Renga Two
Viewing comments for Prologue "Deciduous Trees"multi-author book number two
28 total reviews
Comment from kmoss
The picture pairs perfectly with the poem. I love how you described the trees as "timidly disrobing," it describes how fall progresses, the trees slowly losing their leaves after one bright blast of color.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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The picture pairs perfectly with the poem. I love how you described the trees as "timidly disrobing," it describes how fall progresses, the trees slowly losing their leaves after one bright blast of color.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review :)
Comment from catch22
Hello Poet, I really like the imagery in the first two lines of your short poem, and the final line is a clever observation of the gradual transition from fall to winter. Great poem.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Hello Poet, I really like the imagery in the first two lines of your short poem, and the final line is a clever observation of the gradual transition from fall to winter. Great poem.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is an awesome presentation, Gypsy. I love the image, the color scheme, the personification of the beautiful trees, and the last line is so descriptive. (Is that last line called a satori?) I could see everything you mentioned. The black background makes the image and your well-thought out words pop.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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This is an awesome presentation, Gypsy. I love the image, the color scheme, the personification of the beautiful trees, and the last line is so descriptive. (Is that last line called a satori?) I could see everything you mentioned. The black background makes the image and your well-thought out words pop.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Jan. I really appreciate your exceptional review and six stars! You are very kind. The last line is called satori but sometimes it can be the first line. The last line is the most used.
Comment from djsaxon
A gentle observation. Excellent author notes from which we are all able to learn and grow. I find some of your writes somewhat inaccessible but that is only a reflection of my ignorance. DJ
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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A gentle observation. Excellent author notes from which we are all able to learn and grow. I find some of your writes somewhat inaccessible but that is only a reflection of my ignorance. DJ
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you
Comment from June Sargent
What a lovely chapter for your book! The arwork is beautiful and the words capture the seasonal change of trees gradually losing their colorful leaves - as they shyly disrobe for winter. Soon they will be dressed in velvety white gowns...
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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What a lovely chapter for your book! The arwork is beautiful and the words capture the seasonal change of trees gradually losing their colorful leaves - as they shyly disrobe for winter. Soon they will be dressed in velvety white gowns...
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I really appreciate the six stars! I hope you will add a chapter soon :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation, Gypsy.
-At some point I will
add to your book.
-This is a well written haiku
with effective seasonal and
nature imagery.
-I like the reference to palette,
and the satori line, too.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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-Very nice image and
presentation, Gypsy.
-At some point I will
add to your book.
-This is a well written haiku
with effective seasonal and
nature imagery.
-I like the reference to palette,
and the satori line, too.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I am looking forward to reading your chapter.
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You are welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Very nicely written 5-7-5. Deciduous trees clad in bright autumn palette. Timidly disrobe. Very beautiful and vibrant photo to go with your words. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Very nicely written 5-7-5. Deciduous trees clad in bright autumn palette. Timidly disrobe. Very beautiful and vibrant photo to go with your words. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This one gets my last 6! You have done an excellent job describing the brightly colored leaves and how the trees are quickly losing them. Your inclusion of metaphor and personification are impressive and imaginative.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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This one gets my last 6! You have done an excellent job describing the brightly colored leaves and how the trees are quickly losing them. Your inclusion of metaphor and personification are impressive and imaginative.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Janice, for your review and kind words. I really appreciate the six stars!
Gypsy
Comment from Sugarray77
Well done on this lovely haiku and interesting Renga writings. I find it fascinating and like how it is inclusive of other poets and their work. Great job on your entry with perfect balance and presentation.
Melissa
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Well done on this lovely haiku and interesting Renga writings. I find it fascinating and like how it is inclusive of other poets and their work. Great job on your entry with perfect balance and presentation.
Melissa
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Congratulations on your first place win!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Great image accompanies your verse!
... trees clad ... timidly are great phrasing.
The last line may be edited to:
timidly disrobed (sic) does take a different slant on how to interpret your poem.
Mark
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Gypsy,
Great image accompanies your verse!
... trees clad ... timidly are great phrasing.
The last line may be edited to:
timidly disrobed (sic) does take a different slant on how to interpret your poem.
Mark
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
timidly disrobed is metaphor for losing all the leaves.
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'disrobed' was my word versus your disrobe (sic)
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Oh, okay, I got it wrong. Thank you!