'Twas the Night After Christmas
a parody in rhyming couplets135 total reviews
Comment from DALLAS01
What a great modern day take on this classic. I love it when poetry makes one pause and look through another's eyes at circumstances that beg attention.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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What a great modern day take on this classic. I love it when poetry makes one pause and look through another's eyes at circumstances that beg attention.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Dallas, thank you so very much :-) Merry Christmas :-) Brooke
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Merry Christmas to you and yours, Brooke.
Comment from GWinterwin
Another great poem Brooke, with words that tell a very true message. So many in need and yet the money that is spent for things we don't even need, and some poor soul somewhere freezing, because they don't have warm clothes to wear. Certainly a message to make one think.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Another great poem Brooke, with words that tell a very true message. So many in need and yet the money that is spent for things we don't even need, and some poor soul somewhere freezing, because they don't have warm clothes to wear. Certainly a message to make one think.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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GWinterwin, that is what bothers me so much, the fact that so many middle class people buy stuff nobody needs nor wants just so they can do the acceptable thing of showing up with a boxed gift. I'm not against giving loved ones stuff they need, but I know from my church's annual clothing sale that some men donate DOZENS of expensive silk ties, DOZENS. They never appreciated them. The people who spent money on them never put thought into buying them. The only happy person is the guy who owns the tie company.
Thank you so much for your thoughtful review. Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
What a wonderful poem. This is well written. Christmas is such a magical time. I love the lights and the cheer that goes with it. Thanks for sharing, and Merry Christmas to you and your family, especially the Cute Little One :)
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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What a wonderful poem. This is well written. Christmas is such a magical time. I love the lights and the cheer that goes with it. Thanks for sharing, and Merry Christmas to you and your family, especially the Cute Little One :)
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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CR, thank you so very much :-) And Merry Christmas to you, too :-) Brooke
Comment from mountainwriter49
Oh, Brooke, this is most wonderful, and it has so touched my heart this eve. The essence of Christmas has shinned brightly through the wondrous words of this well written scribe. Yes, all we trash are such treasures for those without. How dumb-ass we are.
I do have one minor suggestion for you to consider:
His words[,[ how they touched me.
(I really want a comma there!)
Well done, my most talented friend. I'm all out of sixes, so all I can offer you is a Site Five and my highest honor, a six times six plus six.
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Merry Christmas, Brooke
Ray
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Oh, Brooke, this is most wonderful, and it has so touched my heart this eve. The essence of Christmas has shinned brightly through the wondrous words of this well written scribe. Yes, all we trash are such treasures for those without. How dumb-ass we are.
I do have one minor suggestion for you to consider:
His words[,[ how they touched me.
(I really want a comma there!)
Well done, my most talented friend. I'm all out of sixes, so all I can offer you is a Site Five and my highest honor, a six times six plus six.
****** ****** ****** ****** ****** ****** ****** ******
Merry Christmas, Brooke
Ray
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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a six times six plus six - now that is something worth smiling about. Merry Merry Christmas, dear friend :-) Brooke
Comment from victor 66
This is a delightful poem, very cleverly written. It was amusing but much in the Christmas spirit. I really liked your parallel. The word choice is good. You communicate the theme well. A very enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This is a delightful poem, very cleverly written. It was amusing but much in the Christmas spirit. I really liked your parallel. The word choice is good. You communicate the theme well. A very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Victor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from dennis0530
Hi, Brooke
What marvelous rhyme, rhythm and flow you engineered here.In flashes, I thought I was reading the original T'was The Night Before Christmas. After the fourth stanza, I played a little game guessing the next rhyming word. I got "trashed" after "dashed" and "within" after "bin".
But since this was an "after night" I'll take the homeless man as the opposite of Old Nick who came to bring his own brand of joy. Enigmatic how he made you smile taking things from your trash.
Brings to my mind "One man's trash is another man's gold."
But how amazing it is - our rejects make another happy. In our "use and dispose" society, the "St. Nick" was your "reduce,re-use,recycle" advocate.
And lastly, I'll not tell you called him a "grouch" - but, ouch!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Hi, Brooke
What marvelous rhyme, rhythm and flow you engineered here.In flashes, I thought I was reading the original T'was The Night Before Christmas. After the fourth stanza, I played a little game guessing the next rhyming word. I got "trashed" after "dashed" and "within" after "bin".
But since this was an "after night" I'll take the homeless man as the opposite of Old Nick who came to bring his own brand of joy. Enigmatic how he made you smile taking things from your trash.
Brings to my mind "One man's trash is another man's gold."
But how amazing it is - our rejects make another happy. In our "use and dispose" society, the "St. Nick" was your "reduce,re-use,recycle" advocate.
And lastly, I'll not tell you called him a "grouch" - but, ouch!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so very much, Dennis :-) Brooke
Comment from mrsmajor
Dear Brooke,
This poem was yours, and a wonderful poem it was...I know it had the idea of the Night Before Christmas, but it shows us how Blessed we are, and we should do as much as possible to make someone else happy..It can take so little.
My family only gives to the children, but I can always find another child to try and make happy....Perhaps Jesus will be pleased, it's what he wants us to do...share!
I really enjoyed this poem, you did such a excellent job writing it, thanks for sharing, only you could do something like this poem...
Have a Wonderful Blessed Holiday!
Big Hugs, and a Smile,
Victoria
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Dear Brooke,
This poem was yours, and a wonderful poem it was...I know it had the idea of the Night Before Christmas, but it shows us how Blessed we are, and we should do as much as possible to make someone else happy..It can take so little.
My family only gives to the children, but I can always find another child to try and make happy....Perhaps Jesus will be pleased, it's what he wants us to do...share!
I really enjoyed this poem, you did such a excellent job writing it, thanks for sharing, only you could do something like this poem...
Have a Wonderful Blessed Holiday!
Big Hugs, and a Smile,
Victoria
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Victoria, thank you so very much, my gracious and generous friend, and a very merry Christmas to you :-) Brooke
You're very welcome, it was indeed a pleasure!
Comment from Pili Pubul
This is such astounding poem to the rhytmn. of"'twas the night before Christmas" so well written just perfection. Great imagery , perfect rhyme and so real and moving. Merry Christmas...
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This is such astounding poem to the rhytmn. of"'twas the night before Christmas" so well written just perfection. Great imagery , perfect rhyme and so real and moving. Merry Christmas...
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Pili, thank you so very much. Merry Christmas! :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome. Smiles
Comment from Spitfire
It may be a parody, but it's a great lesson. At Christmas time it's out with the not-that-old but in with the more expensive or bigger size. Great details in this: My favorite:
The stuff we had tossed without one single thought
for those who had knitted or saved up and bought
That's why I stopped exchanging presents anymore! My daughter-in-law just places her gift list for the whole family on Amazon. com. Me? I don't need anything except a smaller waistline. Sigh...
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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It may be a parody, but it's a great lesson. At Christmas time it's out with the not-that-old but in with the more expensive or bigger size. Great details in this: My favorite:
The stuff we had tossed without one single thought
for those who had knitted or saved up and bought
That's why I stopped exchanging presents anymore! My daughter-in-law just places her gift list for the whole family on Amazon. com. Me? I don't need anything except a smaller waistline. Sigh...
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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My daughter and I were recently discussing those give-me lists - we have people in our family who are not hurting for money at all, and still they email family members lists of expensive stuff they can so easily afford themselves. Not sentimental desires, not requests for anything meaningful, but lists of STUFF that costs too much money. It leaves us cold, so I'm glad to hear you don't get it either. Thanks so much, my friend. Merry Christmas :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Brooke,:-)
I resonate to the flow and rhyme of the this poem. It has excellent rhyme and rhyme scheme. It has good rhythm. The topic is near to my heart and comes as close to exemplifying Christmas spirit as anything I know. Good luck in the contest.
Preston
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Hi, Brooke,:-)
I resonate to the flow and rhyme of the this poem. It has excellent rhyme and rhyme scheme. It has good rhythm. The topic is near to my heart and comes as close to exemplifying Christmas spirit as anything I know. Good luck in the contest.
Preston
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013
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Merry Christmas, Preston, and thank you for your generous review, my friend :-) Brooke
