The Boat
A 5-7-5 poetry contest entry.214 total reviews
Comment from onkughosh19
A thought provoking write about the poet feeling lost at having reached her so-called destiny.She is wondering how and why she came there.She is actually disillusioned with the course her life is taking.
A lovely poem!!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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A thought provoking write about the poet feeling lost at having reached her so-called destiny.She is wondering how and why she came there.She is actually disillusioned with the course her life is taking.
A lovely poem!!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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All right but one thing :P im a guy. :)
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Lol its ok.
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i have a picture at my fanpage for gabrieltheswifter
Comment from Bina1
I think you have given insight here we all have shared at times. I think we holler "help!" a lot more than we let on! A delight, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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I think you have given insight here we all have shared at times. I think we holler "help!" a lot more than we let on! A delight, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful complement and the review, Good day!
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Comment from Cookie333
Well, I am geographically challenged, so I can definitely relate to this one my friend. I often wonder how I got here, but more often...I wonder where am I?
thanks for sharing and I wish you well in the contest,
karen
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Well, I am geographically challenged, so I can definitely relate to this one my friend. I often wonder how I got here, but more often...I wonder where am I?
thanks for sharing and I wish you well in the contest,
karen
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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I know the feeling, both to be geographically challenged and physiologically challenged in not knowing where i am, thank you for the review. :P
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Comment from Ben Colder
Stone still is why you are there. Getting stoned sometimes puts you in places you wonder how did I get here? Good luck in the contest. I will look for it in the booth.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Stone still is why you are there. Getting stoned sometimes puts you in places you wonder how did I get here? Good luck in the contest. I will look for it in the booth.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Yeah, :P thank you so much for your vote! :P it is much appreciated. I hope I win! :P good day Ben
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Comment from N.K. Wagner
Your rhymed 5-7-5 amuses as well as reminds the reader of those times when we really don't know where we're going...or why. Well done. :) nancy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Your rhymed 5-7-5 amuses as well as reminds the reader of those times when we really don't know where we're going...or why. Well done. :) nancy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for your generous review! Good luck in all you do.
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Comment from ravenblack
Nice little philosophical ha ha on how we end up where we are. Maybe you are a sleep walker or a refugee from Atlantis. My only suggestion- get rid of the commas after still, pier and steer and add a dash after steer.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Nice little philosophical ha ha on how we end up where we are. Maybe you are a sleep walker or a refugee from Atlantis. My only suggestion- get rid of the commas after still, pier and steer and add a dash after steer.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you, I only added them for extra poetic stress on the alliteration. I appreciate your review and your suggestions.
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Comment from tbacha58
Stone still, on the pier,
Yet I know not how to steer,
How did I get here?
An amazing verse, so true, and it will remind
us not to take any route except to be aware. Terry
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Stone still, on the pier,
Yet I know not how to steer,
How did I get here?
An amazing verse, so true, and it will remind
us not to take any route except to be aware. Terry
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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:P thank you for the generous five! appreciated!
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Comment from JonnyRhymes
Lovely stuff! We've all been here in life; this poem is a reminder to trust our hearts, to be flexible and not to be afraid to change your course if the path you are on is making you unhappy. Great that you convey this message through metaphor and in just a few words.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Lovely stuff! We've all been here in life; this poem is a reminder to trust our hearts, to be flexible and not to be afraid to change your course if the path you are on is making you unhappy. Great that you convey this message through metaphor and in just a few words.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your kind review
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Comment from pickthorn
An interesting 5-7-5 message. What a dilemma, this unfortunate fellow has struggled to achieve success only to find that he doesn't have a clue about what he's doing or where he's at in life. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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An interesting 5-7-5 message. What a dilemma, this unfortunate fellow has struggled to achieve success only to find that he doesn't have a clue about what he's doing or where he's at in life. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you :P I appreciate it
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Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Gabrieltheswifter,
Keeping in mind the Author Notes, it's a nice piece of Humor Poetry and thought provoking also.
When we are in an absent minded mood while walking or strolling, such things sometimes happen and all of a sudden, accidentally or intuitively, we come to know about it. Then we laugh without letting others know and soon try to evade the on lookers/ by standers or the passers by.
Its wording is simple, having smooth flow, meeting all the required norms.
Marvelous! Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Hello Gabrieltheswifter,
Keeping in mind the Author Notes, it's a nice piece of Humor Poetry and thought provoking also.
When we are in an absent minded mood while walking or strolling, such things sometimes happen and all of a sudden, accidentally or intuitively, we come to know about it. Then we laugh without letting others know and soon try to evade the on lookers/ by standers or the passers by.
Its wording is simple, having smooth flow, meeting all the required norms.
Marvelous! Best of Luck!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for your review and your kind words
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