CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 148 "Solace"A collection of poetry
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Comment from rizaroza
Wonderful poem. It really expresses love and lost and I connected with it emotionally. My favorite is the first few lines, which set the tone of the poem and takes us to a vulnerable place. Thanks for posting this!
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Wonderful poem. It really expresses love and lost and I connected with it emotionally. My favorite is the first few lines, which set the tone of the poem and takes us to a vulnerable place. Thanks for posting this!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from lennis
This is so sweet! What a wonderful way to treasure the power of human touch. I love the reference to the embrace as a 'calm space'...it is so true. The poem is well crafted and flows nicely. Good work.
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This is so sweet! What a wonderful way to treasure the power of human touch. I love the reference to the embrace as a 'calm space'...it is so true. The poem is well crafted and flows nicely. Good work.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
This poem is one that is inviting. One that asks, will you join me in my time woe, and just let your presence be the balm. I found no errors in your writing. Good job.
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This poem is one that is inviting. One that asks, will you join me in my time woe, and just let your presence be the balm. I found no errors in your writing. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from smokyeye
This is simple and yet it says much. It is so true how a hug can take you away from any pain and hurt in ytour life and you don't know exactly why it works but it does
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This is simple and yet it says much. It is so true how a hug can take you away from any pain and hurt in ytour life and you don't know exactly why it works but it does
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from P1
lovely poem, lovely writing
great emotion and sentiment
within your words. a nice feleling
of somebody being there for you
at the end of a long day. hugs lynda.
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lovely poem, lovely writing
great emotion and sentiment
within your words. a nice feleling
of somebody being there for you
at the end of a long day. hugs lynda.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from phild
This is a very well done poem. It is amazing what a hug can do for a person, even if it's from a stranger. I think you've captured that feeling with your words.
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This is a very well done poem. It is amazing what a hug can do for a person, even if it's from a stranger. I think you've captured that feeling with your words.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from MumEsGirl
Lovely little poem about the joy of being embraced.
Nice descriptive passage, not asking for anything just to feel safe for a while.
Nice to see that it can be returned too
kate
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Lovely little poem about the joy of being embraced.
Nice descriptive passage, not asking for anything just to feel safe for a while.
Nice to see that it can be returned too
kate
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from Domino
I'd suggest clickin on 'edit' You'r then given the opportunity to click on back and foreground colour which will aid presentation and also 'hold' your stanzas together as the first seems to have become detached.
You've repeated 'embrace' which IMHO doesn't add to the poem. This could be either read as spiritually speaking to a @god' or a need for human romance. Nice writing. Ray xx
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I'd suggest clickin on 'edit' You'r then given the opportunity to click on back and foreground colour which will aid presentation and also 'hold' your stanzas together as the first seems to have become detached.
You've repeated 'embrace' which IMHO doesn't add to the poem. This could be either read as spiritually speaking to a @god' or a need for human romance. Nice writing. Ray xx
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from Judian James
Welcome to FanStory. This is quite lovely and completely giving. Keeping ones burdens to themselves in order to be there for and in the embrace of someone they need and care about. excellent.
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Welcome to FanStory. This is quite lovely and completely giving. Keeping ones burdens to themselves in order to be there for and in the embrace of someone they need and care about. excellent.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
Comment from sofish
I didnt really understand the gap between these two lines.
"With strong arms and deep heart
You take me from that place"
Also you can consider taking the (A) out of this line in order to allow for a better flow?
"In spirit, not a word "
Just something to consider. Other than that a beautiful piece of work, well written and great use of language.
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I didnt really understand the gap between these two lines.
"With strong arms and deep heart
You take me from that place"
Also you can consider taking the (A) out of this line in order to allow for a better flow?
"In spirit, not a word "
Just something to consider. Other than that a beautiful piece of work, well written and great use of language.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008