Street Talk
200 words12 total reviews
Comment from writer723
This story is cute and humorous. I got a real chuckle out of it. Your tale was clever in the usage of dialogue throughout. The conversation alone had the ability to carry the story through to the end. You also presented a good lesson on manners. Even someone being robbed should be spoken to and treated properly. I can only imagine a would-be mugger's reaction, which you presented quite well.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This story is cute and humorous. I got a real chuckle out of it. Your tale was clever in the usage of dialogue throughout. The conversation alone had the ability to carry the story through to the end. You also presented a good lesson on manners. Even someone being robbed should be spoken to and treated properly. I can only imagine a would-be mugger's reaction, which you presented quite well.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. A good lesson in theory,not sure if it would work in practice
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I also wanted to mention that the picture you used complimented the story very well. It told a dramatic tale of its own all by itself. LOL! The interaction and reactions of your two characters was priceless. The shocked mugger and the demanding victim. LOL!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like then tongue-in-cheek humorous scenerio. It reminds me a little of the "who's on first" scenerio. This account did have an unusual ending; certainly unpredictable. Clever.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I like then tongue-in-cheek humorous scenerio. It reminds me a little of the "who's on first" scenerio. This account did have an unusual ending; certainly unpredictable. Clever.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Now you have me laughing. Never thought of that and I love who's on first.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written two hundred word street mugging event. The thieve was clear dumb founded when he gets a lesson in good manners instead of stealing from others.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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A very well-written two hundred word street mugging event. The thieve was clear dumb founded when he gets a lesson in good manners instead of stealing from others.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is an interesting take on the contest, Mystery Writer. I enjoyed reading it. Your dialogue carries the story. I could hear it as I read. It is funny but in a serious way (hope that makes sense). There is good flow to your story. The picture is perfect.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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This is an interesting take on the contest, Mystery Writer. I enjoyed reading it. Your dialogue carries the story. I could hear it as I read. It is funny but in a serious way (hope that makes sense). There is good flow to your story. The picture is perfect.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks very much for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, such a great story. The older man seemed to have talked himself out of a mugging and the good mannered robber learned a lesson or three as well.
I got a good laugh and I wish you luck with the voters.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Ha, such a great story. The older man seemed to have talked himself out of a mugging and the good mannered robber learned a lesson or three as well.
I got a good laugh and I wish you luck with the voters.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad it gave you a laugh.
Comment from lancellot
Well, that was certainly a different take on the entire mugging and confusing your assailant thing. This was a unique idea for a short story and I'm sure it will appeal to many readers.
A very good idea for the contest. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Well, that was certainly a different take on the entire mugging and confusing your assailant thing. This was a unique idea for a short story and I'm sure it will appeal to many readers.
A very good idea for the contest. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I really liked how you ended this piece and how things didn't go in the mugger's favour. The dialogue in this piece flowed really well and it kept me engaged as I was reading it. I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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I really liked how you ended this piece and how things didn't go in the mugger's favour. The dialogue in this piece flowed really well and it kept me engaged as I was reading it. I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks for the very positive review and the six stars.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This story promotes the truth and true action in living, there are always two types of askance or raising question or placing questions or communication; only right words communicated rightly brings the right result; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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This story promotes the truth and true action in living, there are always two types of askance or raising question or placing questions or communication; only right words communicated rightly brings the right result; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from roof35
This is a different and rather unique story. Doing it in all dialog makes it difficult, but you managed beautifully. This is well written with no errors. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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This is a different and rather unique story. Doing it in all dialog makes it difficult, but you managed beautifully. This is well written with no errors. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, that's a tuffy:) so can you please politely rob me:) ""I certainly do. Like everything else there is a right way and a wrong way to do things. If I am to be mugged, I insist on it being done the right way. So, how should you ask?" Thank you for asking and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Wow, that's a tuffy:) so can you please politely rob me:) ""I certainly do. Like everything else there is a right way and a wrong way to do things. If I am to be mugged, I insist on it being done the right way. So, how should you ask?" Thank you for asking and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review and the six stars. Greatly appreciated.