All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Sticky-notes"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from amahra
First I like the art work you've chosen for your writing. I thought the poem was very engaging and realistic in terms of the way the world of romance should be. Not the TV stuff.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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First I like the art work you've chosen for your writing. I thought the poem was very engaging and realistic in terms of the way the world of romance should be. Not the TV stuff.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Heaven help us amahra, TV stuff can be pretty awful, can't it! ??
:) Sharyn
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
It seems as if you might be suffering from the empty nest syndrome or the loss of someone. I'm not a poet so I'm just guessing. Good poem. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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It seems as if you might be suffering from the empty nest syndrome or the loss of someone. I'm not a poet so I'm just guessing. Good poem. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you Evelyn !:) Sharyn
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sharyn,
I love this poem and enjoyed reading every word. You have used poetic devices like enjambments, alliteration and metaphor and each line is well composed. It's hard to be in love but alone. That happened to me when my husband traveled so much on his job. The use of sticky notes is brilliant. Well done and good luck in the contest.....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
I love this poem and enjoyed reading every word. You have used poetic devices like enjambments, alliteration and metaphor and each line is well composed. It's hard to be in love but alone. That happened to me when my husband traveled so much on his job. The use of sticky notes is brilliant. Well done and good luck in the contest.....blessings, chey
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thx so much Chey! :)Sharyn
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of delivering the message to the reader. Although this piece has no rhyming, it flows well and it's to the point. The writer does a good of grabbing the readers attention and holding it as the writer makes the reader laugh a little. Goo job.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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The writer does a good job of delivering the message to the reader. Although this piece has no rhyming, it flows well and it's to the point. The writer does a good of grabbing the readers attention and holding it as the writer makes the reader laugh a little. Goo job.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thx RR - it's free verse actually, with three different kinds of rhyming if you look very closely. :)Sharyn
Comment from 9999pool
Yes, who wants to be in love with confetti sticky notes on the floor.
But as with the ups of live comes the down. Everyone wants to lay lazily on the beach - even if just to watch the love birds go by, hugging and kicking the sandy beach.
A passionate write about love but in spite of the time together or no time together if love still persist, our hearts must wait and find time to be together.
Good write and I can feel the message in this story. Be in love but not fiercely.
Be in tune with life's demands to work for a living.
Phew, quite a mouthful but nonetheless, good advice about love and go with the flow.
Make less demands and get by with what little there is. It is not the end of the world - so to speak, even if love went missing on a holiday, LOL.
Great write and quite a piece. Hope the dishes are all washed now and the beds made nicely. The missing love bird might just pop in for a cuppa!
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Yes, who wants to be in love with confetti sticky notes on the floor.
But as with the ups of live comes the down. Everyone wants to lay lazily on the beach - even if just to watch the love birds go by, hugging and kicking the sandy beach.
A passionate write about love but in spite of the time together or no time together if love still persist, our hearts must wait and find time to be together.
Good write and I can feel the message in this story. Be in love but not fiercely.
Be in tune with life's demands to work for a living.
Phew, quite a mouthful but nonetheless, good advice about love and go with the flow.
Make less demands and get by with what little there is. It is not the end of the world - so to speak, even if love went missing on a holiday, LOL.
Great write and quite a piece. Hope the dishes are all washed now and the beds made nicely. The missing love bird might just pop in for a cuppa!
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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I just talked to my MIA lovebird this morning Ritchie - he's alive & well, no worries dear. I just didn't want to do another 'mushy' love poem :)SSS
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Hi dear,
Having known you for so long, I do know how you loved your man and your boy who was bullied by that darn teacher. Come to think of it, not sure if you have more kids than one.
You were brilliantly featured as a villain in our "Who are they? - Part 2" Honor Roll. And now everyone is blaming you, LOL. It did describe your 'out of harmony' moments very well dear, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs and love, Ritchie.
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What'as "Who are they, Part 2" Ritchie???
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oooh ok - just went in and took a peek - I must have missed that one!!! da dum??? moi??? I write fare more free verse than da dum stuff dear! :)))))
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Just to let you in on a secret - spitfire loved those lines. You are the star here and so you get all the credit.
In order not to be outdone, you are welcome to write a 'Rhyming quatrain" for the FINALE - "the curtain falls down!".
Spitfire had send in hers to serenade 'Tonulak'. Now, what will Sharyn write? Definitely not about love as is she all out of love without Air Supply! ROTFL, gotcha!
Ha ha ha, cheerio, Ritchie. Don't try to find me. I am now writing from James Bond island dear! Whoo-ee!!
Btw Maureen had send it hers so competition is rife or is it a strife for fame?
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oh my goodness! I'll have to have a look!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Men are messy. (Not all men) I'm sure there are exceptions. I did like having a man who came home to me. How do you weigh an inconvenience against love? I miss him, gone forever and I want none to take his place. LOL Love hurts! Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Men are messy. (Not all men) I'm sure there are exceptions. I did like having a man who came home to me. How do you weigh an inconvenience against love? I miss him, gone forever and I want none to take his place. LOL Love hurts! Nancy
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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I know how you feel Nancy - it is such a mix, isn't it? All those romantic movies, meanwhile, tell us lots of appealing lies, hmm?
:)S
Comment from J. Dark
The thirty day rule won't let me six you, which is just a crime, because this is a poetic work of art. It reads like a breeze with an interesting and clever formatting with some snappy internal rhyme. The concept is so breathtakingly honest and heartfelt that I was there for a moment. This is a very memorable work, Sharyn.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :0)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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The thirty day rule won't let me six you, which is just a crime, because this is a poetic work of art. It reads like a breeze with an interesting and clever formatting with some snappy internal rhyme. The concept is so breathtakingly honest and heartfelt that I was there for a moment. This is a very memorable work, Sharyn.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :0)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Bless you Julie - I'm so glad you responded to this one - I didn't want to do a 'sappy' piece for this contest (mind you, a sappy piece will probably win, but what the hell?)
:)))S
Comment from N.K. Wagner
An excellent variation on the prompt, Sharyn. I like the sticky-note confetti, although I see falling leaves. Maybe and idea left over from the Norfolk pines earlier on - and your picture. Well done. :) nancy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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An excellent variation on the prompt, Sharyn. I like the sticky-note confetti, although I see falling leaves. Maybe and idea left over from the Norfolk pines earlier on - and your picture. Well done. :) nancy
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much Nancy! (though Norfolk pines are evergreens and if one of those cones bops you on the head you really know about it! :))
:)Sharyn
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Ouch! It's a real leap to falling leaves. Can't imagine where the image came from. :) Nancy
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Sharyn,
I thought this was really creatively done from beginning to end. As I read this I found parts of me in your lines, a sense of knowing and expressing love in its many facets.
I pondered deeply the denial weaving through the message in this one. How taxing on the spirit itself when denial filters through us either for protection or surrender - and living with "what is."
Great job on this one and thought provoking read.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
I thought this was really creatively done from beginning to end. As I read this I found parts of me in your lines, a sense of knowing and expressing love in its many facets.
I pondered deeply the denial weaving through the message in this one. How taxing on the spirit itself when denial filters through us either for protection or surrender - and living with "what is."
Great job on this one and thought provoking read.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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What a wonderful review Maureen - and a total honor to be the recipient of a special six from you, as I really respect your poetic voice. I didn't want to do a mushy love poem - there are more than enough of those around, hmm? Thx also for catching all the different 'layers' of meaning and emotion here.
Blessings,
Sharyn
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Lots of luck in this contest my friend:)
Big Hugs
Maureen
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the beauty in the picture so much love the shining light of the beauty wrapped up in this a beautiful piece of writting
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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from the beauty in the picture so much love the shining light of the beauty wrapped up in this a beautiful piece of writting
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much my dear! :)Sharyn