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Comment from muffinmama
I'm so enjoying this story. The dialogue rings true and the conversation is not forced, very natural. The dilemma for Allen is fortunately not the cliché of survivor's guilt, but the more intriguing question of suicide. Universal question with no satisfactory answer.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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I'm so enjoying this story. The dialogue rings true and the conversation is not forced, very natural. The dilemma for Allen is fortunately not the cliché of survivor's guilt, but the more intriguing question of suicide. Universal question with no satisfactory answer.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this discerning review that spotted the different kinds of guilt involved.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Oh, the plot thickens! This wonderful story is catching even though it is seen through the years--just because you put your writing skills to work. I am anxious to read the next post!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Oh, the plot thickens! This wonderful story is catching even though it is seen through the years--just because you put your writing skills to work. I am anxious to read the next post!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this supportive review. The next episode should be posted on Wednesday 6th January. I am trying to keep to a Sunday/Wednesday routine.
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Great!!!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
We can learn something about Sergeant Warburton from this writing.
The author is a good story teller. You can follow what is being discussed and what its happening.
The author ended this article with: "Their name wasn't Warburton in any case. I can't recall it at the moment..."
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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We can learn something about Sergeant Warburton from this writing.
The author is a good story teller. You can follow what is being discussed and what its happening.
The author ended this article with: "Their name wasn't Warburton in any case. I can't recall it at the moment..."
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad that Tom Warburton never wrote to Heather. Even if he thought that his hopes of marriage could never happen, he and Heather were very close. I guess you'll let us know why he was on a suicide mission in all his heroics.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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That's so sad that Tom Warburton never wrote to Heather. Even if he thought that his hopes of marriage could never happen, he and Heather were very close. I guess you'll let us know why he was on a suicide mission in all his heroics.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for your emotion. It is exactly what I was trying to create in readers who had followed the story from the beginning.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I believe you said this was to be literary fiction and it does fit the designation. If you are the one who told be at another time that you did not like stories with local color and details, you have succeeded in that. Your discussion is interesting and you bring up an incredible Gordian Knot as to whether someone who gives his life to protect the other troopers in the foxhole with him has committed suicide if he throws himself on the grenade. I'm just not sure there is a market in this day and age for knotty problems in a discussion.
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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I believe you said this was to be literary fiction and it does fit the designation. If you are the one who told be at another time that you did not like stories with local color and details, you have succeeded in that. Your discussion is interesting and you bring up an incredible Gordian Knot as to whether someone who gives his life to protect the other troopers in the foxhole with him has committed suicide if he throws himself on the grenade. I'm just not sure there is a market in this day and age for knotty problems in a discussion.
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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I cannot remember saying I did not like such stories. I do not think though that the current state of the market should have a bearing on the grading awarded by a reviewer. That, to my mind is an unfair review.
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I'm afraid my writing is entirely to become a selling writer again. I forget that many write for the love of seeing their written word. I will remember what you are working towards and will mark accordingly. Sorry to misunderstand.
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At my age it is not really feasible to consider a new career. You apology is accepted.
Comment from Sugarray77
I like how the plot is thickening and the mysterious reasons why Tom felt as he did. The dialogue was very good and the pace held my attention as I read along. Very good job on this, Jim.
Melissa
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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I like how the plot is thickening and the mysterious reasons why Tom felt as he did. The dialogue was very good and the pace held my attention as I read along. Very good job on this, Jim.
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this kind review and your continued interest in this story.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Tom suicidal? Poor lad, can somebody be suicidal when saves the lives of his camarads. And now we route back home to Jericho. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Tom suicidal? Poor lad, can somebody be suicidal when saves the lives of his camarads. And now we route back home to Jericho. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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That is an interesting point you raise. I suppose intentionality enters into it somewhere along the line. Did he intend to kill himself or did he intend to save the lives of others and anyway, are those two intents mutually exclusive?
Many thanks for reviewing this.
Comment from Jay Squires
Hi, Jim. You mention the VC throughout and in the notes, but nowhere that I could see did you mention what the initials mean. I assume Victory Cross, but I am just shooting in the dark. Falling on a grenade (in American film-lore it would be covering it with a helmet, then falling on it), does make an instant hero of one, whether suicidal or not. This is developing into quite a novel!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hi, Jim. You mention the VC throughout and in the notes, but nowhere that I could see did you mention what the initials mean. I assume Victory Cross, but I am just shooting in the dark. Falling on a grenade (in American film-lore it would be covering it with a helmet, then falling on it), does make an instant hero of one, whether suicidal or not. This is developing into quite a novel!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Many thanks, Jay, for this six star review. You are correct in thinking the VC stands for Victoria Cross. The incident was not inspired by US film lore but by the true story of William McFadzean who won the VC on 1st July 1916, the first day of the Battle of the Somme, for doing something similar. There have been several similar incidences in the recent middle eastern conflicts. I doubt if a steel helmet would give sufficient protection but a Bergen rucksack did recently to a British soldier in Afghanistan. He escaped with a nose bleed and a headache! There is a load of stuff on the Internet if you are interested.
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Thanks Jim. I still got it wrong. I wasn't thinking of Queen Victoria. I was thinking of Victory Cross.
Comment from Cass Carlton
Now, after telling the story to Charles Thorpe, where will Peter Allen go next? Logic would have it that he'd go to Joliffe Farm. Which will be when I learn about Felicity Joliffe's life, whether she is still alive or if she has gone the way of all flesh? And then there were the two girls, Molly and Ruth? Have they married? Do they still work for the Joliffe farm? Peter has set himself a large task to uncover the facts about Tom W's life and death. He has found an ally in Charles Thorpe, a humane and gifted minister of the C of E. This is gonna be a really interesting story Jim, I am going to enjoy it to the fullest cheers Cass
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Now, after telling the story to Charles Thorpe, where will Peter Allen go next? Logic would have it that he'd go to Joliffe Farm. Which will be when I learn about Felicity Joliffe's life, whether she is still alive or if she has gone the way of all flesh? And then there were the two girls, Molly and Ruth? Have they married? Do they still work for the Joliffe farm? Peter has set himself a large task to uncover the facts about Tom W's life and death. He has found an ally in Charles Thorpe, a humane and gifted minister of the C of E. This is gonna be a really interesting story Jim, I am going to enjoy it to the fullest cheers Cass
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this studied review. Would The rector approve of his blundering into Jericho Farm at this stage? Peter Allen needs to keep the clergyman onside at this stage. As for Molly an Betty it was, not Ruth. you should remember that their involvement was over a quarter of a century previously when they were concerned with creating an atmosphere rather than developing the story, concern for them is a bit like asking what happened to the porter in Macbeth after Macbeth's death.
Perhaps there is another story there, but I doubt if it would have anything to do with this one.
Comment from Jaime Deagle
A well-written piece. With few spag errors that I could find. The dialogue is well done and the use of slang helps bring the characters to life when reading this piece.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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A well-written piece. With few spag errors that I could find. The dialogue is well done and the use of slang helps bring the characters to life when reading this piece.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for reading and reviewing this.