The Piper
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very nice story. You did a good job setting up for what was going to happen. I like Piper; typical teenager trying to see how much he can get away with. You're a good writer. Kept on writing and good luck. Happy 2021!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Very nice story. You did a good job setting up for what was going to happen. I like Piper; typical teenager trying to see how much he can get away with. You're a good writer. Kept on writing and good luck. Happy 2021!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the analysis and encouraging comments. I appreciate you dropping by to read and review.
Happy 2021 to you too!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is wonderful, Debi. Piper is learning so much about hoe he can control nature with his flute. From a flower bud and wasp to a cloud of butterflies and now a bully to confront him. It's a shame he doesn't have a tune to mellow
Falcon out and get rid of the bully. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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This is wonderful, Debi. Piper is learning so much about hoe he can control nature with his flute. From a flower bud and wasp to a cloud of butterflies and now a bully to confront him. It's a shame he doesn't have a tune to mellow
Falcon out and get rid of the bully. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Hi Nancy,
Thank you for the encouraging comments. I appreciate you sticking with the story. Yes, those bullies need to mellow out. Can music help?
Debi
Comment from royowen
What a fascinating episode Debi, the flautist has progressed to the point of being able to beguiling insects with his music, and had previously been able to do it with the wasps. What a wonderful episode you've written here. My daughter had that ability with her flute in worship when young. Well done My friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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What a fascinating episode Debi, the flautist has progressed to the point of being able to beguiling insects with his music, and had previously been able to do it with the wasps. What a wonderful episode you've written here. My daughter had that ability with her flute in worship when young. Well done My friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Hi Roy,
Your review made me smile because of the kind remarks about the story and because of the pride you have in your daughter's music. Have a wonderful week.
Debi
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Well done Debi
Comment from robyn corum
Debi,
This was fun. I liked the idea of this boy and his magical flute playing. I also like his name; it's perfectly appropriate and goes a long way to help the reader remember who is who. Smart!
I am worried about where you left off, though. haha Hurry up!
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Debi,
This was fun. I liked the idea of this boy and his magical flute playing. I also like his name; it's perfectly appropriate and goes a long way to help the reader remember who is who. Smart!
I am worried about where you left off, though. haha Hurry up!
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Hi Robyn,
Thank you for the delightful review. It was the name that inspired the story so I appreciate you mentioning that it appropriate.
The next chapter is already written and will follow soon. It is nice to hear you want more story.
Debi
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Chapter 40 of the Fiction speaks a comprehensive taletelling, a progressive plot development, real like characters, and ends with a curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This Chapter 40 of the Fiction speaks a comprehensive taletelling, a progressive plot development, real like characters, and ends with a curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Hi ALCREATOR,
I appreciate the analysis and for you jumping in to read a chapter of a book in progress. I find your review very encouraging. Thank you.
Debi