Truly Baffling
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Comment from MissMerri
A powerful image here in these few lines, that sets the mind to whirling with questions. I love poetry that makes me think. This does it so well. It almost sounds like the opening lines of a novel. Perhaps it could be? Very well done.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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A powerful image here in these few lines, that sets the mind to whirling with questions. I love poetry that makes me think. This does it so well. It almost sounds like the opening lines of a novel. Perhaps it could be? Very well done.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from granny goes viral
Ouch. That hurt. I wonder what happened. She looks like
she wonders what happened too. Do you know what happened
You wrote it. Did he at least pay for her wine?
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Ouch. That hurt. I wonder what happened. She looks like
she wonders what happened too. Do you know what happened
You wrote it. Did he at least pay for her wine?
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from jmdg1954
"But he left so abruptly"... did he remember he had a beautiful wife waiting for him at home therefore leaving her behind?
Nicely done. Unlike other reviews, I feel the poetry can stand alone without the picture and tell the story.
John
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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"But he left so abruptly"... did he remember he had a beautiful wife waiting for him at home therefore leaving her behind?
Nicely done. Unlike other reviews, I feel the poetry can stand alone without the picture and tell the story.
John
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review and encouragement.
Comment from yarnteller
Excellent poem of a women scorned, intelligent, beautiful and so self assured of her attractiveness that she plays it off with dignity. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Excellent poem of a women scorned, intelligent, beautiful and so self assured of her attractiveness that she plays it off with dignity. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from emjaihammond
This one makes me stop and think. I wondered which came first, the poem or the picture. Either way, you've done a good job of spinning a tale with very few words. A complete story forms in the mind of the reader and then another and another, as imagination takes over where the poem leaves off. I think its a very successful write.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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This one makes me stop and think. I wondered which came first, the poem or the picture. Either way, you've done a good job of spinning a tale with very few words. A complete story forms in the mind of the reader and then another and another, as imagination takes over where the poem leaves off. I think its a very successful write.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I realize I should be the last one to criticize poetry because of a picture, Mark. But this brief verse seems to rely completely on the pic, as if the poem were written around the picture instead of as an afterthought. I understand the premise -- an attractive young lady left all alone by (I assume) her supposed date for the evening, for whatever reasons.
A catchy satori or closing would help tremendously.
Still, it's a very good effort at pointing the finger at arrogance and vanity.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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I realize I should be the last one to criticize poetry because of a picture, Mark. But this brief verse seems to rely completely on the pic, as if the poem were written around the picture instead of as an afterthought. I understand the premise -- an attractive young lady left all alone by (I assume) her supposed date for the evening, for whatever reasons.
A catchy satori or closing would help tremendously.
Still, it's a very good effort at pointing the finger at arrogance and vanity.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review and suggestions.
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You're very welcome, Mark. It has great potential and a little bit of tweaking to allow it to stand on its own merit would do wonders for your ratings, I think.
Good luck to you.
Comment from scd41
Your poem echoes a question which baffles mind sometimes. Why should a lover leave abruptly someone attractive without any rhyme or reason is the question that begs answer. In many instances, such apparent arbitrary behaviour causes devastation. If the beloved is confident and relaxed, there is no aftershock. The poem adds a bit of optimism to such situations.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Your poem echoes a question which baffles mind sometimes. Why should a lover leave abruptly someone attractive without any rhyme or reason is the question that begs answer. In many instances, such apparent arbitrary behaviour causes devastation. If the beloved is confident and relaxed, there is no aftershock. The poem adds a bit of optimism to such situations.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Nice picture to go with your short poem. Maybe, he remembered his wife. Just a thought.
Definitely, this is thought provoking. Why?
In such few words, you have written a short story with the ending with a question. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Nice picture to go with your short poem. Maybe, he remembered his wife. Just a thought.
Definitely, this is thought provoking. Why?
In such few words, you have written a short story with the ending with a question. Well done!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review. You may be right, maybe he remembered his wife.
Comment from GWinterwin
What a beautiful lady, she looks sad. Even the beauty of a woman does not mean she will always be happy or confident. Your words make one stop and think of how she must feel.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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What a beautiful lady, she looks sad. Even the beauty of a woman does not mean she will always be happy or confident. Your words make one stop and think of how she must feel.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from ravenblack
To be honest, this poem is one that is completely reliant on the picture. I get it- a beautiful woman not understanding why she is alone, just feel that this is more of a brief prose sketch w/out a deeper insight/sartori.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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To be honest, this poem is one that is completely reliant on the picture. I get it- a beautiful woman not understanding why she is alone, just feel that this is more of a brief prose sketch w/out a deeper insight/sartori.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review and suggestions.