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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Revival of the Red"5/7/5 poems
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Comment from Bobby Jo
I thought this was good, but I'm not sure I understood it to well. It just didn't really spark me. Thanks for sharing though.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
I thought this was good, but I'm not sure I understood it to well. It just didn't really spark me. Thanks for sharing though.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Revival of the red as a gift of reincarnation is a good conviction retold about the vampires who otherwise are fascinating creature, dark and white aspects brought in simply. 16/708
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
Revival of the red as a gift of reincarnation is a good conviction retold about the vampires who otherwise are fascinating creature, dark and white aspects brought in simply. 16/708
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I am amazed and so glad.i appreciate your thoughts and 6 stars.it means a lotw.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:-)
Comment from Maria C.
Very good alliteration in each line. I like the wording "luminal life-liquor and rave resurrection." Very clever 5/7/5.
Maria C.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
Very good alliteration in each line. I like the wording "luminal life-liquor and rave resurrection." Very clever 5/7/5.
Maria C.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from GWinterwin
Good words with a good picture to tell of a beautiful vampire. She looks ready to bite someone. Good job, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
Good words with a good picture to tell of a beautiful vampire. She looks ready to bite someone. Good job, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you:-)
Comment from Mastery
Hello, AS. You are really very talented, aren't you? I have been reading your work of late and am truly impressed.
You may very well win this contest. Mark my words. Bob
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
Hello, AS. You are really very talented, aren't you? I have been reading your work of late and am truly impressed.
You may very well win this contest. Mark my words. Bob
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I am so glad that you think i may win.i appreciate your words.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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:) Bob
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
I count 5-7-5 syllable count. Love the use of "l" sounds, then the strong emphatic line with "r" sounds. Only suggestion would be to capitalize each line or no capitals at all. Great artwork for theme.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
I count 5-7-5 syllable count. Love the use of "l" sounds, then the strong emphatic line with "r" sounds. Only suggestion would be to capitalize each line or no capitals at all. Great artwork for theme.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your thoughts and suggestions,will surely look at it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from Malachai
Wow!!! Powerful. I love your use of alliteration. This is such an ingenious people to write about in poetry. Thank you.
Rebecca
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
Wow!!! Powerful. I love your use of alliteration. This is such an ingenious people to write about in poetry. Thank you.
Rebecca
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much.i appreciate your thoughts.it means a lot to me.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:-)
Comment from Ridley Williams
This short piece presents a stunning image.
The verse, coupled with the art paint
a vivid picture in the readers mind. Very
original portrayal, Ridley
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
This short piece presents a stunning image.
The verse, coupled with the art paint
a vivid picture in the readers mind. Very
original portrayal, Ridley
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Anupam,
Hmmm... you certainly explored an interesting concept in your short poem. Your work was artfully displayed and I noticed your abundant use of alliteration. Not so sure about the "rave resurrection" part... most vampires I've read about are dreadfully unhappy and having the undead quality about them brings perpetual misery! But that is just my opinion. It's quite a good 5/7/5 poem.
Kind regards, W ^-^
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
Hi Anupam,
Hmmm... you certainly explored an interesting concept in your short poem. Your work was artfully displayed and I noticed your abundant use of alliteration. Not so sure about the "rave resurrection" part... most vampires I've read about are dreadfully unhappy and having the undead quality about them brings perpetual misery! But that is just my opinion. It's quite a good 5/7/5 poem.
Kind regards, W ^-^
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I apprecitate your thoughts.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from MizKat
Hi Anupam Sharma,
Your poem is interesting and the picture goes with it very well. I'd never have thought to write about vampires and leeches. You have a good imagination and great gift.
God's blessings always, Kat
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
Hi Anupam Sharma,
Your poem is interesting and the picture goes with it very well. I'd never have thought to write about vampires and leeches. You have a good imagination and great gift.
God's blessings always, Kat
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I appreciate it.Thanks for your kind words,blessings and excellent review:-)
regards