Once Upon a Dream
A perfect illusion.49 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I like this one very much. I like the flow, the wry sense of humor, the sense of lost loves within a dream world that is more real than reality at times
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I like this one very much. I like the flow, the wry sense of humor, the sense of lost loves within a dream world that is more real than reality at times
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Dreams are fickle and when reality dawns we are once again grounded. The structure of your poem is somewhat unusual, although you retained some mono rhyming there is no meter to give these words a melody, love Dolly x
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Dreams are fickle and when reality dawns we are once again grounded. The structure of your poem is somewhat unusual, although you retained some mono rhyming there is no meter to give these words a melody, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
Comment from DeboraDyess
YOu did an excellent job fulfilling all the requirements of the contest and, while I"m not normally a big fan of monorhymes, you did a good job capturing my attention and holding it to the end. :)
Best in the contest! I didn't see any errors or need for change.
Blessings,
Deb
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YOu did an excellent job fulfilling all the requirements of the contest and, while I"m not normally a big fan of monorhymes, you did a good job capturing my attention and holding it to the end. :)
Best in the contest! I didn't see any errors or need for change.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A terrific entry for the mono rhyme. I don't recall ever seeing a contest of this type. I'm sure this was not so easy. It not only rhymes it actually makes sense. Excellent work. Very nice and complimentary artwork. No edits or adjustments necessary.
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A terrific entry for the mono rhyme. I don't recall ever seeing a contest of this type. I'm sure this was not so easy. It not only rhymes it actually makes sense. Excellent work. Very nice and complimentary artwork. No edits or adjustments necessary.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
I sit here trying to determine whether or not your author's notes
detract from your monorhyme poem. After a second reading, I
believe the only thing that adds to it is the fact that the artwork
is a personal picture of your Once Upon a Dream journal. Your
poem is strong enough to stand on its own. Good luck in the
contest.
Rdfrdmom2
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I sit here trying to determine whether or not your author's notes
detract from your monorhyme poem. After a second reading, I
believe the only thing that adds to it is the fact that the artwork
is a personal picture of your Once Upon a Dream journal. Your
poem is strong enough to stand on its own. Good luck in the
contest.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from harmony13
The author's presentation of the poem is exceptional. The poem is descriptive, interesting, engaging and creative. I enjoyed the read of this
poem. The words flow and connect well. These words kept the reading
pondering. Great poem!
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The author's presentation of the poem is exceptional. The poem is descriptive, interesting, engaging and creative. I enjoyed the read of this
poem. The words flow and connect well. These words kept the reading
pondering. Great poem!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from mermaids
Your words have a musical feel and flow to them. Your two line stanzas have a smooth flow of words that give a dreamy feel to your poem. Your rhyme is perfect and steady. Excellent work.
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Your words have a musical feel and flow to them. Your two line stanzas have a smooth flow of words that give a dreamy feel to your poem. Your rhyme is perfect and steady. Excellent work.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from equestrik
This is a creative bit of writing and I enjoyed the picture as well as your words. As a poem, I felt that it lacked flow ansd continuity in many places. Nice job and best to you.
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This is a creative bit of writing and I enjoyed the picture as well as your words. As a poem, I felt that it lacked flow ansd continuity in many places. Nice job and best to you.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Raul1
It is true that dreams do come true. We must believe in ourselves to make it happen. Your message is great. I like your poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
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It is true that dreams do come true. We must believe in ourselves to make it happen. Your message is great. I like your poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from dragonpoet
This tells of what seems like a wonderful love that is lost in a break-up. I like the repetition. I don't think you need the phrase the phase of redeem. It really doesn't make sense and it ruins the meter of the poem. Also you can take out "esteem for' . I know it adds eternal rhyme but also makes the meter jumpy.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
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This tells of what seems like a wonderful love that is lost in a break-up. I like the repetition. I don't think you need the phrase the phase of redeem. It really doesn't make sense and it ruins the meter of the poem. Also you can take out "esteem for' . I know it adds eternal rhyme but also makes the meter jumpy.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
