Fire Inside
A short poem162 total reviews
Comment from tinams
This is a very sensual simmering 5-7-5 poem and I love it. A very worthy entry to the 5-7-5 Poetry Competition and I wish you luck :) Tina
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This is a very sensual simmering 5-7-5 poem and I love it. A very worthy entry to the 5-7-5 Poetry Competition and I wish you luck :) Tina
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from Rosebramble
I like the expression of your emotions in minimal words.
A brilliant haiku....Simple words with good imagery...
good job!wish you all the very best for the contest!
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I like the expression of your emotions in minimal words.
A brilliant haiku....Simple words with good imagery...
good job!wish you all the very best for the contest!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from Chris Tee
This 5-7-5 poem titled "Fire Inside" has a perfect syllable count and the massage is appealing. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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This 5-7-5 poem titled "Fire Inside" has a perfect syllable count and the massage is appealing. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from ameen786
If the first one is a masterpiece, I wonder what follows; hello friend, brilliant reflections with superb word choice and eloquent phrasings; the picture adds to the theme, good luck.
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If the first one is a masterpiece, I wonder what follows; hello friend, brilliant reflections with superb word choice and eloquent phrasings; the picture adds to the theme, good luck.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, vincent, you did a great job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the spark that keeps you warm at nigth. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
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this is very well written, vincent, you did a great job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the spark that keeps you warm at nigth. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from playinaround
love this poem! the entire presentation. the picture chosen the color black and of course, best of all the words. very nicely done! Good luck in the contest!!
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love this poem! the entire presentation. the picture chosen the color black and of course, best of all the words. very nicely done! Good luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from S.Yocom
You're right that 5/7/5 poems are often harder to write than are longer poems. But you did a fine job with this one. I enjoyed it.
Sally
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You're right that 5/7/5 poems are often harder to write than are longer poems. But you did a fine job with this one. I enjoyed it.
Sally
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from Essence16
I think this was a very creative and interesting poem. I liked the idea and I think the numerous details you used were very helpful. Great job on this!
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I think this was a very creative and interesting poem. I liked the idea and I think the numerous details you used were very helpful. Great job on this!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from yonashalom
This is awesome. I love the coloring and flames. I see this as a tribute to a friend or love or both that has reached out to light up a dark place in someone's life. What a good choice of words too. Embers sound so gentle. I like that. Very nice. Thanks for sharing. Good luck. ~Yona
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This is awesome. I love the coloring and flames. I see this as a tribute to a friend or love or both that has reached out to light up a dark place in someone's life. What a good choice of words too. Embers sound so gentle. I like that. Very nice. Thanks for sharing. Good luck. ~Yona
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from Gloria ....
Very nice Vincent. I got a chuckle from your author notes that it didn't come as easily as you thought. These 5/7/5's can be very tricky but still a fair bit easier than haiku. I love the line you pour embers from your heart. There are few different interpretations to your poem so to me that is good poetry. Your use of literary devices is sound and not easy to accomplish in so few words.
Nice job!
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Very nice Vincent. I got a chuckle from your author notes that it didn't come as easily as you thought. These 5/7/5's can be very tricky but still a fair bit easier than haiku. I love the line you pour embers from your heart. There are few different interpretations to your poem so to me that is good poetry. Your use of literary devices is sound and not easy to accomplish in so few words.
Nice job!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
