Comment from Jasmine Girl

Exceptional

I love this poem and its metaphor. Yes. these twinkling stars do look like crystals and shards of glass.

The syllable count is correct, too.

Exceptionally done. I think you will win.

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021

Hello Lisa. Thanks so very much, my friend, for the lovely review. I am so happy you liked it. :)

Melissa

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

Hi Melissa, what a beautiful written poem
my sweet friend...I love the wording...
and the picture show like a cinema...
very nicely written sweet girl...I love your picture...
and love your poem...love you...Linda xxoo

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021

I thank you so sincerely, Linda, for the lovely comments and review. Hugs, sweet friend.

Melissa

reply by l.raven on 05-Jan-2021

always so welcome my sweet friend...love xxoo

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Thank you, Melissa for this lovely image. It's so rare unless you live away from light pollution that one gets to see such splendour, but when you do, it is indeed a sight to behold.

Wishing you the best with the Contest Committee. :)

Gloria

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021

Hi Gloria. Thank you so very much!!

Melissa

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this lovely piece that describes the majesty of the brilliant night sky. You have a great metaphor in every line!

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021

Thank you Janice. So glad you like it!!

Melissa

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

I thought I had the slightest chance in the contest, now this gorgeous offering. I dearly wish for a six. Sublime and painted on velvet! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs.....

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021

Hi there!! I love the thought of the night sky being blue velvet. :). Your comments and enthusiasm encourage me, my friend. Thank you Sally.

Melissa

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

This is a Beautiful 5-7-5 poem. Luminous crystals flung across blue velvet skies twinkling shards of glass. Beautiful photo. Good luck in the contest.

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021

Hello Joanne. Thanks so much... sometimes these short ones are challenging. :)

Melissa

Comment from 4theloveoftrees

Excellent

I love this, it is a beautiful expression of a star-filled sky, and of course the photo you chose is perfect! Thanks so much for sharing your words, I enjoyed reading this.

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021

Hello 4TLOT... thanks so very much!!

Melissa

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Lovely imagery in this. Comparing stars to shards of glass is creative. Blue velvet skies is beautiful description. Your use of twinkling reminds the reader of stars. The artwork fits right in with your description. Best of luck in the contest. judi

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021

Thanks Judi. I really appreciate your comments and review, my friend!!

Melissa

reply by judiverse on 05-Jan-2021

You're very welcome. judi

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I love your definition about the stars that are so beautiful and serene: "
luminous crystals
flung across blue velvet skies ~
twinkling shards of glass" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021

Hello Iza... thanks so very much.

Melissa

Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Melissa,

Quite a starry night your portrayed in your entry.

Especially like the alliterative sounds in your middle line.

So my question: are the crystals flung and the shards fill the skies? If indeed they are two distinctive thoughts, then maybe use a semi-colon rather than a comma.

Mark

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021

Thank you for the comment about the structure, Mark. I will add the semicolon because they are separate thoughts.