Orange Koi
3/7/5 poem for contest15 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Stunning climax--startling choice of AFAR--then comes the devastating punch! Effective contrast with depiction of calm nature scene--single orange koi--vivid imagery!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Stunning climax--startling choice of AFAR--then comes the devastating punch! Effective contrast with depiction of calm nature scene--single orange koi--vivid imagery!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a contrast between the calm pond and the nuclear detonation in Hiroshima and Nagasaki, Japan. I like the serenity of the lady riding the koi and the dragon flies around. They look very peaceful yet it was short lived.
Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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What a contrast between the calm pond and the nuclear detonation in Hiroshima and Nagasaki, Japan. I like the serenity of the lady riding the koi and the dragon flies around. They look very peaceful yet it was short lived.
Well done.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from Anne Johnston
Well done. I like the suggestion that even when destruction was going on, the fish swam peacefully in the pond. Even in dark times, there is always a place of safety and peace.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Well done. I like the suggestion that even when destruction was going on, the fish swam peacefully in the pond. Even in dark times, there is always a place of safety and peace.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words
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You are welcome
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You are welcome
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
What a powerful image of this delicate flower inside her sanctuary juxtaposed to the violence outside. This is inspired. You build an entire world in just a few words. Stunning.
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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What a powerful image of this delicate flower inside her sanctuary juxtaposed to the violence outside. This is inspired. You build an entire world in just a few words. Stunning.
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, Shauna, you are very kind. I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from mermaids
Your words have an impact on the reader. A friend has a koi pond and they are so beautiful. The image of the mushroom cloud is haunting. Excellent theme and 5-7-5 form.
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Your words have an impact on the reader. A friend has a koi pond and they are so beautiful. The image of the mushroom cloud is haunting. Excellent theme and 5-7-5 form.
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, you are very kind. I appreciate your review and comments.