Zerubbabel Baxter
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5148 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Brooke,
Quite the story - and name, which there are quite a lot of unpronounceable ones in the bible.
I remember going to Vacation Bible School at an old country church. My brother and I really enjoyed it.
Nice story. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('-')
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Quite the story - and name, which there are quite a lot of unpronounceable ones in the bible.
I remember going to Vacation Bible School at an old country church. My brother and I really enjoyed it.
Nice story. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('-')
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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VBS only lasts five days each summer, but I just love doing it :-) Thanks so much, Jax :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
Unfortunately the conflict between a journey east as opposed to west was their undoing. Your message is strong because life is like that, we must always try to resolve conflicts whether internal or external and with God's help we can. Well done, Brooke.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Unfortunately the conflict between a journey east as opposed to west was their undoing. Your message is strong because life is like that, we must always try to resolve conflicts whether internal or external and with God's help we can. Well done, Brooke.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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rod, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
Zerubbabel and Tobias, two sea-faring mates headed for adventure and fun on the high seas. They set out to slay the starfish devouring beast.
However, Tobias didn't care as much for star fish as did Zee, so the ship languished anchored to its harbor, rotted and sank, simply because they could not reach a compromise.
Did I detect a slightly subliminal message here?
Well done, Brooke, and good luck to you in the contest. My entry will be out around Sunday, entitled, I, Man! Look for it on a FanStory shelf near you!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Zerubbabel and Tobias, two sea-faring mates headed for adventure and fun on the high seas. They set out to slay the starfish devouring beast.
However, Tobias didn't care as much for star fish as did Zee, so the ship languished anchored to its harbor, rotted and sank, simply because they could not reach a compromise.
Did I detect a slightly subliminal message here?
Well done, Brooke, and good luck to you in the contest. My entry will be out around Sunday, entitled, I, Man! Look for it on a FanStory shelf near you!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Dean, thank you so much :-) I look forward to your entry :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome, Brooke, and thank you as well. I still have a bit of tweaking to do on the meter. Go figure, right, LOL?
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LOL - Hey, this site is full of people who don't let a little off-kilter meter stop them from posting ;-)
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Ha ha, yeah, myself included, Brooke, LOL. I do try so very hard to shore it up as best I can, with my limited abilities...
Comment from LIJ Red
Vacation Bible School. I am not surprised. I'll wager you do a bang-up job. Again, I can't see any openings to attack your poem, so I'll just mutter off out of sight. Excellent.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Vacation Bible School. I am not surprised. I'll wager you do a bang-up job. Again, I can't see any openings to attack your poem, so I'll just mutter off out of sight. Excellent.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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LIJ, thank you so much :-) I just love the little ones at VBS :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
You've been reading your bible again Brooke! some really great names in the Old Testament, this is one of them, a very clever poem, beautifully rhymed in abcb, beautifully crafted, even metered work, and a great part of your collection of children's poems, what a wonderful place, to dwell in your imagination! Well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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You've been reading your bible again Brooke! some really great names in the Old Testament, this is one of them, a very clever poem, beautifully rhymed in abcb, beautifully crafted, even metered work, and a great part of your collection of children's poems, what a wonderful place, to dwell in your imagination! Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Working at Vacation Bible School is one of the highlights of my year :-) Brooke
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Mephibosheth is one of my favourites, named a dog after this one! Mepho was crippled, a survivor of Saul's house, sat at King David's table! Roy.
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I have to write that one down, a new name for me :-)
Comment from ArtGal
Brooke, what a great poem, and I sure don't remember this name, but wonder how many really would! Names that can't be pronounced properly, especially longer ones, I tend to forget. I enjoyed this very good story that you'll share in Bible School. What a great message about two who argued day and night, that they got nowhere and bye-bye ship, lol. This is a good lesson for them to hear about, and I really do see a win here, or I'd be surprised. Good luck friend. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Brooke, what a great poem, and I sure don't remember this name, but wonder how many really would! Names that can't be pronounced properly, especially longer ones, I tend to forget. I enjoyed this very good story that you'll share in Bible School. What a great message about two who argued day and night, that they got nowhere and bye-bye ship, lol. This is a good lesson for them to hear about, and I really do see a win here, or I'd be surprised. Good luck friend. . .Sharon
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Sharon, I swear I didn't know the name until I prepared for my VBS sessions yesterday afternoon :-) Thanks so very much :-) Brooke
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You're so very welcome, dear Brooke. And I do wish you lots of luck!
Comment from Kaila Mari
Poem type: Children's poetry in rhyming quatrains of 6/5/6/5
Does this poem flow: It flows like water
Do the lines seem forced: The lines are perfectly rhymed and metered
Did the structure make sense: a perfectly structured poem
Did it draw on my emotions: It really is a poem that lures the reader into the world of children
Did it present strong images: As a reader I was surrounded by the sea and its anchored ship waiting for two brave and equally tempered souls to make up their mind.
Suggestions for improvement: none whatsoever
Would I recommend this to someone else: You bet!!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Poem type: Children's poetry in rhyming quatrains of 6/5/6/5
Does this poem flow: It flows like water
Do the lines seem forced: The lines are perfectly rhymed and metered
Did the structure make sense: a perfectly structured poem
Did it draw on my emotions: It really is a poem that lures the reader into the world of children
Did it present strong images: As a reader I was surrounded by the sea and its anchored ship waiting for two brave and equally tempered souls to make up their mind.
Suggestions for improvement: none whatsoever
Would I recommend this to someone else: You bet!!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Kaila Mari, for your clear and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Loren (7)
Thanks for reminding me who Zerubbabbel is/was. Anyway, I have a feeling your VBS kids are having a treat with your story telling abilities. And, I even think more, you've inspired more than one to become or renew their faith in Jesus. I think that's how it came about for me when I was in first grade...hearing the stories of the Bible in Sunday School. Teachers have such a grand influence on their students!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thanks for reminding me who Zerubbabbel is/was. Anyway, I have a feeling your VBS kids are having a treat with your story telling abilities. And, I even think more, you've inspired more than one to become or renew their faith in Jesus. I think that's how it came about for me when I was in first grade...hearing the stories of the Bible in Sunday School. Teachers have such a grand influence on their students!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Loren, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from MisinformedPoet
A lovely fun adventure with two fabulously named characters.
As always, your poems flow and the rhymes are perfectly matched.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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A lovely fun adventure with two fabulously named characters.
As always, your poems flow and the rhymes are perfectly matched.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Misinformed Poet, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
Well, a six star review
especially for you
For a story well told
Remains hot - never cold
Great story in a poem. Hope it does well in the contest, Buck
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Well, a six star review
especially for you
For a story well told
Remains hot - never cold
Great story in a poem. Hope it does well in the contest, Buck
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Buck, thank you so much for your generous review in poetic form, my friend :-) Brooke