Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "Feline Dreams"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
9 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Can't wait to get back into the swing and join in again! :) Love this addition, June, as your choice of the white tiger mixed with your words is just a beautifully, dreamy presentation!! Thanx for the boost for the imagination, my lady!! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Can't wait to get back into the swing and join in again! :) Love this addition, June, as your choice of the white tiger mixed with your words is just a beautifully, dreamy presentation!! Thanx for the boost for the imagination, my lady!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thank you! Looking forward to your contribution to the book of Renga.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 in addition to the multi-author Renga book. The photo choice is superb the white tiger is definitely bone of the most beautiful wild cats ever seen.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 in addition to the multi-author Renga book. The photo choice is superb the white tiger is definitely bone of the most beautiful wild cats ever seen.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this short piece.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, June,
Great job with your renga 5/7/5 ... Great follow up. I love the picture too. Good syllable count and connection between lines. I just have one suggestion, don't break up the second line by using your kireji before a word. Kireji is a point of pause...a break so it's akward to have 'the' hanging at the end. For example...
in the world of dreams
and great imagination -
they walk on wild side
Just an example
Well done, my friend, thank you :)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Hello, June,
Great job with your renga 5/7/5 ... Great follow up. I love the picture too. Good syllable count and connection between lines. I just have one suggestion, don't break up the second line by using your kireji before a word. Kireji is a point of pause...a break so it's akward to have 'the' hanging at the end. For example...
in the world of dreams
and great imagination -
they walk on wild side
Just an example
Well done, my friend, thank you :)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thanks for sharing your suggestions. I?ve revised it and it does flow better. Glad you liked this addition.
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I checked...looks great!
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
Another good chapter to this collaborative effort. Methinks your photograph is the liger. Your imagination in composing your verse Is an inventive way to describe our world of natural possibilities.
Mark
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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June,
Another good chapter to this collaborative effort. Methinks your photograph is the liger. Your imagination in composing your verse Is an inventive way to describe our world of natural possibilities.
Mark
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Thank you for sharing your insightful comments!
Comment from royowen
Your poetry is always worth a look dear June, you're a good writer, and whatever you do is always good, and this is no exception. Well done, you've contributed quite a lot to these marvellous renga writings, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Your poetry is always worth a look dear June, you're a good writer, and whatever you do is always good, and this is no exception. Well done, you've contributed quite a lot to these marvellous renga writings, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Always look forward to your insightfull feedback!
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Thank you
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, June, all kitties dream of being king of the jungle. After all their ancestors were wild--it is in their blood. I like your image and the way you expressed your thoughts/feelings through the eyes of the white tiger.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Yes, June, all kitties dream of being king of the jungle. After all their ancestors were wild--it is in their blood. I like your image and the way you expressed your thoughts/feelings through the eyes of the white tiger.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for dropping by to share your insightful comments on kitties!
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for adding your 5-7-5 to the Renga along with the stunning artwork. I enjoyed being transported by the albino tiger's dreams. Big cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you for adding your 5-7-5 to the Renga along with the stunning artwork. I enjoyed being transported by the albino tiger's dreams. Big cheers- Joan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you! Always nice to hear from you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These kittens are indeed wild, but also magnificent June and you paid tribute to these cats here, much enjoyed June, your imagination was brought to life, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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These kittens are indeed wild, but also magnificent June and you paid tribute to these cats here, much enjoyed June, your imagination was brought to life, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed this feline dreamy piece...
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I haven't seen the renga
in a while, June.
-A great image and
nice presentation.
-A well written poem
with good syllable count,
imagery, and alliteration.
-I like the idea behind it,
that kittens walk on the wild
side in their dreams and imagination.
-Well done. Have a good day.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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-I haven't seen the renga
in a while, June.
-A great image and
nice presentation.
-A well written poem
with good syllable count,
imagery, and alliteration.
-I like the idea behind it,
that kittens walk on the wild
side in their dreams and imagination.
-Well done. Have a good day.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you- glad you enjoyed this little piece of kitten fluff!
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You are welcome, and I did. The picture added to the whole idea, too:)