CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from fastdigits
Peace and comfort, at times
all that is needed is a touch
of the hand, a loving embrace.
You have captured the moment
of that time of solace with
your peaceful words, quietly
spoken, whispered when in need
of those strong arms to hold
you but for a moment.
Well done
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Peace and comfort, at times
all that is needed is a touch
of the hand, a loving embrace.
You have captured the moment
of that time of solace with
your peaceful words, quietly
spoken, whispered when in need
of those strong arms to hold
you but for a moment.
Well done
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for your generous review and most kind comments. I am very happy you liked it!.......Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Very lovely write with much sweet and tender words expressed. Much enjoyed this poem. good rhythm, rhyme and meter. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Very lovely write with much sweet and tender words expressed. Much enjoyed this poem. good rhythm, rhyme and meter. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Susanne, thanks for the 'hug' - ha! And for such a generous review and great comments. So much appreciated....Sue
Comment from adewpearl
I read this out loud and it flows beautifully. You use a rhyme scheme I often use and love, and you use it well. The serene and fulfilled tone of a gentle love is most mesmerizing. Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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I read this out loud and it flows beautifully. You use a rhyme scheme I often use and love, and you use it well. The serene and fulfilled tone of a gentle love is most mesmerizing. Well done!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much! I did a bit of tweaking just now on punctuation. Thanks for your generous review and most excellent comments (as usual)......regards...Sue
Comment from enjoi
"In spirit...not a word" the ellipses here, well, i don't think it's necessary. often used as a sort of gimmick, it's out of place. a simple comma would have worked well enough.
besides that, good stuff here. good words and imagery.
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"In spirit...not a word" the ellipses here, well, i don't think it's necessary. often used as a sort of gimmick, it's out of place. a simple comma would have worked well enough.
besides that, good stuff here. good words and imagery.
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Enjoi, thank you VERY much for your excellent, honest and constructive critique here. So much appreciated. Will re-read and most likely edit. I appreciate your kind review and all comments! Regards....Sue
Comment from Jo52800
Still a couple of things you can tighten up, but much better. It comes off quite soft now, just like your message in the poem itself.
A very nice piece. I think you can tighten up some of the language and make it very good. Something like:
Vulnerable, tired
In need of embrace
Strong arms and deep heart
Hold me in this place.
Very nice though. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Still a couple of things you can tighten up, but much better. It comes off quite soft now, just like your message in the poem itself.
A very nice piece. I think you can tighten up some of the language and make it very good. Something like:
Vulnerable, tired
In need of embrace
Strong arms and deep heart
Hold me in this place.
Very nice though. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Excellent constructive critique, Jo. I believe you are correct. Will go re-read and most likely edit. Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and make your comments. Much appreciated...Sue
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no problem. I'm glad I could help. Let me know when the rewrite is done and I will go back and change the rating for you!!
Jo
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I didn't know you COULD change a rating! What a nice surprise!
Let me know if you think I did it correctly. Like I said, I am so new at this, any comments are most welcome.
Comment from vchong
Your poem reads like a comforting quilt, of a person with mutual trust and friendship would be able to provide. The warm and sincerity of how you write speaks well of you as a person, and i already like you.
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Your poem reads like a comforting quilt, of a person with mutual trust and friendship would be able to provide. The warm and sincerity of how you write speaks well of you as a person, and i already like you.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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That kind of embrace does feel like a comforting quilt, doesn't it?? Not easily found in another person. I thank you so much for your generous review and most kind comments. Very glad you like it! Regards, Sue
Comment from chaswriter
6teezkid - When one is alone and needs that touch, that embrace, that acknowledgement, and that love -- that is what your poem calls out to me. I enjoyed it. Charlie.
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6teezkid - When one is alone and needs that touch, that embrace, that acknowledgement, and that love -- that is what your poem calls out to me. I enjoyed it. Charlie.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Charlie, so glad you like it! Thank you for your generous review and lovely comments. So much appreciated.....Regards, Sue
Comment from Shenelle Coplien
Smooth and cognitive piece of poetry. I didn't see any obvious errors. I don't know much about poetry,but I enjoyed this. Keep up the good work!
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Smooth and cognitive piece of poetry. I didn't see any obvious errors. I don't know much about poetry,but I enjoyed this. Keep up the good work!
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Your generous review and comments are much appreciated!! Regards, Sue
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Senelle, I certainly want to thank you for your generous review and comments. Most appreciated....Regards, Sue