The Night
This poem describes the mysterious beauty and magical music of the night.139 total reviews
Comment from ILovePoetry!
I'm not quite sure why the term "senile" is used for the moon, but I really like the phrase "Night sings lullaby". It is so peaceful, sweet, and gentle. A+ for the phrase!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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I'm not quite sure why the term "senile" is used for the moon, but I really like the phrase "Night sings lullaby". It is so peaceful, sweet, and gentle. A+ for the phrase!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Sorry you did'nt like the poem but thanks for your review.
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Oh, don't get me wrong! I do like the poem I'm just not so sure about that one word and its usage within this particular poem. Perhaps you can just explain it to me? I would really like to understand it!
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Thank you so much for not jumping on me for giving you a low rating - I am actually going to re-rate your poem since I do think I gave it too low of a rating. Keep up the good work!
Comment from tedanytime
Nice 5-7-5 that describes the night sky.
At times the half moon rides slowly through the night sky, perhaps forgetting it was once full and bright. Upside down, pouring out it thoughts, not remembering lovers pledge, hovering half-spent in star-dimmed sky.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Nice 5-7-5 that describes the night sky.
At times the half moon rides slowly through the night sky, perhaps forgetting it was once full and bright. Upside down, pouring out it thoughts, not remembering lovers pledge, hovering half-spent in star-dimmed sky.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your beautiful description and for your review.I am glad that you care to read it.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The mystical beauty and magical impact and influence of the moon mostly at some night would be enjoyable as featured well here. 16/717
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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The mystical beauty and magical impact and influence of the moon mostly at some night would be enjoyable as featured well here. 16/717
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Martin Chan
A good 5-7-5 poetry contest poem " The Night" is written so simple and to the point that intended meaning could be felt while reading the poem. The picture matches the poem. Wish best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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A good 5-7-5 poetry contest poem " The Night" is written so simple and to the point that intended meaning could be felt while reading the poem. The picture matches the poem. Wish best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review.Glad that you like it.
Comment from joeakeefe
I have tried to understand your use of the word "senile" in this piece. The attributes associated with the term are "of quality," "of intelligence," and of "mentality." Its "lifecycle" if you will is one of moving from waxing to waning. Given the last line of the piece, would your use of the word "drowsy." have been more appropriate? I would be interested in how you see the use of the word.
Thank you for the opportunity to spend some time with your work in this instance.
joeakeefe
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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I have tried to understand your use of the word "senile" in this piece. The attributes associated with the term are "of quality," "of intelligence," and of "mentality." Its "lifecycle" if you will is one of moving from waxing to waning. Given the last line of the piece, would your use of the word "drowsy." have been more appropriate? I would be interested in how you see the use of the word.
Thank you for the opportunity to spend some time with your work in this instance.
joeakeefe
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Sorry that you did not like my poem but thanks to you that you care to review.
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Please, I did not say I did not like it. My questiion had to do with the effectiveness of your use of the word "sterile" partiularly as it related to what I believe your message is.
It is simply constructive criticism, firdousy.
joeakeefe
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Ah!Ofcourese Sir I do understand.I am very glad that you care to read my poem and you gave your time to review it..take care.
Comment from ManekiNeko62
Lovely haiku about night. It always amazes me how much you can say in 17 syllables; this was no exception. The art choice is wonderful as well. Night time is my favorite time, and I've always felt a strange fascination with the moon. I like that you've chosen to make the moon "senile," like an endearing grandparent. The imagery is lovely. Really well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Lovely haiku about night. It always amazes me how much you can say in 17 syllables; this was no exception. The art choice is wonderful as well. Night time is my favorite time, and I've always felt a strange fascination with the moon. I like that you've chosen to make the moon "senile," like an endearing grandparent. The imagery is lovely. Really well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your excellent review.very glad that you like it..take care.
Comment from BunnyS
This is so pretty... The whole package is almost mesmerizing. I love the beautiful sentiment and the picture of the moon. The poem is very nicely written and I enjoyed it very much. Good job!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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This is so pretty... The whole package is almost mesmerizing. I love the beautiful sentiment and the picture of the moon. The poem is very nicely written and I enjoyed it very much. Good job!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much that you like my poem and thanks for review.I appreciate it.
Comment from Kingsrookviii
I love this. The idea of the moon "melting" is brilliant. Great use of adjectives. I saw a mid morning daytime moon the other day and intended to use it in a poem.
This was fun to read and contemplate. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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I love this. The idea of the moon "melting" is brilliant. Great use of adjectives. I saw a mid morning daytime moon the other day and intended to use it in a poem.
This was fun to read and contemplate. Great job.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind review.I appreciate it.
Comment from /*Twinkle
I don't know I didn't like the reference to the moon as senile. From my understanding senile means: decline or deterioration of physical strength or mental functioning, especially short-term memory and alertness, as a result of old age or disease. I guess in some cases the full moon could be considered senile.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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I don't know I didn't like the reference to the moon as senile. From my understanding senile means: decline or deterioration of physical strength or mental functioning, especially short-term memory and alertness, as a result of old age or disease. I guess in some cases the full moon could be considered senile.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Sorry,you did not like my poem but thanks for the review.
Comment from Glasstruth
Interesting way of seeing the moon, as in melting in the sky. Like the black background with the whiye font. The whole presentation is just superb. Les
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Interesting way of seeing the moon, as in melting in the sky. Like the black background with the whiye font. The whole presentation is just superb. Les
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the generous review.I appreciate it.
