft and skill. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest! My fingers are crossed for you.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Oh, Duchess, your review is really a good kick in the pants and a pump of sunshine for the day -- thank you!
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Dear Anon,
You're very welcome. A good kick in the pants has me smiling like a Cheshire cat!
the Duchess
