The Boat
A 5-7-5 poetry contest entry.214 total reviews
Comment from Jackarrie
Stone still, on the pier,
Yet I know not how to steer,
How did I get here?
this is a thought provoking 5-7-5 poem. We can be carried along the path of life by choices others make for us, or we can steer our own boat and be aware of the how's and why we are were we are.
Well done Mary
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Stone still, on the pier,
Yet I know not how to steer,
How did I get here?
this is a thought provoking 5-7-5 poem. We can be carried along the path of life by choices others make for us, or we can steer our own boat and be aware of the how's and why we are were we are.
Well done Mary
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much, it makes me very happy that you liked my poem. :P
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Comment from steevie
Usually we end up on some path in life because we haven't planned a route so we will always end up somewhere but not where we wanted to be.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Usually we end up on some path in life because we haven't planned a route so we will always end up somewhere but not where we wanted to be.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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I liked your review :P thank you and I appreciate it!
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You're welcome, G
steve
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Simple yet profound. It is a thought provoking write, Gabriel. I had to read it twice and then I got it. I should have read your Author Notes first. I agree, we do often question the decisions that we have made and turns that we have taken in life.
Excellent piece of work!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Simple yet profound. It is a thought provoking write, Gabriel. I had to read it twice and then I got it. I should have read your Author Notes first. I agree, we do often question the decisions that we have made and turns that we have taken in life.
Excellent piece of work!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and your words! :P much appreciated! I also appreciate your five star!
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Yep, been there before, many times, Gabrieltheswifter. Too many times than I care to count, as a matter of fact. Up the proverbial creek without a paddle, at the end of my rope. But, when faced with such vast expanses of what seems like endless nothingness, I often find that's when I do my best thinking, when my senses are honed to a razor sharpness. So, what do we do when faced with such adversity?
We dive into the shark tank with both feet, screaming a challenge to the world, "Here I am, you bastards! Come and get me!"
Nicely done, and while my interpretation might be a bit off-the-wall, I did enjoy your poem immensely!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Yep, been there before, many times, Gabrieltheswifter. Too many times than I care to count, as a matter of fact. Up the proverbial creek without a paddle, at the end of my rope. But, when faced with such vast expanses of what seems like endless nothingness, I often find that's when I do my best thinking, when my senses are honed to a razor sharpness. So, what do we do when faced with such adversity?
We dive into the shark tank with both feet, screaming a challenge to the world, "Here I am, you bastards! Come and get me!"
Nicely done, and while my interpretation might be a bit off-the-wall, I did enjoy your poem immensely!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Lol I appreciate the five! And I have seen and heard many different interpretations, but yours actually is good! :P thank you for the review Dean, and I seriously like the poems you make.
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Heh, my pleasure, -G!
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:P the
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I'm probably going to fan you dude!
Comment from gramalot8
Gabriel, you definitely have written a food for thought poem. Well worth the recognition so far received. I think we all ask ourselves this question a time or two in our ilves. Great job and thanks for sharing with us.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Gabriel, you definitely have written a food for thought poem. Well worth the recognition so far received. I think we all ask ourselves this question a time or two in our ilves. Great job and thanks for sharing with us.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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I appreciate it so very much that you say that you believe that it deserves its recognition! Very heartening! Your welcome.
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Comment from krys123
Thank you for sharing this with your fans, myself and other readers/writers. I enjoyed this very much this poem that you are written. I remember going many wares so fast and wondering why I'm here and why did I choose to come this way. One such instance written that I traveled 3000 miles to Alaska. I sat on the bench when I got to Anchorage and wondered why and why did I come so far to find something that was so little. The poem is very inspiring in such a way that it makes people think those questions. The picture complements your poem very much and vice a versa. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for sharing this with your fans, myself and other readers/writers. I enjoyed this very much this poem that you are written. I remember going many wares so fast and wondering why I'm here and why did I choose to come this way. One such instance written that I traveled 3000 miles to Alaska. I sat on the bench when I got to Anchorage and wondered why and why did I come so far to find something that was so little. The poem is very inspiring in such a way that it makes people think those questions. The picture complements your poem very much and vice a versa. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Well, the true reason why I would go such a distance would be the reason why I would go anywhere. To be inspired. :P
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That is true your picture was well used in a portrayed much of what you are saying.
Comment from mickbey
I like this one, it was thought provoking enough for me to re-read it and change my original five star rating to a six, it's hard for me to award a six to a 5-7-5, but I think this one deserved it because the poem explained everything you did in the author notes in far fewer words, I've written a few and read many in this form, but this is one of the best I've read recently, great job.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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I like this one, it was thought provoking enough for me to re-read it and change my original five star rating to a six, it's hard for me to award a six to a 5-7-5, but I think this one deserved it because the poem explained everything you did in the author notes in far fewer words, I've written a few and read many in this form, but this is one of the best I've read recently, great job.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for the six! :P very much appreciated! :P makes me feel great and happy i did such good work. I appreciate the complement of saying its one of the best you have read recently.
Comment from Martin Chan
This poem The Boat is a good 5-7-5 poem written for contest entry. Written with a deep sensible meaning with a good flow.
Conforms to the rules of the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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This poem The Boat is a good 5-7-5 poem written for contest entry. Written with a deep sensible meaning with a good flow.
Conforms to the rules of the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you :P I hope to see your vote when it comes time.
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Comment from Mastery
Hi, Gabriel. May I call you, Gabe? Welcome to Fanstory. I like your style and after reading your profile page, I can see that you are an astute young man. I will enjoy your work as I did this poem...Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Hi, Gabriel. May I call you, Gabe? Welcome to Fanstory. I like your style and after reading your profile page, I can see that you are an astute young man. I will enjoy your work as I did this poem...Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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You may Bob, I appreciate your complement and I will be getting a membership soon.
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Comment from Lastamen
Good poetry - no great poetry always makes the reader think and contemplate the various and sundry meanings of the verse. You have indeed accomplished this with "The Boat". Your author notes only heighten the challenge to commiserate on this journey of life - should we zig or zag? Well done. Best wishes with the contest.
Till the last amen.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Good poetry - no great poetry always makes the reader think and contemplate the various and sundry meanings of the verse. You have indeed accomplished this with "The Boat". Your author notes only heighten the challenge to commiserate on this journey of life - should we zig or zag? Well done. Best wishes with the contest.
Till the last amen.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for your review, it makes me feel great when someone looks at all the possibilities that could be there. :P
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