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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Dinner for Two"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
34 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This story is coming together for me. From the last post I had an inkling that Hettie would be involved somehow. I am so glad you are working on this second book, and I greatly look forward to your next post.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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This story is coming together for me. From the last post I had an inkling that Hettie would be involved somehow. I am so glad you are working on this second book, and I greatly look forward to your next post.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for this six-star review. Hettie's influence on the community remains even after her death. I am so pleased you continue to enjoy this.
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Oh, I do! Your writing style is superb!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is very well written and interesting. It had just enough clues that something was important that I never grew bored. Didn't find anything to question and think it is ready for publication.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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This is very well written and interesting. It had just enough clues that something was important that I never grew bored. Didn't find anything to question and think it is ready for publication.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for this six star review and confirmation of publication readiness. That is most encouraging.
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Glad to help you in any way I can.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh so Tommy Bache ended up marrying Heather? And so the poor lad actually got quite the inheritance. Guess more detail should be coming soon. I don't know why we needed all that military background but perhaps we'll need it later, especially about the rank discrepancy of Tom W.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Oh so Tommy Bache ended up marrying Heather? And so the poor lad actually got quite the inheritance. Guess more detail should be coming soon. I don't know why we needed all that military background but perhaps we'll need it later, especially about the rank discrepancy of Tom W.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for this review. Oh yes. There will be more detail as to how that marriage happened
Comment from BrooklynnPreston
When the characters are talking to each other in your story it is very easy to get drawn into their conversations. Your use of imagery in some parts of this story, such as the moment they are talking about the Church and the timber. Your characters are also very likeable. I didn't find any grammatical errors either. Good job!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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When the characters are talking to each other in your story it is very easy to get drawn into their conversations. Your use of imagery in some parts of this story, such as the moment they are talking about the Church and the timber. Your characters are also very likeable. I didn't find any grammatical errors either. Good job!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for this most encouraging review.
Comment from JudyE
This is a clever way of reminding the reader of events from the previous book.
Just a few comments:
'Well, I'm blowed!' said Allen. 'I never knew that. I have seen Chesterfield's of course, was there for the assizes on a case a couple of years ago.' - period after 'course'
'Has it something to do with the old belief that millers were always supposed to be dishonest rogues. - question mark after 'rogues'
'But wouldn't that apply to lots of people around here. Farming being a reserved occupation,' - maybe this should be one sentence but question mark/s are needed
It all depended on the size of the farm as to how many were held to be exempt. - I might have put a comma after 'farm'
Old Mansfield, the miller took him on as an apprentice, way back when the lad left school at thirteen.' - comma after 'miller'
'Now that does interest me,' said Allen. 'Suicide is my particular field, in fact it is the reason I'm here in Cleeborough.' - period after 'field'
'Yes it was,' Allen confirmed. - comma after 'yes'?
'Well don't say I didn't warn you, Charles, - comma after 'Well'
'Thanks, but I'll stick with the port if you don't mind, at least for the moment.'
I may not be online much till after New Year. I wish you all the best for 2021.
Judy
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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This is a clever way of reminding the reader of events from the previous book.
Just a few comments:
'Well, I'm blowed!' said Allen. 'I never knew that. I have seen Chesterfield's of course, was there for the assizes on a case a couple of years ago.' - period after 'course'
'Has it something to do with the old belief that millers were always supposed to be dishonest rogues. - question mark after 'rogues'
'But wouldn't that apply to lots of people around here. Farming being a reserved occupation,' - maybe this should be one sentence but question mark/s are needed
It all depended on the size of the farm as to how many were held to be exempt. - I might have put a comma after 'farm'
Old Mansfield, the miller took him on as an apprentice, way back when the lad left school at thirteen.' - comma after 'miller'
'Now that does interest me,' said Allen. 'Suicide is my particular field, in fact it is the reason I'm here in Cleeborough.' - period after 'field'
'Yes it was,' Allen confirmed. - comma after 'yes'?
'Well don't say I didn't warn you, Charles, - comma after 'Well'
'Thanks, but I'll stick with the port if you don't mind, at least for the moment.'
I may not be online much till after New Year. I wish you all the best for 2021.
Judy
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your usual attention to detail. Enjoy your holiday from FanStory, but don't stay away too long - I need you.
Comment from RetroStarfish
This was a fascinating read - subject matter, context and your writing. This sentence is beautiful:
"When Allen broached the subject of his visit, he did so by such indirect means, that the rector was not, in retrospect, able to put a finger on the point in the conversation when it had taken place."
I also love the way you refer to what happened in the previous book, not by recapping, but by a natural conversation by the two men, about what had happened in the intervening years.
Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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This was a fascinating read - subject matter, context and your writing. This sentence is beautiful:
"When Allen broached the subject of his visit, he did so by such indirect means, that the rector was not, in retrospect, able to put a finger on the point in the conversation when it had taken place."
I also love the way you refer to what happened in the previous book, not by recapping, but by a natural conversation by the two men, about what had happened in the intervening years.
Well done.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for this supportive review. I am so pleased you are enjoying this, second volume.
Comment from roof35
I am really interested already. If I had the book, I would be reading rapidly to find out what all is behind this conversation. I am just assuming at present. Well written.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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I am really interested already. If I had the book, I would be reading rapidly to find out what all is behind this conversation. I am just assuming at present. Well written.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much, not only for the six-star review but for those words. If my writing has achieved the desire you mention, to read on quickly then i have achieved my aim. So, thank you again.
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Jim, you are keeping the story interesting with red herrings peppered throughout this informative tale. I am really getting interested in the facts as they unfold, especially since some of the characters were from the first books. Well done, as always, my friend.
Melissa
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Hello Jim, you are keeping the story interesting with red herrings peppered throughout this informative tale. I am really getting interested in the facts as they unfold, especially since some of the characters were from the first books. Well done, as always, my friend.
Melissa
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Oh yes! There is plenty of good fishing to be had with this one. Many thanks for this interesting review.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Oh dear .... Tom W put himself purposefully into the line of danger as a suicidal event? Wouldn't have thought it of him. Must have been very depressed. The barrister must be here to give something to Heather. And Heather and Tom B? Wow! Didn't see that coming! I suppose one take what is available, if it's half-way decent. Not to say that Tom B wasn't decent. Just available.
Making the most of the situation, and soldiering on!
As always, we are left hanging.
Great read, also, as always!
Lucy
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Oh dear .... Tom W put himself purposefully into the line of danger as a suicidal event? Wouldn't have thought it of him. Must have been very depressed. The barrister must be here to give something to Heather. And Heather and Tom B? Wow! Didn't see that coming! I suppose one take what is available, if it's half-way decent. Not to say that Tom B wasn't decent. Just available.
Making the most of the situation, and soldiering on!
As always, we are left hanging.
Great read, also, as always!
Lucy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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The argument of suicide versus sacrifice continues. many thanks for your continued interest and reviews.
Comment from Cass Carlton
This is going to be. one He**uva story Jim.Tom Bache married
Heather Joliffe by the sound of it and came by Jericho Farm as a consequence.So Tom Joliffe shot himself at the shoot, did he?Well, good riddance to bad rubbish. Just as a matter of interest, is Heather still alive? And what of her mother? Josh Joliffe has gone to meet his Maker, but what happened to Felicity? I doubt she is still alive, but when did she die? I love stories like this, where you feel as if you know the characters
and need to know all the details of their lives. I promise not to become a nuisance, but if you could indulge me just this once. PLeeeeaase cheers Cass
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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This is going to be. one He**uva story Jim.Tom Bache married
Heather Joliffe by the sound of it and came by Jericho Farm as a consequence.So Tom Joliffe shot himself at the shoot, did he?Well, good riddance to bad rubbish. Just as a matter of interest, is Heather still alive? And what of her mother? Josh Joliffe has gone to meet his Maker, but what happened to Felicity? I doubt she is still alive, but when did she die? I love stories like this, where you feel as if you know the characters
and need to know all the details of their lives. I promise not to become a nuisance, but if you could indulge me just this once. PLeeeeaase cheers Cass
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for this six star review. I hope this story lives up to your expectations.