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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Revival of the Red"5/7/5 poems
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Comment from Adi
I loved your poem very very much. The picture of the poem and the picture tell a story. Good luck on your poem and are you born in india because your name sounds like a Indian's name. Any way I am Indian.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
I loved your poem very very much. The picture of the poem and the picture tell a story. Good luck on your poem and are you born in india because your name sounds like a Indian's name. Any way I am Indian.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Yes,i am an indian.is your name Aditya?people generally shorten it to Adi.nice to meet you.and thanks for the excellent review:-)
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No it's Vaibhav Mishra but people called me adu and when I came to America it changed to Adi .
Comment from linsbm
An excellently written 5-7-5 poem. Good application of alliteration in 'L':
"Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor"
A poem that makes one ponder. Good retribution of Red, blood to Vampires. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
An excellently written 5-7-5 poem. Good application of alliteration in 'L':
"Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor"
A poem that makes one ponder. Good retribution of Red, blood to Vampires. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from simonbagh
This is a very thought provoking piece. That makes one more ponder about the being and fate. A very good work, that is written nicely, well done
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
This is a very thought provoking piece. That makes one more ponder about the being and fate. A very good work, that is written nicely, well done
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from 4tun81
Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor
rave resurrection
This is a very imaginative 5-7-5 formatted poem. It is not often you see horror in haiku style. Great job! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor
rave resurrection
This is a very imaginative 5-7-5 formatted poem. It is not often you see horror in haiku style. Great job! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from humpwhistle
Vampires are fascinating fictional characters,
I believe. Luminal is a new for me. Does blood
glow?
I like the last line, which seems to make fun
of the whole vampire fad.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
Vampires are fascinating fictional characters,
I believe. Luminal is a new for me. Does blood
glow?
I like the last line, which seems to make fun
of the whole vampire fad.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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'Luminal' doesn't mean glowing here.
It is a medical term,in general referred to as sedatives.
Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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I'm sorry I didn't catch that. All my dictionary references revolved around 'luminosity'. L
Comment from Earth Serpent
If I knew how to give you 6 stars I would, great job man, I wish I would have added a picture to mine. your veiws on vampires is very intriguing and i very much enjoyed your use of words.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
If I knew how to give you 6 stars I would, great job man, I wish I would have added a picture to mine. your veiws on vampires is very intriguing and i very much enjoyed your use of words.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Matthew M.
I like the alliteration of this poem and the way the colors of the words blend into the picture so well. Those vampires really are leeches sucking the blood out of people.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
I like the alliteration of this poem and the way the colors of the words blend into the picture so well. Those vampires really are leeches sucking the blood out of people.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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thanks for your words and excellent review:)
Comment from SoldierPoet
Very nice descriptive tribute to the creatures of the night. The words you used really painted a picture of these fascinating people. I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
Very nice descriptive tribute to the creatures of the night. The words you used really painted a picture of these fascinating people. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Crystal Carey
Hi Anup, this is a very thought provoking peace. It kind of makes me vision demons from the deep. Red happens to be my favorite color. Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
Hi Anup, this is a very thought provoking peace. It kind of makes me vision demons from the deep. Red happens to be my favorite color. Good job.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Well done 5-7-5. Love the alliteration in this. Wonderfully presented, too. Correct syllable count. Good luck in the contest~Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
Well done 5-7-5. Love the alliteration in this. Wonderfully presented, too. Correct syllable count. Good luck in the contest~Debbie
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)