Rain, Rain Go Away
A day from rain to clear skies75 total reviews
Comment from Skylar Herter
Sounds like the character in the poem had a really tough day. You really made me understand your character through your poem. I could imagine her out in the cold, damp rainy weather. Great work!
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Sounds like the character in the poem had a really tough day. You really made me understand your character through your poem. I could imagine her out in the cold, damp rainy weather. Great work!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from JennaG
Well done! I really like the way you've used the contest's required words in such a succinct way! You skillfully take the reader on a journey through this person's whole day and weave the required words into your piece in such a natural way that we don't even realize it's happening. Well written! Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
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Well done! I really like the way you've used the contest's required words in such a succinct way! You skillfully take the reader on a journey through this person's whole day and weave the required words into your piece in such a natural way that we don't even realize it's happening. Well written! Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from Jenny Kartchner
Wow you penned just a short poem and yet you used all the required words. Your words made the picture come alive. I am hoping you do well in the contest. Nice work
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Wow you penned just a short poem and yet you used all the required words. Your words made the picture come alive. I am hoping you do well in the contest. Nice work
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This girl ran into a building to get out of the rain...did she sip her soda while running? It sounds like she did and she didn't even drop the bottle or can. Rain can get slippery. Like the action in your poem. Good luck in the contest.
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This girl ran into a building to get out of the rain...did she sip her soda while running? It sounds like she did and she didn't even drop the bottle or can. Rain can get slippery. Like the action in your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent poem with very good imagery
of the rain storm and transition to a clear night of stars.
Not sure if you meant "blinded by light[n]ing," in line three.
Excellent choice of abstract art work.
Nicely done.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Robert
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You've written an excellent poem with very good imagery
of the rain storm and transition to a clear night of stars.
Not sure if you meant "blinded by light[n]ing," in line three.
Excellent choice of abstract art work.
Nicely done.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your ultra-concise vividly descriptive poem paints an appealing scene, depicting a day in one's life--how she handled the rain, which is probably used symbolically. Alliteration is a pleasing enhancement. (lighting--Did you mean lightning?)
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Your ultra-concise vividly descriptive poem paints an appealing scene, depicting a day in one's life--how she handled the rain, which is probably used symbolically. Alliteration is a pleasing enhancement. (lighting--Did you mean lightning?)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from oliver818
This is a really cool poem. I was a bit hesitant when I saw the title but the poem
Itself is great. It's fast-paced and full of interesting descriptions. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
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This is a really cool poem. I was a bit hesitant when I saw the title but the poem
Itself is great. It's fast-paced and full of interesting descriptions. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, this is very well done using all the required words, which were not an easy group to use in a poem. You have done really well with this piece. Did you actually mean 'blinded by lighting, entered a building' or 'lightning'? Either way this is a good entry - Good Luck - regards Dorothy x
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Hello anon, this is very well done using all the required words, which were not an easy group to use in a poem. You have done really well with this piece. Did you actually mean 'blinded by lighting, entered a building' or 'lightning'? Either way this is a good entry - Good Luck - regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from Julie Sandy
Nice use of the prompt words in this poem, I like the story that it tells.
Great picture also it really give a great feeling to the poem.
Thank you for sharing
Good luck
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Nice use of the prompt words in this poem, I like the story that it tells.
Great picture also it really give a great feeling to the poem.
Thank you for sharing
Good luck
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Sometimes is hard to maintain rhythm and rhyme with the constrain of certain words. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
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Sometimes is hard to maintain rhythm and rhyme with the constrain of certain words. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021