Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "Welcome Lullaby"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
10 total reviews
Comment from karenina
On its own it seems less than impacting...reading what came before gives it a warmth and hearth and home feel that completes the word painting...
Important, I remind myself, to set it in context!--Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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On its own it seems less than impacting...reading what came before gives it a warmth and hearth and home feel that completes the word painting...
Important, I remind myself, to set it in context!--Karenina
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Karenina,
Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
Hola, Marival, I loved this, yes, indeed it is calm as a lullaby can be. I loved the whole concept and I will have to add to this chapter. Thank you so much for this initiative. Un abrazo. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Hola, Marival, I loved this, yes, indeed it is calm as a lullaby can be. I loved the whole concept and I will have to add to this chapter. Thank you so much for this initiative. Un abrazo. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, Ulla. Have a wonderful week!
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Poetic Friend
Oh yes it is. I just love the warmth (physically and mentally) that a dog gives. A dog is therapeutic for us, providing lullabies that ears enjoy.
Great usage of minimalism. This was a delight to read.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Oh yes it is. I just love the warmth (physically and mentally) that a dog gives. A dog is therapeutic for us, providing lullabies that ears enjoy.
Great usage of minimalism. This was a delight to read.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Have a wonderful week.
Gypsy
Comment from June Sargent
I was wondering how you were going to connect to the previous haiku. The sound of a pet's deep breathing can be quite relaxing - sweet lullaby of contentment. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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I was wondering how you were going to connect to the previous haiku. The sound of a pet's deep breathing can be quite relaxing - sweet lullaby of contentment. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, June.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Janetsue
I really like the thread going on here, as well as Mark's Chapter 59 that follows this posting of yours. Peace, comfort, safety, and trust all connect...especially in a close and beautiful relationship that is to be nourished and appreciated. :-)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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I really like the thread going on here, as well as Mark's Chapter 59 that follows this posting of yours. Peace, comfort, safety, and trust all connect...especially in a close and beautiful relationship that is to be nourished and appreciated. :-)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I'm pleased with the book. Everyone is doing a great job.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for giving us the context for this couplet and adding the black and white print accent. I liked your equating the dog's "heartbeat and breath" to a comforting "lullaby". Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you for giving us the context for this couplet and adding the black and white print accent. I liked your equating the dog's "heartbeat and breath" to a comforting "lullaby". Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, Joan. I'm happy you like this one. May you have a great weekend.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
This is a fun exercise in creative writing by various FanStory contributors.
The soft breath and calming heartbeat help us
to enjoy your sleepy time lullaby.
Mark
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Gypsy,
This is a fun exercise in creative writing by various FanStory contributors.
The soft breath and calming heartbeat help us
to enjoy your sleepy time lullaby.
Mark
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I just reviewed yours...it complements nicely.
Comment from amada
Gypsy, your 7/7 couplet follows very well the previous Lisa Wharton poem. Your lines inspired by another poet writing must be challenging. For sure, something to try...
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Gypsy, your 7/7 couplet follows very well the previous Lisa Wharton poem. Your lines inspired by another poet writing must be challenging. For sure, something to try...
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Yes, please, give it a try some time. Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
Great follow-up to the previous haiku of home life. And then yours echoes the soothing nature of the loyal dog's sleeping presence. Your book is getting great participation!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Great follow-up to the previous haiku of home life. And then yours echoes the soothing nature of the loyal dog's sleeping presence. Your book is getting great participation!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Yes, I'm very pleased. People seem to like Japanese poetry...my job is done... LoL
Thank you very much, Helen. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from lightink
Such a lovely way of showing the soothing effects of body contact with the loved ones (be it human or pet). I love that you called it 'lullaby'! Beautiful, sensitive writing!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Such a lovely way of showing the soothing effects of body contact with the loved ones (be it human or pet). I love that you called it 'lullaby'! Beautiful, sensitive writing!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, Jyoti. It's always good to hear from you. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy