Chip's Poetry
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Comment from 24chas
This was a good piece, Chip. I love the message of it and the last line was really inspiring for those who may still be holding back from pursuing something out of their comfort zone. Well done.
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This was a good piece, Chip. I love the message of it and the last line was really inspiring for those who may still be holding back from pursuing something out of their comfort zone. Well done.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Chas, always appreciate your feedback!
Comment from Bill Schott
This four-line poem, Discomfort Zone, has the right 1-5-5-9 set up and offers a little verse to remember to take some chances. No balls, no blue chips.
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This four-line poem, Discomfort Zone, has the right 1-5-5-9 set up and offers a little verse to remember to take some chances. No balls, no blue chips.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Bill. You may just want to begin or end your own 5-7-5 with your last comment1
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm not sure I would have no fear standing on that spot! But I understand your wise words here Chip, some adventures end tragically though, love Dolly x
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I'm not sure I would have no fear standing on that spot! But I understand your wise words here Chip, some adventures end tragically though, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Dolly. Just a metaphor here, but overcoming fear does take some literally to the edge.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, another stunning write by this talented and prolific poet - the verse is smoothly rendered and the image a perfect complement to the write - in perfect compliance with the prompt. I recommend one change, with your permission:
Instead of the word, "when" in the concluding line, I suggest the word "until" - my best wishes in the contest...
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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In my opinion, another stunning write by this talented and prolific poet - the verse is smoothly rendered and the image a perfect complement to the write - in perfect compliance with the prompt. I recommend one change, with your permission:
Instead of the word, "when" in the concluding line, I suggest the word "until" - my best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Eve. I'm afraid changing the word would render me non- compliant, but otherwise it would work!
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Oh, so sorry, I didn't think of that - I didn't realize syllable count was important in this prompt. How about "till" - it has the same syllable count as "when" - but it is your poem and your intent. Please don't be offended - I only offer suggestions when I like the work...Eve
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None taken, Eve. I "oft" take recommendations to heart and employ them!!
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Thank you, Chip - you are a gifted writer, and I would hate to offend you in any way...Eve
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I'm humbled, Eve.
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Thank you for your gracious words, Chip - I am honored. Have a happy and safe weekend...Eve
Comment from Patty Palmer
Looking at something you really want to do but just not quite sure if you should or not and then finding the courage to actually talk yourself into it. Standing on the edge of fear. Finally standing on the ledge of t facing that fear! Yes!! You went past the fear and you own it now!
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Looking at something you really want to do but just not quite sure if you should or not and then finding the courage to actually talk yourself into it. Standing on the edge of fear. Finally standing on the ledge of t facing that fear! Yes!! You went past the fear and you own it now!
Comment Written 30-May-2019
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Thank you!
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You're welcome!
Comment from Earl Corp
I know this is your poem and you can do whatever you want with it. That being said, if it was mine I'd switch the word FACE for SHATTER. Otherwise it looks as good as any inspirational mantra hanging in the office.
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I know this is your poem and you can do whatever you want with it. That being said, if it was mine I'd switch the word FACE for SHATTER. Otherwise it looks as good as any inspirational mantra hanging in the office.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Earl! If not for the 1-5-5-9 requirement, that would certainly work!
Comment from Gail Denham
Compelling challenge. To keep on, even when the going is tough - or the way seems so hard. As we grow older, the challenges beat at us with pain - yet we must keep moving.
Excellent challeng e- good poem
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Compelling challenge. To keep on, even when the going is tough - or the way seems so hard. As we grow older, the challenges beat at us with pain - yet we must keep moving.
Excellent challeng e- good poem
Comment Written 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Gail.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is an excellent, uplifting piece. Its advice would extend to all people, all areas. Our preacher and past preachers have told us we will never reach people if we refuse to leave our comfort zone.
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This is an excellent, uplifting piece. Its advice would extend to all people, all areas. Our preacher and past preachers have told us we will never reach people if we refuse to leave our comfort zone.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Janice.
Comment from fm wright
A wonderful four line poem! You have managed not only to complete a thought, but have done so in rhyme. It flows beautifully and the picture truly emphasizes your message. Best of wishes with this contest entry!
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A wonderful four line poem! You have managed not only to complete a thought, but have done so in rhyme. It flows beautifully and the picture truly emphasizes your message. Best of wishes with this contest entry!
Comment Written 30-May-2019
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Thanks, fm!
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You are so ever welcome!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written four line poem you have penned for the contests about not letting fear paralyze us. You used great words and very nice imagery from the art work you choses. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
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This is a very interesting and well written four line poem you have penned for the contests about not letting fear paralyze us. You used great words and very nice imagery from the art work you choses. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thank you, Teri.
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you are so welcome!
