Second Chances
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The magic cupboard"how live gives you lemonade
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(made her promised s/b promise; last sentence s/b period not question mark) Delightful whimsy--right from the child's point of view--believable and entertaining--love the magical exotic orchard and the close call with the fire. Well done! Cheers. LIZ
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(made her promised s/b promise; last sentence s/b period not question mark) Delightful whimsy--right from the child's point of view--believable and entertaining--love the magical exotic orchard and the close call with the fire. Well done! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
Comment from elchupakabra
This was a great story about your upbringing, I thought your voice shined clearly through in this piece. Great work overall and best of luck in the contest :) Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
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This was a great story about your upbringing, I thought your voice shined clearly through in this piece. Great work overall and best of luck in the contest :) Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was an excellent entry to this contest, written from a POV of a child. You describe many exciting things that made the children happy. Christmas presents, Uncle Tom's cabin; the typical children's curiosity which almost resulted in real fire. You did an excellent job, and this should make a mega entry in this contest.
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This was an excellent entry to this contest, written from a POV of a child. You describe many exciting things that made the children happy. Christmas presents, Uncle Tom's cabin; the typical children's curiosity which almost resulted in real fire. You did an excellent job, and this should make a mega entry in this contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
Comment from Mia Twysted
I like this take on the contest. You are looking back and not in the now. This way of telling the story also gives you a fence of learning a lesson that stuck with you. A wonderful reflection.
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I like this take on the contest. You are looking back and not in the now. This way of telling the story also gives you a fence of learning a lesson that stuck with you. A wonderful reflection.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Patty Palmer
How different things can be so different from one country to another. It's interesting to hear about traditions and compare them. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
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How different things can be so different from one country to another. It's interesting to hear about traditions and compare them. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I think that this lass needs to find something safer in a book to read to reenact. Guardian Angels were definitely watching over them. It also was good that momma didn't find out. I like this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
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I think that this lass needs to find something safer in a book to read to reenact. Guardian Angels were definitely watching over them. It also was good that momma didn't find out. I like this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from RShipp
"My sister and I used to believe that Santa Claus was real and that the oranges and grapefruit are Heaven's fruits." What a great Christmas memory!
I believe you have meet the requirements: Write a short story (100-500 words). The story must include a child's perspective of an object or situation.
Best of luck in the "Through the eyes of a child" writing contest.
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"My sister and I used to believe that Santa Claus was real and that the oranges and grapefruit are Heaven's fruits." What a great Christmas memory!
I believe you have meet the requirements: Write a short story (100-500 words). The story must include a child's perspective of an object or situation.
Best of luck in the "Through the eyes of a child" writing contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story about the magic cupboard that produce heavenly fruits and chocolates as seen through a child's eyes. An adventure that nearly ends in acp tragedy.
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A very well-written story about the magic cupboard that produce heavenly fruits and chocolates as seen through a child's eyes. An adventure that nearly ends in acp tragedy.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from writer723
I found this story very interesting and charming. I love to hear about other people's memories. I am especially intrigued to hear about life outside the U.S. because I like to learn about other cultures. It sounds like you and your sister had some fun adventures. In this case, a learning experience. You wrote about this period of your life very skillfully. I found myself drawn into your scenario with you. Best wishes in the contest.
Also, I like what you wrote about the fruits and the orchard box. The picture of the cat reminds me of Agatha Christie's detective, Hercule Poirot, with his mustaches.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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I found this story very interesting and charming. I love to hear about other people's memories. I am especially intrigued to hear about life outside the U.S. because I like to learn about other cultures. It sounds like you and your sister had some fun adventures. In this case, a learning experience. You wrote about this period of your life very skillfully. I found myself drawn into your scenario with you. Best wishes in the contest.
Also, I like what you wrote about the fruits and the orchard box. The picture of the cat reminds me of Agatha Christie's detective, Hercule Poirot, with his mustaches.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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I just love cats:) and they have been a constant joy in my childhood. Thank you for reading my little adventure.
Comment from lyenochka
It's an interesting story but the first two paragraphs are not necessary to the main story. I kept waiting to find oranges and chocolates but that was only to tell us about the wardrobe so I don't think you need that part. Good luck in the contest!
Comments:
the dead's used to get for Christmas presents (dads?) Surely not dead people!
In Romania was ok to live your kids (In Romania, it was okay to leave your kids)
I help my sister to get on (helped)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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It's an interesting story but the first two paragraphs are not necessary to the main story. I kept waiting to find oranges and chocolates but that was only to tell us about the wardrobe so I don't think you need that part. Good luck in the contest!
Comments:
the dead's used to get for Christmas presents (dads?) Surely not dead people!
In Romania was ok to live your kids (In Romania, it was okay to leave your kids)
I help my sister to get on (helped)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Well theoretically... he is dead:( but you are right:) I am always confused with these two. Oh, I must stop posting stuff at midnight, some of my mistakes are so childish, ufffa!