The Dip
A Quadrilew poem24 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
This is such a delightful little piece and you have managed to make sense of those instructions too. You are getting really good at that these days. It used to be a problem, but not now.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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This is such a delightful little piece and you have managed to make sense of those instructions too. You are getting really good at that these days. It used to be a problem, but not now.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thank you. You saying that means a lot. I'm glad you enjoyed this big of silliness. I couldn't resist the picture.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an excellent job with your quadrilew, Yvonne. The image is adorable. I imagined the onions dancing this style before jumping into the bowl (after they were done). You handled the complicated style well. All your lines and rhymes work well to tell this little story in a poem. Your use of descriptive words created great imagery. I could see the onions (and real people) dancing this 'dip,' The onions represent people in a fun way as they float across the dance floor. Your repeated lines from the first verse fit seamlessly into the verse where they are used again.
Thank you for sharing a n excellent example of this complicated style.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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You did an excellent job with your quadrilew, Yvonne. The image is adorable. I imagined the onions dancing this style before jumping into the bowl (after they were done). You handled the complicated style well. All your lines and rhymes work well to tell this little story in a poem. Your use of descriptive words created great imagery. I could see the onions (and real people) dancing this 'dip,' The onions represent people in a fun way as they float across the dance floor. Your repeated lines from the first verse fit seamlessly into the verse where they are used again.
Thank you for sharing a n excellent example of this complicated style.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thank you for a wonderful review.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Nicely written poem. Dance with me my love we'll float across the floor. And show how it's done. They'll call for an encore but we've just begun. Cute photo to go with your words.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Nicely written poem. Dance with me my love we'll float across the floor. And show how it's done. They'll call for an encore but we've just begun. Cute photo to go with your words.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thank you. I'm happy you like it.
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Yvonne. I enjoyed reading this new form and all of the complicated pieces and parts. You did a fine job of pulling all the threads together into one unbroken piece. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Hello Yvonne. I enjoyed reading this new form and all of the complicated pieces and parts. You did a fine job of pulling all the threads together into one unbroken piece. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I've never heard of this form before and you made me smile with your Dip poem here, onions dancing into a dip, very inventive and unusual, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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I've never heard of this form before and you made me smile with your Dip poem here, onions dancing into a dip, very inventive and unusual, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thank you. I couldn't resist the picture. Just a bit of silliness.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is such a skillfully-composed, entertaining, delightful poem. Your vivid descriptions artistically sweep the reader from the first line all the way to the French onion dip! GREAT artwork
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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This is such a skillfully-composed, entertaining, delightful poem. Your vivid descriptions artistically sweep the reader from the first line all the way to the French onion dip! GREAT artwork
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh so that is what it's supposed to look like! I read the directions and was confused to do this form but you make it look so easy! And that picture is so cute! I love it. You inspire me!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Oh so that is what it's supposed to look like! I read the directions and was confused to do this form but you make it look so easy! And that picture is so cute! I love it. You inspire me!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thank you. What a compliment.
Comment from aryr
This was both an interesting quadrilew and a great reading flow. I also liked the rhyme, Yvonne. It was so easy to get caught up in the reading which was rather comfortable as well as entertaining. I will always remember this when I am thinking of French onion dip. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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This was both an interesting quadrilew and a great reading flow. I also liked the rhyme, Yvonne. It was so easy to get caught up in the reading which was rather comfortable as well as entertaining. I will always remember this when I am thinking of French onion dip. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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hahaha. I hope you laugh when you have the dip. Thanks so much.
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You are so welcome Yvonne, we have the dip once in a while, its a toss up between dill and French onion, lol.
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I love cheese dip the most, but I like them all.
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mmm cheese, I usually make my own with salsa, cheese and ground beef but I will have to check it out, thanks. Oh me too lol
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That's how I make mine, too. Yum!
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Ahaaaa so great minds think together.
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Exactly.
Comment from Mastery
So very original and so very cute, Yvonne. I love the play on words and the little onion figures doing their dip. LOL
I imagine these days are very hard for you, my friend. I wish I was there to hug you and tell you it is all going to get better. Try to have a decent Christmas though, Yvonne. X Bob
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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So very original and so very cute, Yvonne. I love the play on words and the little onion figures doing their dip. LOL
I imagine these days are very hard for you, my friend. I wish I was there to hug you and tell you it is all going to get better. Try to have a decent Christmas though, Yvonne. X Bob
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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I will take your virtual hug and cherish it, Bob. Thank you for carin. I hope your Christmas is the best ever.
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Yvonne, I hate to say it, but this will probably be my worst Christmas in memory. When I cannot hug the Grandkids? terrible. Bob
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I'm sorry you can't. I wish you were here, too. You help me so much through this. When will I quit crying every day at the drop of a hat?
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If I were to guess it would be wrong. Each person is different. It was about six months before I could discuss it without breaking down. X Bob
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That makes me feel better. I can't talk to anyone without crying. I have two local friends you have helped me a great deal. Having a long distance friend like you is a blessing. Thank you for being my friend. I hope you have the best Christmas ever. Give my regards to your wife.
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Bless you Yvonne. I want you to try and have a decent Christmas. Things will start to get just a tiny bit better after the holiday and its memories are past. Bob
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Thank you. I'll keep that in mind. I get panicky when I think I'll never see him again in this life. You've been a big help.
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He is with you every moment and he wants you to sop agonizing over his being gone. Trust me. Bob
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I do trust you, and you're right. I'm getting 'there' slowly.
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Good. X Bob
Comment from Boogienights
This is so cute, I love the image you included. Dancing is hard, especially the dip, but your words of encouragement made me want to try it. Thanks so much for brightening my day.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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This is so cute, I love the image you included. Dancing is hard, especially the dip, but your words of encouragement made me want to try it. Thanks so much for brightening my day.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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You've brightened mine with this review. Thank you.