Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Staggering Reality"multi-author book number two
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Comment from Jessica M Lee
Simply nice. To me, winter marks the end of one's life. Plants bloom all year long, til winter comes and puts an end to their growth. A fisherman takes out what he can lure. And so as winter falls, so do the "souls" of the plants; into a wasteland they go.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Simply nice. To me, winter marks the end of one's life. Plants bloom all year long, til winter comes and puts an end to their growth. A fisherman takes out what he can lure. And so as winter falls, so do the "souls" of the plants; into a wasteland they go.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Good morning, Jessica! :) So appreciate your wonderfully insightful review on my renga addition, my lady -- I truly do enjoy the challenge of these really short ones! ;) Here's sending a bit of 'white' magic to put a smile on your face and be sure to drop by again soon!! ;) Yvette
Comment from equestrik
This presentation is hunting and sad. It evokes thought and emotion and I like that very much. It is a six to me but unfortunately, I am all out of them. :(
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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This presentation is hunting and sad. It evokes thought and emotion and I like that very much. It is a six to me but unfortunately, I am all out of them. :(
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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So appreciate your review on my renga addition, my lady -- I truly do enjoy the challenge of these really short ones! ;) Here's sending a bit of 'white' magic to put a smile on your face!! ;) Yvette
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Comment from juliaSjames
Beautiful Yvette. I love "fisher of souls" as a description of Winter..
Your write gives me goosebumps. Who knew collaboration on this renga book could be such fun?
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Beautiful Yvette. I love "fisher of souls" as a description of Winter..
Your write gives me goosebumps. Who knew collaboration on this renga book could be such fun?
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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So appreciate your review on my renga addition, Julia -- I truly do enjoy the challenge of these really short ones! ;) Here's sending a bit of 'white' magic to put a smile on your face over there, my lady!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant segue--thanks for including prior in notes--most don't--so much easier to appreciate in context. Stunning and elegant imagery with a near-rhyme holds/souls bonus.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Brilliant segue--thanks for including prior in notes--most don't--so much easier to appreciate in context. Stunning and elegant imagery with a near-rhyme holds/souls bonus.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Yeah, I'm the OCD type that I include that as much for me as for the reader - lol!! ;) So appreciate your review on my renga addition, Liz -- I truly do enjoy the challenge of these really short ones! ;) Here's sending a bit of 'white' magic to put a smile on your face!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvette.
I am not following this story but the phrasing you used is expressive in declaring the power of winter over its captives. We are all held captive when it strikes.
Z
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Hello Yvette.
I am not following this story but the phrasing you used is expressive in declaring the power of winter over its captives. We are all held captive when it strikes.
Z
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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So appreciate your review on my renga addition, Z -- I truly do enjoy the challenge of these really short ones! ;) Here's sending a bit of 'white' magic to put a smile on your face!! ;) Yvette
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You're welcome.
Z
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Staggering Reality
by Y. M. Roger
Hello, Yvette,
A wonderful addition to our book but unfortunately Ulla made a mistake and now our chapters are off. It's all fixable so it's not a big deal. I added the chapters so far to give you an idea of what to write. I am sorry for the extra work.
hugs,
gypsy
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Prologue Chapter by Gypsy Blue Rose
deciduous trees
clad in bright autumn palette
timidly disrobes}
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Chapter one by Zanya
Though boughs be bare, bark hues light
up landscape on wintry days.
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Chapter two by juliaSjames
silver stars glitter
in net of frosted branches
cast in midnight sky
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Chapter three by Ulla
gently soft snow falls
forming white mantle of white
reindeer's head held high
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Chapter four by Y.M. Rogers
noble and unrelenting,
Winter holds her souls enthralled
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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Staggering Reality
by Y. M. Roger
Hello, Yvette,
A wonderful addition to our book but unfortunately Ulla made a mistake and now our chapters are off. It's all fixable so it's not a big deal. I added the chapters so far to give you an idea of what to write. I am sorry for the extra work.
hugs,
gypsy
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Prologue Chapter by Gypsy Blue Rose
deciduous trees
clad in bright autumn palette
timidly disrobes}
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Chapter one by Zanya
Though boughs be bare, bark hues light
up landscape on wintry days.
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Chapter two by juliaSjames
silver stars glitter
in net of frosted branches
cast in midnight sky
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Chapter three by Ulla
gently soft snow falls
forming white mantle of white
reindeer's head held high
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Chapter four by Y.M. Rogers
noble and unrelenting,
Winter holds her souls enthralled
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Dont I have to wait until Ulla posts hers then?
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yes, I will check to see when she is done and send you a message
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She decided to take hers out :( All you have to do is go to your posting and change the chapter number from four to three.
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I changed both the chapter and the posting to follow properly-- it didn't 'fit' with a different premise... now it follows in both correct count and concept! ;) :) Take care, my lady, and thanx for keeping us on track! ;)
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It looks great and it does fit in better. Thank you!
Comment from royowen
There's on thing about winter, it tends to discourage one from going outside, so it holds one captive to its "white" magic. A beautifully written renga Yvette, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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There's on thing about winter, it tends to discourage one from going outside, so it holds one captive to its "white" magic. A beautifully written renga Yvette, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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So appreciate your review on my renga addition, Roy -- I truly do enjoy the challenge of these really short ones! ;) Here's sending a bit of 'white' magic to put a smile on your face!! ;) Yvette
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Good job
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Well done