All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "It Makes Me Happy!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Righteous Riter
The piece is filled with passion as the writer takes the reader where the reader needs to go. This piece flows well as the message is clear and to the point. My attention is captured from the beginning and held to the end. Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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The piece is filled with passion as the writer takes the reader where the reader needs to go. This piece flows well as the message is clear and to the point. My attention is captured from the beginning and held to the end. Good job.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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thx so much RR :)Sharyn
Comment from gypsycaravan
Your poem made me happy, too. You should do the things that do just that. I like the formatting of your poem. Nice job.
A computer glitch:
The word "skin" does not show up in your poem making it sound weird going from "against my"----to---"and glowing spotted cows"
When I highlighted the line to copy here to the review, the word "skin" showed up. I think it is not in the right shade font and that's why it doesn't show up.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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Your poem made me happy, too. You should do the things that do just that. I like the formatting of your poem. Nice job.
A computer glitch:
The word "skin" does not show up in your poem making it sound weird going from "against my"----to---"and glowing spotted cows"
When I highlighted the line to copy here to the review, the word "skin" showed up. I think it is not in the right shade font and that's why it doesn't show up.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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oh that's strange gypsy, because it shows up in mine ok - I'll exit and go back and take another peek! yikes! thx so muchfor the heads up! :))S
Comment from Indie Skreet
okay Sharyn, this has me laughing and not at your poem, but I am posting something tomorrow the exact opposite of this! This is such a lovely piece as usual and a romantic, happy look on marriage, so opposite to mine :D Anyway, I am delighted for you. Best as always, Indie
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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okay Sharyn, this has me laughing and not at your poem, but I am posting something tomorrow the exact opposite of this! This is such a lovely piece as usual and a romantic, happy look on marriage, so opposite to mine :D Anyway, I am delighted for you. Best as always, Indie
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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oh I've written those too, Indie, believe me! I'll look forward to your nasty one! :))
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did I say it was nasty my sweet? As if ... lol
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yeah right ... TSSSSSSSSSssssss!
Comment from paul O'Brien
Jump to Meaning of periwinkle?: The color periwinkle may represent serenity, calmness, winter and ice.
also Any of several small, often edible marine snails, especially of the genus Littorina, having thick, cone-shaped, whorled shells.:)
Did you leave the "I" out of periwinkle on purpose?
your getting good at this falling approach eg
rainbows descending
in prisms
fizzing
popping
falling
dropping
lot of creatveness in this --too much to comment on -all with matching blue and white in the presentation
How can one girl be so happy? Maui spring?
Paul
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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Jump to Meaning of periwinkle?: The color periwinkle may represent serenity, calmness, winter and ice.
also Any of several small, often edible marine snails, especially of the genus Littorina, having thick, cone-shaped, whorled shells.:)
Did you leave the "I" out of periwinkle on purpose?
your getting good at this falling approach eg
rainbows descending
in prisms
fizzing
popping
falling
dropping
lot of creatveness in this --too much to comment on -all with matching blue and white in the presentation
How can one girl be so happy? Maui spring?
Paul
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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no, periwinkle has been fixed, Paul - a typo - you must have been reviewing as I was going oops! happy to have NO damned rain after one month of solid grey skies dear! :)))
Comment from bhogg
I've read your posts before, and I like them. Structure is somewhat different. I suppose that what I like the most is that when I read them, at the end, I don't have to scratch my head and go, "hunh." I get them. Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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I've read your posts before, and I like them. Structure is somewhat different. I suppose that what I like the most is that when I read them, at the end, I don't have to scratch my head and go, "hunh." I get them. Regards, Bill
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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that's what I'm aiming for Bill - and congrats to YOU my dear on your short story win!
:)Sharyn
Comment from donaldww
I like the joyous ambiance left behind in this twister-like poem. Spring must be in the air!
Are you sure it's perwinkle, not periwinkle?
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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I like the joyous ambiance left behind in this twister-like poem. Spring must be in the air!
Are you sure it's perwinkle, not periwinkle?
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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ouch! thx for catching periwinkle DW!!! didn't see that! :))
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
I really enjoyed reading this beautiful free verse! It tumbles from the tongue pleasantly when read aloud... I like the juxtapositions scattered throughout this poem... Great job!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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I really enjoyed reading this beautiful free verse! It tumbles from the tongue pleasantly when read aloud... I like the juxtapositions scattered throughout this poem... Great job!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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thx so much GS! :))
Comment from words
I do agree:I want to sing
right now
this one second
of present joy
all creation's miracle
shared
shining
with every
living
thing
today
just
'cause
it makes me happy, ok?
This poem is just bursting with energy and joy.
It makes me happy.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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I do agree:I want to sing
right now
this one second
of present joy
all creation's miracle
shared
shining
with every
living
thing
today
just
'cause
it makes me happy, ok?
This poem is just bursting with energy and joy.
It makes me happy.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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bless you d - glad you enjoyed! :)S
Comment from Gungalo
Well girl, so many shades of blue are in every day for everyone and it just takes a little creativity to understand why you are so happy. If every one took notice what a happier world it would be.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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Well girl, so many shades of blue are in every day for everyone and it just takes a little creativity to understand why you are so happy. If every one took notice what a happier world it would be.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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thx so much gungalo - what's not to be happy about when surrounded by blue? :)))
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Nothing girl, nothing in the whole wide world.
Comment from Joannforsberg
So love your light, uplifting wording in poems. Truly you bring a lightness to fan story for everyone. Changing emotions in a few words chosen and placed together.
Blessings, JO
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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So love your light, uplifting wording in poems. Truly you bring a lightness to fan story for everyone. Changing emotions in a few words chosen and placed together.
Blessings, JO
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
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Bless you Jo - thank you so much! :)Sharyn