Oh Life!
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Comment from KING SLATON
Everything appears to be structured just as it should. The message and word choices are excellent. I see nothing in this work that requires change.
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Everything appears to be structured just as it should. The message and word choices are excellent. I see nothing in this work that requires change.
Comment Written 17-May-2006
Comment from Elizabeth Anne
You've packed a big message into this tiny little poem. Excellent job with that!
The whole thing is oh so true.
Glows timeless, fake dies for good
I like this as to me it means that with knowledge (wisdom) fools (ignorance) will fade away. And in my opinion that would be one of the greatest things that could happen to mankind. Ignorance can really darken many peoples lives.
Great job and very thought provoking.
EA
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You've packed a big message into this tiny little poem. Excellent job with that!
The whole thing is oh so true.
Glows timeless, fake dies for good
I like this as to me it means that with knowledge (wisdom) fools (ignorance) will fade away. And in my opinion that would be one of the greatest things that could happen to mankind. Ignorance can really darken many peoples lives.
Great job and very thought provoking.
EA
Comment Written 17-May-2006
Comment from pen pal
Hi there
thank you for giving an explanation of the terms used in your poem. To be honest I would have been lost without them. You have given an unusual format for your work in that the reader must first decipher the meaning of the terms to understand the poem. very creative.
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Hi there
thank you for giving an explanation of the terms used in your poem. To be honest I would have been lost without them. You have given an unusual format for your work in that the reader must first decipher the meaning of the terms to understand the poem. very creative.
Comment Written 17-May-2006
Comment from mwilli34
An optimistic verse, one can only hope that it comes true. The problem is, of course, that different people have different ideas and may consider what I call wisdom foolishness. Oh well, here's hoping!
Michael
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An optimistic verse, one can only hope that it comes true. The problem is, of course, that different people have different ideas and may consider what I call wisdom foolishness. Oh well, here's hoping!
Michael
Comment Written 16-May-2006
Comment from Eltara
I love your poem! It's very... astonishing. I like the way u formatted the poem and the way u put it together. I am a poet myself but this something that is really worth while. I really enjoyed reading your poems.
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I love your poem! It's very... astonishing. I like the way u formatted the poem and the way u put it together. I am a poet myself but this something that is really worth while. I really enjoyed reading your poems.
Comment Written 16-May-2006
Comment from Swtdreamz
Dark salutes wisdom- as in- in silence and darkness do we really find enlightenment?
Shades sun, soars humdrum hourly
Still it shines quiet- mm true- wisdom is never obscene
Real wisdom sparks whole earth
Glows timeless, fake dies for good- hard to obtain however
good job
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Dark salutes wisdom- as in- in silence and darkness do we really find enlightenment?
Shades sun, soars humdrum hourly
Still it shines quiet- mm true- wisdom is never obscene
Real wisdom sparks whole earth
Glows timeless, fake dies for good- hard to obtain however
good job
Comment Written 16-May-2006
Comment from jillou
I loved the poem, but the authors notes more!
"Till sunshine, dark reigns in the fools' world." For me, this cast the poem into shade and it was a pity it was not part of the poem.
Your explanation of words and meanings put me off. Surely the poem should stand on its own, for better or worse? The definitions just mixed me up, when I thought I understood the poem, and made me understand and appreciate it less.
As for "real" being 2 syllables, the only 2 syllable real in my English book is re-al, a small Spanish coin - perhaps the word is different in American?
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I loved the poem, but the authors notes more!
"Till sunshine, dark reigns in the fools' world." For me, this cast the poem into shade and it was a pity it was not part of the poem.
Your explanation of words and meanings put me off. Surely the poem should stand on its own, for better or worse? The definitions just mixed me up, when I thought I understood the poem, and made me understand and appreciate it less.
As for "real" being 2 syllables, the only 2 syllable real in my English book is re-al, a small Spanish coin - perhaps the word is different in American?
Comment Written 16-May-2006
Comment from rivki1111
Hello ....this is a very nicely written and presented work that I enjoyed very much. It spoke to me about the timelessness of truth...and how it will out in the end as no lie lives forever...
Great imagery and flow and the work was written very poetically, your authors notes helping to unlock its secrets...nothing to fix for me, thanks for sharing a poem that I would definitely recommend to other readers to review, cheers rivki
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Hello ....this is a very nicely written and presented work that I enjoyed very much. It spoke to me about the timelessness of truth...and how it will out in the end as no lie lives forever...
Great imagery and flow and the work was written very poetically, your authors notes helping to unlock its secrets...nothing to fix for me, thanks for sharing a poem that I would definitely recommend to other readers to review, cheers rivki
Comment Written 17-May-2006
Comment from choice
I really like this poem it is short, sweet and to the point yet makes a very powerful point about the nature of wisdom. It's great, well done.
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I really like this poem it is short, sweet and to the point yet makes a very powerful point about the nature of wisdom. It's great, well done.
Comment Written 16-May-2006
Comment from Senyai
Hi Alcreator,
This is like an e.e. Cummings poem. Words carefully chosen but like a stream of consciousness flowing.
If I am deciphering properly, youâ??re saying that false doctrine and those that embrace the false will fade away.
But the True and those that embrace the Truth will remain and make Earth glow in harmony.
Lovely.
All the best,
Senyai
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Hi Alcreator,
This is like an e.e. Cummings poem. Words carefully chosen but like a stream of consciousness flowing.
If I am deciphering properly, youâ??re saying that false doctrine and those that embrace the false will fade away.
But the True and those that embrace the Truth will remain and make Earth glow in harmony.
Lovely.
All the best,
Senyai
Comment Written 16-May-2006
